for What Might Have Been3/19/2011 c1 Guest
awesome. cant wait for more
awesome. cant wait for more
12/11/2010 c1 BN
A flame is a flame, mate, and THAT was a flame.
A flame is a flame, mate, and THAT was a flame.
12/13/2008 c1 Al-non
It is intriguing as to how you have constructed this piece. From your writting a new view, rather a new perspective, emerges. The story appears to be writting with style and intergrates well into the storyline of the movie.
However, it would be interesting for you to try writting something completely original, without actually having the movies as refrence. I would recommend, to improve your skills as a writer, to attempt to inspire a entirely original storyline from your cleary great imagination.
All the best, I will be watching your progress,
Al-non
It is intriguing as to how you have constructed this piece. From your writting a new view, rather a new perspective, emerges. The story appears to be writting with style and intergrates well into the storyline of the movie.
However, it would be interesting for you to try writting something completely original, without actually having the movies as refrence. I would recommend, to improve your skills as a writer, to attempt to inspire a entirely original storyline from your cleary great imagination.
All the best, I will be watching your progress,
Al-non
12/9/2008 c1 Al-anon
I found the first chapter kinda boring. Your grammar is pretty much perfect (a lot better than most) but I find the way you wrote it mechanical. I'm sure it'll pick up. Good luck.
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Ficken auf, Miststuck
I found the first chapter kinda boring. Your grammar is pretty much perfect (a lot better than most) but I find the way you wrote it mechanical. I'm sure it'll pick up. Good luck.
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Ficken auf, Miststuck
7/12/2008 c1 LovingBlackParadise
ok i want to know what alan looks like and i want rouge to be very very powerful if at all possible... hope shes the one who gets pregnant or already is pregnant somehow and they all wonder how she got in cause shes pregnant that would be cool but i like ur story cant wait and i would love it if u wouldnt put her accent in the story its kinda is a little confusing to read i might get used to it though
ok i want to know what alan looks like and i want rouge to be very very powerful if at all possible... hope shes the one who gets pregnant or already is pregnant somehow and they all wonder how she got in cause shes pregnant that would be cool but i like ur story cant wait and i would love it if u wouldnt put her accent in the story its kinda is a little confusing to read i might get used to it though
7/27/2007 c1 
4Cotton Candi Drug
Well, this is very well written. Marie and Logan's characters were perfect. I hope you update soon.
4Cotton Candi DrugWell, this is very well written. Marie and Logan's characters were perfect. I hope you update soon.
5/27/2007 c1 11laenamoradadeROGUE
Im confused. Come again on Alan's powers? And how exactly do they work? I'm intrigued, and, what happened b Logan where is he?
11laenamoradadeROGUEIm confused. Come again on Alan's powers? And how exactly do they work? I'm intrigued, and, what happened b Logan where is he?
10/12/2006 c1 Basins ska assess ja
Dude, that woz long... and good, and well 8/10
kep writing
~mintie1
Dude, that woz long... and good, and well 8/10
kep writing
~mintie1