for Somewhere other than Here4/10/2008 c22 
8auntiem911
HAHAHA!FINALLY DRACO GETS WHAT HE DESERVES!
*Regains composer*
That was the best chapter by far i must say. I can't to find out what happens next and i so happy the coin went in our(the readers) favor.
Morgan
8auntiem911HAHAHA!FINALLY DRACO GETS WHAT HE DESERVES!
*Regains composer*
That was the best chapter by far i must say. I can't to find out what happens next and i so happy the coin went in our(the readers) favor.
Morgan
4/10/2008 c22 10Avanell
Great update! Now for Bonnie's reunion home, hero Braton, and what will become of him? Can't wait! But isn't this a continuation of the island story? Was Hermione in school to make those coins? I'm confused...oh, well...writer's right to change things ;)
10AvanellGreat update! Now for Bonnie's reunion home, hero Braton, and what will become of him? Can't wait! But isn't this a continuation of the island story? Was Hermione in school to make those coins? I'm confused...oh, well...writer's right to change things ;)
4/4/2008 c21 8auntiem911
I LOVED IT! I am so happy to see that Braton found her and came to her rescue. One question though. Is Harry the one who gave him the cloak? I'm pretty sure but im not positive...
Morgan
8auntiem911I LOVED IT! I am so happy to see that Braton found her and came to her rescue. One question though. Is Harry the one who gave him the cloak? I'm pretty sure but im not positive...
Morgan
4/1/2008 c21 TheDivaDivine
This is a chapter that is difficult for me to critique. The content in the chapter was good. But ...whoa I don't even know if I am going to discribe it accurately. The emotional elements that should have been obvious in this chapter were lacking in depth. It is almost as if you were just explaining what happen from a 3rd party point of view. For example while you explain the fact of Braton discover Bonnie's body shocked him. The emotional depth was lacking. I would have felt many things if I was him rage, horror, outrage and how he had to pull himself together quickly by not revealing who he was. You state all those things but I just wasn't feeling the depth of his emotions. Near the end when you describe the hugging scene of Bonnie being grateful of Braton's help. You did a better job stating how hugs were rare for him and how he felt awkward doing it but their was no rush of emotion as to how good the hug made him feel considering he has always had a crush on her. Now the evention of the Scarmantis and Anticrucio's potion was very clever. Good chapter no doubt but could have been better at writing the emotional depth of Bratons feelings since it was told from his point of view.
This is a chapter that is difficult for me to critique. The content in the chapter was good. But ...whoa I don't even know if I am going to discribe it accurately. The emotional elements that should have been obvious in this chapter were lacking in depth. It is almost as if you were just explaining what happen from a 3rd party point of view. For example while you explain the fact of Braton discover Bonnie's body shocked him. The emotional depth was lacking. I would have felt many things if I was him rage, horror, outrage and how he had to pull himself together quickly by not revealing who he was. You state all those things but I just wasn't feeling the depth of his emotions. Near the end when you describe the hugging scene of Bonnie being grateful of Braton's help. You did a better job stating how hugs were rare for him and how he felt awkward doing it but their was no rush of emotion as to how good the hug made him feel considering he has always had a crush on her. Now the evention of the Scarmantis and Anticrucio's potion was very clever. Good chapter no doubt but could have been better at writing the emotional depth of Bratons feelings since it was told from his point of view.
4/1/2008 c21 sballLuvr5
thank goodness braton found her! this was a really great chap, update soon!
Kristi
thank goodness braton found her! this was a really great chap, update soon!
Kristi
4/1/2008 c21 marvelous-fanwriter
Aw that was such a nice chap. Finally Bonniew gets help and from Braton no less. I hope they get out safely and that bastard Draco gets what he deserves. Can't wait for the next chap!
Aw that was such a nice chap. Finally Bonniew gets help and from Braton no less. I hope they get out safely and that bastard Draco gets what he deserves. Can't wait for the next chap!
3/25/2008 c20 sballLuvr5
omg that was so sad, i almost cried... i hope braton finds her really soon. update soon!
Kristi
p.s. i know how school is... it sucks the life out of you! :(
omg that was so sad, i almost cried... i hope braton finds her really soon. update soon!
Kristi
p.s. i know how school is... it sucks the life out of you! :(
3/24/2008 c20 1laurenloo72
hey! awesome story! i like just read all three of them in a row lol. took me 3 hours lol:) i luv how in the first one when like ron and hermione are having sex and all that they seem like theyre 11. i luv bonnie too shes so much like hermione but better and funnier like ron lol. and its funny how draco and cho got married! u do mean cho chang right? lol. he scares me now tho i feel so bad for braton. :( i luv it tho its addicting :):) u should right more bout ginny i like her! and casey! and does blake like have anything to do with the kidnappin or anythin? idk he seems suspicious like lol. and i think he should b someones kid like parvati and seamus or something like that lol. anyways awesome story! i luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv it! update soon! -lauren :):):):)
1laurenloo72hey! awesome story! i like just read all three of them in a row lol. took me 3 hours lol:) i luv how in the first one when like ron and hermione are having sex and all that they seem like theyre 11. i luv bonnie too shes so much like hermione but better and funnier like ron lol. and its funny how draco and cho got married! u do mean cho chang right? lol. he scares me now tho i feel so bad for braton. :( i luv it tho its addicting :):) u should right more bout ginny i like her! and casey! and does blake like have anything to do with the kidnappin or anythin? idk he seems suspicious like lol. and i think he should b someones kid like parvati and seamus or something like that lol. anyways awesome story! i luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv luv it! update soon! -lauren :):):):)
3/24/2008 c20 TheDivaDivine
I don't understand why Ron is unable to used his put-outer that he recieved as a gift from Dumbledore. So long as someone that he knows calls his name he could used the put-outer to find them. That would be the obvious solution. But maybe you did not want this story to be too simple. Maybe Braton has to be the hero in this story and I appreciate and respect that. Still it is a fascinating story and I would be curious as the when and how they discover Bonnie.
I don't understand why Ron is unable to used his put-outer that he recieved as a gift from Dumbledore. So long as someone that he knows calls his name he could used the put-outer to find them. That would be the obvious solution. But maybe you did not want this story to be too simple. Maybe Braton has to be the hero in this story and I appreciate and respect that. Still it is a fascinating story and I would be curious as the when and how they discover Bonnie.
3/23/2008 c20 10Avanell
I hope Draco's son finds her...and does the right thing! Somehow...can't wait for the next update.
10AvanellI hope Draco's son finds her...and does the right thing! Somehow...can't wait for the next update.
3/21/2008 c19 2xMegx
really good story. Please Please Please Please Please Please update soon. :-:-):-):-):-):-)
2xMegxreally good story. Please Please Please Please Please Please update soon. :-:-):-):-):-):-)
3/13/2008 c19 confusiondullsion
whens the new chapter? i'm dieing of wait here... ;-)
whens the new chapter? i'm dieing of wait here... ;-)
2/24/2008 c19 gabriella
your writing is really good & getting better, you just need more details & longer chapters explaining more. please update soon as possible!
your writing is really good & getting better, you just need more details & longer chapters explaining more. please update soon as possible!
2/14/2008 c19 greeneyedlovers
Aw poor Bonnie & Hermione. I can't wait till Braton saves Bonnie & also more Casey x Trevor. Ha. You should make a chapter about Valentine's Day although it would take awhile. Just a suggestion. At least please update soon.
Aw poor Bonnie & Hermione. I can't wait till Braton saves Bonnie & also more Casey x Trevor. Ha. You should make a chapter about Valentine's Day although it would take awhile. Just a suggestion. At least please update soon.