for Unattainable12/5/2006 c5 
4Believe the Lie
Gah, cliffhanger! I like how slow you've been taking this story so far, it adds a little more depth to the characters and kinda gives the reader a chance to figure out what's going on before jumping into a relationship between the characters. Excellent so far, I look forward to reading more.
4Believe the LieGah, cliffhanger! I like how slow you've been taking this story so far, it adds a little more depth to the characters and kinda gives the reader a chance to figure out what's going on before jumping into a relationship between the characters. Excellent so far, I look forward to reading more.
11/17/2006 c3 anon123456789000
I dont' think I understand this chapter
also, chapter 4 on here seems to be this same chapter on for a second time
at least I think *shrugs*
I like the first chap, but I don't get this one
I dont' think I understand this chapter
also, chapter 4 on here seems to be this same chapter on for a second time
at least I think *shrugs*
I like the first chap, but I don't get this one
11/16/2006 c4 11Serpentira
I'm liking your idea and all, but chap. 3 & $ look identical at the moment. Just thought I'd point that out.
11SerpentiraI'm liking your idea and all, but chap. 3 & $ look identical at the moment. Just thought I'd point that out.
11/16/2006 c4 ShyOfLife
it has good potential but the chapters are too short, chapter one isn't even a chapter, and you posted chapter 3 twice.
it has good potential but the chapters are too short, chapter one isn't even a chapter, and you posted chapter 3 twice.
11/8/2006 c3 4Believe the Lie
Just thought I'd let you know that there's at least one other person who's following your story. I love the way you write. Something about your style caught me when I read the first and second chapters. Excellent chapter. I won't tell you to write more or to update soon, I'll merely suggest it.
4Believe the LieJust thought I'd let you know that there's at least one other person who's following your story. I love the way you write. Something about your style caught me when I read the first and second chapters. Excellent chapter. I won't tell you to write more or to update soon, I'll merely suggest it.