for One Way to Get Ed to Drink His Milk7/29/2011 c1 Soulsnacker13
great story!
i loled so hard!
at 1 point i thought she was gonna give it to him mouth to mouth...just my opinion =) good story!
great story!
i loled so hard!
at 1 point i thought she was gonna give it to him mouth to mouth...just my opinion =) good story!
12/28/2010 c1 
1Nightfall's-Melody
Well..thadd...PFFT!
!
*calms down*
*glares add Winry*
Yewwh luckyy- okay, moving ohn! LUVSIES! -fave, fave, fave, fave,fave, fave, fave, fave, fave, fave, fave fave, fa- BOOM! Oops...iee broke my computer! ^^' Still luvsies!
oops...iee broke
1Nightfall's-MelodyWell..thadd...PFFT!
!
*calms down*
*glares add Winry*
Yewwh luckyy- okay, moving ohn! LUVSIES! -fave, fave, fave, fave,fave, fave, fave, fave, fave, fave, fave fave, fa- BOOM! Oops...iee broke my computer! ^^' Still luvsies!
oops...iee broke
7/31/2010 c1 1CosplayerMew
ahahaha soooo funny and cute! yes it is very short-
Ed:I'M NOT SHORT! WHO YOU CALLIN' A SHORTY!
i didn't call you short! anyway i LOVED IT!
...and know Black Hayate doesn't have to be eaten! ^-^
1CosplayerMewahahaha soooo funny and cute! yes it is very short-
Ed:I'M NOT SHORT! WHO YOU CALLIN' A SHORTY!
i didn't call you short! anyway i LOVED IT!
...and know Black Hayate doesn't have to be eaten! ^-^
3/4/2010 c1 1Persaurn
My first thought on this story was one word -
KARUSHIFAH. THE TALKING FIRE.
It was cute, though~
1PersaurnMy first thought on this story was one word -
KARUSHIFAH. THE TALKING FIRE.
It was cute, though~
10/23/2007 c1 1CrazyBlueFlamingo
Awsome! Its so cute! Great job, by the way, i'm one of CPF's friends(Anjali). She's the one who showed me this story. My one advice would be to change lines for each person speaking. Just to make it alittle clearer and easier to read
1CrazyBlueFlamingoAwsome! Its so cute! Great job, by the way, i'm one of CPF's friends(Anjali). She's the one who showed me this story. My one advice would be to change lines for each person speaking. Just to make it alittle clearer and easier to read
10/19/2007 c1 104CinderellaAtTheBall
Hey, M, it's Anjali, from Bugsy! I love love love love this story! Not only is it cute, it's just...i don't know! You gotta love it! Good job, keep writing!
104CinderellaAtTheBallHey, M, it's Anjali, from Bugsy! I love love love love this story! Not only is it cute, it's just...i don't know! You gotta love it! Good job, keep writing!
8/19/2007 c1 17Tears of Eternal Darkness
ed and milk; classic! this is a very good idea but it seemed a bit rushed. try making it longer and don't forget to use puncuation in the speechmarks. also, start a new line when someone new speaks, looks better and is easier to read. well done though. good luck.
=^-^=
17Tears of Eternal Darknessed and milk; classic! this is a very good idea but it seemed a bit rushed. try making it longer and don't forget to use puncuation in the speechmarks. also, start a new line when someone new speaks, looks better and is easier to read. well done though. good luck.
=^-^=
12/14/2006 c1 27Mayura-Hikari-090
Heh heh Very smooth...tee hee. Why won't Ed just drink his darn milk? He's soo stubborn! Love this story, great job! EDXWIN 4EVER!
27Mayura-Hikari-090Heh heh Very smooth...tee hee. Why won't Ed just drink his darn milk? He's soo stubborn! Love this story, great job! EDXWIN 4EVER!
11/15/2006 c1 5Astarion'sTav
Hey this is Rachel from Carver love your story i thought it was totally awesome! O yeah and i read it to my friend and she said that calicer sounded like calcium which reminded her of milk lmao! Again I totally loved it! I'm partial to the whole winry/ed so i didnt mind the pairring and u lied to me it was on the 3ed page u bad person lol jk. Keep writing and I'll keep reading ok! Keep in touch also ok and I really hope to see you next year at my school! :D!
Ciao
Rachel
5Astarion'sTavHey this is Rachel from Carver love your story i thought it was totally awesome! O yeah and i read it to my friend and she said that calicer sounded like calcium which reminded her of milk lmao! Again I totally loved it! I'm partial to the whole winry/ed so i didnt mind the pairring and u lied to me it was on the 3ed page u bad person lol jk. Keep writing and I'll keep reading ok! Keep in touch also ok and I really hope to see you next year at my school! :D!
Ciao
Rachel
11/8/2006 c1 DemetriaMatsuyama
This fic was sweet too! Love 'em since they're so short and I was surprised at them kissing! So cute like your other fic! Keep it up and you could make it longer too you know? If you just think about it, longer is sweet too! But I'm not flaming, don't worry! Don't let Gluttony eat Hayate! No! So anyways, good work!
Kaiya
This fic was sweet too! Love 'em since they're so short and I was surprised at them kissing! So cute like your other fic! Keep it up and you could make it longer too you know? If you just think about it, longer is sweet too! But I'm not flaming, don't worry! Don't let Gluttony eat Hayate! No! So anyways, good work!
Kaiya
10/31/2006 c1 14Asha3
Hi!
Classic idea, Ed and Milk is just too cute. Can't get enough of them. ^^
I hope I didn't sound snobbish, but you kinda rush it. Just a suggestion, you should make it longer, take you time to write what you're thinking and create the atmosphere in your story. I'd like to think that writing a story is kinda like cooking, prepare the ingredients well, and cook them step by step in the right order. Reader is your number one priority, so you have to make sure they're comfortable reading your story.
This is quite okay for a first story. I think you have potential, you should write more, you'll pick up most of it on the way.
Ganbatte!
P.S: Calcifer... reminded me of Howl's Moving Castle. ^^
14Asha3Hi!
Classic idea, Ed and Milk is just too cute. Can't get enough of them. ^^
I hope I didn't sound snobbish, but you kinda rush it. Just a suggestion, you should make it longer, take you time to write what you're thinking and create the atmosphere in your story. I'd like to think that writing a story is kinda like cooking, prepare the ingredients well, and cook them step by step in the right order. Reader is your number one priority, so you have to make sure they're comfortable reading your story.
This is quite okay for a first story. I think you have potential, you should write more, you'll pick up most of it on the way.
Ganbatte!
P.S: Calcifer... reminded me of Howl's Moving Castle. ^^
10/29/2006 c1 6CatsEyeFlashlight
very sneaky! I'm a sucker 4 EdWin fics, so this was just fine! I'll save you Black Hayate!
6CatsEyeFlashlightvery sneaky! I'm a sucker 4 EdWin fics, so this was just fine! I'll save you Black Hayate!