
1/5/2009 c9 rbt1980
I thought you could not apparated into Hogwarts ? what is the address to your website ?
I thought you could not apparated into Hogwarts ? what is the address to your website ?
1/5/2009 c8 rbt1980
Would not Casey family be waiting outside the platform ? They are muggles , so there is no way they could get on it ?
Would not Casey family be waiting outside the platform ? They are muggles , so there is no way they could get on it ?
1/5/2009 c7 rbt1980
I liked the part where Malfoy was turn into a gaint Ferret. But how and where did Bonnie get what she put in his drink .
I liked the part where Malfoy was turn into a gaint Ferret. But how and where did Bonnie get what she put in his drink .
1/2/2009 c27 TheDivaDivine
Although I liked the chapter and I know that you didn't want to get too graphic when it came to the sex talk. The only problem with how you describe it is that most people even after reading about the mechanics of sex still have questions. To say that I(Hermione)was only a little older than you when I first had sex with Ron and we knew that we were going to be together for the rest of our lives, although it was the truth, it only encourages Bonnie and Braton to proceed. Did you forget how strong a first love is when you wrote this chapter. Your first love is a very intense thing and for most people they never get over it. Both Ron and Hermione admitted that they can see how they feel about one another. That makes it worse. The methods that they will use to protect each other will only backfire like a rubber band. For some reason more thought should have gone into presenting the sex talk while still maintaining honesty needed in this situation.
Although I liked the chapter and I know that you didn't want to get too graphic when it came to the sex talk. The only problem with how you describe it is that most people even after reading about the mechanics of sex still have questions. To say that I(Hermione)was only a little older than you when I first had sex with Ron and we knew that we were going to be together for the rest of our lives, although it was the truth, it only encourages Bonnie and Braton to proceed. Did you forget how strong a first love is when you wrote this chapter. Your first love is a very intense thing and for most people they never get over it. Both Ron and Hermione admitted that they can see how they feel about one another. That makes it worse. The methods that they will use to protect each other will only backfire like a rubber band. For some reason more thought should have gone into presenting the sex talk while still maintaining honesty needed in this situation.
12/27/2008 c26
9Ape Regina 1993
Awesome story!
All three parts!
I love the connection between Braton and Bonnie!
Please update soon!

Awesome story!
All three parts!
I love the connection between Braton and Bonnie!
Please update soon!
9/17/2008 c26 dani
i seriously LOVE this story...im dying with anticipation!
i seriously LOVE this story...im dying with anticipation!
9/8/2008 c26 TheDivaDivine
I love the shy awkwardness and physical excitement that exist between Braton and Bonnie and how they brush it off to the fact that they weren't use to getting along with one another. They still are oblivious to the fact that love is growing between them. I also love how Braton is comforting Bonnie even though he does not know how to comfort because he never received much comfort as a child. I especially love the fact that Braton had almost forgot what it was like to have loving family and how hard he had to remember his mother giving him love. I love the truthful feelings of jealously and envy that he felt that all of Bonnie's siblings were given equal love and attention and he wasn't use to that. The way that you are expressing the mixness of strange and new emotions and how the characters interpret the motions at the moment is awe inspiring. Most adults writers are not good at expressing that.
I love the shy awkwardness and physical excitement that exist between Braton and Bonnie and how they brush it off to the fact that they weren't use to getting along with one another. They still are oblivious to the fact that love is growing between them. I also love how Braton is comforting Bonnie even though he does not know how to comfort because he never received much comfort as a child. I especially love the fact that Braton had almost forgot what it was like to have loving family and how hard he had to remember his mother giving him love. I love the truthful feelings of jealously and envy that he felt that all of Bonnie's siblings were given equal love and attention and he wasn't use to that. The way that you are expressing the mixness of strange and new emotions and how the characters interpret the motions at the moment is awe inspiring. Most adults writers are not good at expressing that.
9/7/2008 c26 Erica Pretel
OMG. that was so cute. I am dying for them to kiss already, I thought they were when they were watching the movie. I know you have to build up to it though. Nice job on the chapter. They are so good together. Can't wait for the next one. :)
OMG. that was so cute. I am dying for them to kiss already, I thought they were when they were watching the movie. I know you have to build up to it though. Nice job on the chapter. They are so good together. Can't wait for the next one. :)
9/6/2008 c26 sballLuvr5
aww i kind of like them together... i mean they have gone through a lot. great chapter, update soon!
Kristi
aww i kind of like them together... i mean they have gone through a lot. great chapter, update soon!
Kristi
8/21/2008 c25 sballLuvr5
great chapter... it really stinks that bonnie had to go through all of that... braton too... anyway, update soon!
Kristi
great chapter... it really stinks that bonnie had to go through all of that... braton too... anyway, update soon!
Kristi