for War at the Yule Ball2/18/2007 c1 ReviewsGalore
Story: 7.5/10. The story flowed very well and this is an interesting scene to choose, but I honestly felt like the majority of the fic was lifted straight from the book. You could have done more to differentiate Hermione's POV from Harry's, I think. For example, you could have had more before she comes up and talks to Ron and Harry.
Characters: 8/10. No one seems out of character, but they don't really have a chance to be. I think one of the ways you could have differentiated this from the books would have been to delve a little more closely into Hermione's inner thoughts and personality.
Creativity: 5/10. I like the scene that you chose, but SO much of this is taken from GOF.
Writing: 9/10. You are obviously a good writer and I really liked some of the descriptions that I saw in your bits or writing.
Believability: 9/10. The events of the story are essentially believable and I think that you did a good job of pulling this story off in general. I think that Hermione could be a little more Hermione-ish, though she certainly isn't OOC.
Overall: 7.75/10. You write really nicely and I don't think that any of your interpretations are incorrect. My main problem, as you already know, is that you failed to take many opportunities to make this fic distinct from what is in the books.
Story: 7.5/10. The story flowed very well and this is an interesting scene to choose, but I honestly felt like the majority of the fic was lifted straight from the book. You could have done more to differentiate Hermione's POV from Harry's, I think. For example, you could have had more before she comes up and talks to Ron and Harry.
Characters: 8/10. No one seems out of character, but they don't really have a chance to be. I think one of the ways you could have differentiated this from the books would have been to delve a little more closely into Hermione's inner thoughts and personality.
Creativity: 5/10. I like the scene that you chose, but SO much of this is taken from GOF.
Writing: 9/10. You are obviously a good writer and I really liked some of the descriptions that I saw in your bits or writing.
Believability: 9/10. The events of the story are essentially believable and I think that you did a good job of pulling this story off in general. I think that Hermione could be a little more Hermione-ish, though she certainly isn't OOC.
Overall: 7.75/10. You write really nicely and I don't think that any of your interpretations are incorrect. My main problem, as you already know, is that you failed to take many opportunities to make this fic distinct from what is in the books.
11/6/2006 c1 
8sarah chandler
OMG, i loved it. will you be adding more? i hope so! it was really good and really well written! keep it up!
8sarah chandlerOMG, i loved it. will you be adding more? i hope so! it was really good and really well written! keep it up!
11/5/2006 c1 16amber-chick
hey, glad 2 see you got it up!
u no ur really good at the whole taking scenes and soing it in another POV. u should do them more often! like the shrieking shack thing in sirius' POV or...i dunno, u get the idea!
anyways, liked it a lot, cant wait to read more! r u working on any others?
16amber-chickhey, glad 2 see you got it up!
u no ur really good at the whole taking scenes and soing it in another POV. u should do them more often! like the shrieking shack thing in sirius' POV or...i dunno, u get the idea!
anyways, liked it a lot, cant wait to read more! r u working on any others?