for An uninvited guest12/22/2006 c9 
11Elevanya
Long chapters are good, I thought Darren would be a bit more involved in the events instead of just standing back and watching, but that might have been what you wanted, I don't know. Update soon!
11ElevanyaLong chapters are good, I thought Darren would be a bit more involved in the events instead of just standing back and watching, but that might have been what you wanted, I don't know. Update soon!
12/22/2006 c9 6GoWashTheLights
Ooh nice way to end the chapter! I usually, and I've said this, don't like crossovers, but when Darren comes into play, it's all good! I can't wait for the next chapter!
6GoWashTheLightsOoh nice way to end the chapter! I usually, and I've said this, don't like crossovers, but when Darren comes into play, it's all good! I can't wait for the next chapter!
11/29/2006 c8 6EnforcerKaleil
this is great! sorry i havn't reviewed sooner but... well you how life goes. i love the idea of Darren just getting to hogwarts by chance. and don't worry so much about your spelling. just do your best! at lest thats what people tell me. like i said great story! love you lots.
keg369
6EnforcerKaleilthis is great! sorry i havn't reviewed sooner but... well you how life goes. i love the idea of Darren just getting to hogwarts by chance. and don't worry so much about your spelling. just do your best! at lest thats what people tell me. like i said great story! love you lots.
keg369
11/28/2006 c3 none-yo
Oh My God I had to stop reading this, the spelling errors were that horrible. If you must know it's not Gryffingdore it's Gryffindor. Now please fix before my eyes are burned out!
Oh My God I had to stop reading this, the spelling errors were that horrible. If you must know it's not Gryffingdore it's Gryffindor. Now please fix before my eyes are burned out!
10/30/2006 c7 anon
Please. Give up on writing "as fast as you can" and put some effort into writing well.
Spellcheck is not optional. It's a requirement before you can post here. In fact it's the first requirement. You can be reported for abuse for not using it. It's blindingly obvious that you are not using it.
What on earth would your teachers say if you handed in work persented this carelessly? Now consider that they get paid to read your work. Nobody here does. The good points of your story are completely overshadowed by basic, pre-teen grammar errors and typos, several on almost every line. Most six year olds can spell "his" - it doesn't have an apostrophe in it. Is this the level of literacy you want to present yourself as having? You're not doing yourself or your ideas justice.
This needs a lot more work before you even send it to a beta, let alone post it here. Take it down, put it through spellcheck, proofread it yourself, look up unfamiliar words instead of using (sp?), fix all the problems you find, get someone else who's reasonably literate to proofread it, and then fix everything they find. If it isn't several hundred mistakes per chapter, you haven't looked hard enough.
Please. Give up on writing "as fast as you can" and put some effort into writing well.
Spellcheck is not optional. It's a requirement before you can post here. In fact it's the first requirement. You can be reported for abuse for not using it. It's blindingly obvious that you are not using it.
What on earth would your teachers say if you handed in work persented this carelessly? Now consider that they get paid to read your work. Nobody here does. The good points of your story are completely overshadowed by basic, pre-teen grammar errors and typos, several on almost every line. Most six year olds can spell "his" - it doesn't have an apostrophe in it. Is this the level of literacy you want to present yourself as having? You're not doing yourself or your ideas justice.
This needs a lot more work before you even send it to a beta, let alone post it here. Take it down, put it through spellcheck, proofread it yourself, look up unfamiliar words instead of using (sp?), fix all the problems you find, get someone else who's reasonably literate to proofread it, and then fix everything they find. If it isn't several hundred mistakes per chapter, you haven't looked hard enough.
10/24/2006 c6 AngelKitten23
Haha that's so funny. I love this story. I usually don't like crossovers, but when it comes to Darren, oh man I'm all for it. Can't wait for the next chapter! GJ! And who cares about spelling. 's not like I noticed, really, I don't notice much.
Haha that's so funny. I love this story. I usually don't like crossovers, but when it comes to Darren, oh man I'm all for it. Can't wait for the next chapter! GJ! And who cares about spelling. 's not like I noticed, really, I don't notice much.