for just another MWPP and Lil12/5/2018 c1 
191Qoheleth
Dear Spirit:
I note that this identical story forms the first chapter of your other story "Friends Like These - and Maybe a Little Bit More". Is there a reason you posted this twice? I thought that was against site rules.
Sincerely,
Qoheleth
191QohelethDear Spirit:
I note that this identical story forms the first chapter of your other story "Friends Like These - and Maybe a Little Bit More". Is there a reason you posted this twice? I thought that was against site rules.
Sincerely,
Qoheleth
9/29/2005 c1 me
first, it's lily not lilly. second, what on earth is going on? im so lost.
first, it's lily not lilly. second, what on earth is going on? im so lost.
9/29/2005 c1 me
first, it's lily not lilly. second, what on earth is going on? im so lost.
first, it's lily not lilly. second, what on earth is going on? im so lost.
4/29/2005 c1 Tired of Lazy People
To quote someone else:
The letter u is not a word,
EIEIO!
Spell it out, you stupid turd,
EIEIO!
With a y up front,
And an o next door,
Here a y,
There an o,
At the front a y o,
The letter u is not a word,
EIEIO!
...don't expect people to care about your story if you can't even bother to spell out the most elementary words you can ever learn. What's next, dg and ct? Do real books look like this? Why are you expecting people to praise you for no effort? (And why are people DOING it?)
Take pride in your words, because we don't know anything about you but this. And from this, it doesn't look good.
To quote someone else:
The letter u is not a word,
EIEIO!
Spell it out, you stupid turd,
EIEIO!
With a y up front,
And an o next door,
Here a y,
There an o,
At the front a y o,
The letter u is not a word,
EIEIO!
...don't expect people to care about your story if you can't even bother to spell out the most elementary words you can ever learn. What's next, dg and ct? Do real books look like this? Why are you expecting people to praise you for no effort? (And why are people DOING it?)
Take pride in your words, because we don't know anything about you but this. And from this, it doesn't look good.
11/25/2001 c1 summersun
excellent!
excellent!
11/19/2001 c1 8Inactive
..i'm sorry, but that was very poor, try to improve on spelling, grammar and puncutation.
8Inactive..i'm sorry, but that was very poor, try to improve on spelling, grammar and puncutation.
10/5/2001 c1 angelcuz
ok
ok
9/7/2001 c1 1Aurianna Parker
HA HA HA! (more laughter) I caught you in a Buffy quote, I caught you in a Buffy quote! Very well used, by the way. For those readers who didn't see it, I'll keep the secret alive. Cool story - got a lot of potential! You might want to pay more attention to grammer and spelling. It got a little confusing at times. just work on making it flow, but other than that - awesome start, post more!
1Aurianna ParkerHA HA HA! (more laughter) I caught you in a Buffy quote, I caught you in a Buffy quote! Very well used, by the way. For those readers who didn't see it, I'll keep the secret alive. Cool story - got a lot of potential! You might want to pay more attention to grammer and spelling. It got a little confusing at times. just work on making it flow, but other than that - awesome start, post more!
8/28/2001 c1 4Nazgulette
Wow good start. Write more. Can't think of a title though. How 'bought "The passing of time" or something overly dramatic and catchy like that.
4NazguletteWow good start. Write more. Can't think of a title though. How 'bought "The passing of time" or something overly dramatic and catchy like that.
8/24/2001 c1 3phoenixvscrazysnow
ok i love it write so much more please but one thing the name is spelt sirius as in sir-i-us ok well cya
3phoenixvscrazysnowok i love it write so much more please but one thing the name is spelt sirius as in sir-i-us ok well cya
7/15/2001 c1 Shelly
My recomendation for the the next part would be for James to tell Voldie to kill him instead. Then Voldie looks deep into Lily and James' eyes and senses that there is more than friendship between them, and he decides to use that to his advantage...
My recomendation for the the next part would be for James to tell Voldie to kill him instead. Then Voldie looks deep into Lily and James' eyes and senses that there is more than friendship between them, and he decides to use that to his advantage...
6/17/2001 c1 kaylana
NNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO... well we know none of them can die yet. Very good story, write more soon.
NNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO... well we know none of them can die yet. Very good story, write more soon.
6/15/2001 c1 3Liaska
:) Go Aurora! You finally got a story out- tis good, methinks. At last i get to write a review for *your* story-coz you reviewed mine (thanks!) I like how you put Alanna in it (heheh- to anyone who is wondering she is a Tamora Pierce character) When will the next chapter be up and when will you write a Tamora Pierce fanfic? :) Good luck and good writing. I hope you post some more sometime. :D Liaska
3Liaska:) Go Aurora! You finally got a story out- tis good, methinks. At last i get to write a review for *your* story-coz you reviewed mine (thanks!) I like how you put Alanna in it (heheh- to anyone who is wondering she is a Tamora Pierce character) When will the next chapter be up and when will you write a Tamora Pierce fanfic? :) Good luck and good writing. I hope you post some more sometime. :D Liaska
6/15/2001 c1 lisa
well...its okay i guess...very confusing, and have you ever heard of paragraphs? and sirius' name is spelled S-I-R-I-U-S
well...its okay i guess...very confusing, and have you ever heard of paragraphs? and sirius' name is spelled S-I-R-I-U-S
6/13/2001 c1 ljfanatic1
LONGER CHAPTERS, AND MORE OF THEM!
please.
*ljfanatic1*
LONGER CHAPTERS, AND MORE OF THEM!
please.
*ljfanatic1*