for Plans5/12/2007 c1 
22Starving For Attention
Meep!
Ilovedthat.
Gahh.
Write more.
I mean, more stories like this.
I shall now search thee's profile to find more.
If I don't finally, you best get crackin on that new story. ;)
22Starving For AttentionMeep!
Ilovedthat.
Gahh.
Write more.
I mean, more stories like this.
I shall now search thee's profile to find more.
If I don't finally, you best get crackin on that new story. ;)
11/2/2006 c1 live-and-die
good story so far. pretty OOC, you should work on that. at least your chapters are long, that's really good. hope u update often... you need to make sure you get past and present, u use some present tense, when most of this story is in the past tense, so it's pretty confusing.
i also have a question, who said "...Myplace."? i'm guessing it was house, but author's always confuse me.
so ya... update soon!
good story so far. pretty OOC, you should work on that. at least your chapters are long, that's really good. hope u update often... you need to make sure you get past and present, u use some present tense, when most of this story is in the past tense, so it's pretty confusing.
i also have a question, who said "...Myplace."? i'm guessing it was house, but author's always confuse me.
so ya... update soon!
11/1/2006 c1 22GabbyAbby
It was a very good story. But there are a lot of places that you are having a problem with your verbs. There is past and present all together and it kind of made me read a couple of sentences over and over again.
If you want I could fix it, but that's only if you want.
Again very good. I loved the handcuffs.
22GabbyAbbyIt was a very good story. But there are a lot of places that you are having a problem with your verbs. There is past and present all together and it kind of made me read a couple of sentences over and over again.
If you want I could fix it, but that's only if you want.
Again very good. I loved the handcuffs.