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4/23/2007 c4 5FernsFollyFiction
Oh this is good. so they have alter-egos? Oh well love the stoyr. Update soon. pleasies and thankies.
10/27/2006 c4 Dacen Jace
I agree with another reviewer. Your characters really sound like Mary-Sues even in the summary. You might want to change that. Your grammar mistakes have been mentioned already.

I shall now touch upon something the last reviwer didn't. Date rape. Don't do it. You wouldn't be able to write it properly as you would have to include the psychological effects. It's a very sensitive subject to write about and it affects people deeply. Most people just write it off as a romantic experience that both parties involved enjoyed. It doesn't work that way. Rape is not romantic. It is not enjoyable. It would not make a good idea for a chapter.

That's all I can think of.
10/23/2006 c4 Psychoticmonkey
WHAT ABOUT THE RAPING? AND HOMO? AND THE FLYING- oh wait... tat was me...
10/21/2006 c2 SummerRuby
You make your OC's sound like total Mary-Sues in your summary. Also, there are a lot of mispellings and grammar errors in both your story and summary.
10/6/2006 c3 8Psychoticmonkey
YOU ARE SUCH A BUTTMUNCH! YOU HACKED MY ANIMESPIRAL ACCOUNT? WHA THE HELL! JUST MAKE HIM RAPE HER!
10/5/2006 c2 Alexa
Not a very good story...You have a problem with Bush don't you. Bye.

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