for Harry Potter: Truth in Revelations11/30/2006 c2 Beth5572
I would love to see want you write next. I also hope Harry and his family will became the family the should have been. I also hope Harry makes whose who hurt him to pay for it.
Thank you,
Terri
I would love to see want you write next. I also hope Harry and his family will became the family the should have been. I also hope Harry makes whose who hurt him to pay for it.
Thank you,
Terri
11/30/2006 c2 
2clt
I like the story so far. Might I make a suggesstion on a few things?
First, for the Weasley family, don't put ARthur in the same category as Molly, Ron and Ginny. I think it is a given that Gred and Forge will be on his side, but if you put Molly and ARthur at odds with each other it might make things more interesting.
Second, Make Nevill a really close friend in a unexpected way. I got the hint of Luna earlier and of Hermione as well.
Thirdly, please keep Lupin true to Harry, but you might want to put Tonks in with "bumblebee" (sniggers) to make things a bit interesting.
Lastly, don't make this H/Hr ship. that tends to be a bit too 'cliche' in my opinion.
Keep up the great work.
2cltI like the story so far. Might I make a suggesstion on a few things?
First, for the Weasley family, don't put ARthur in the same category as Molly, Ron and Ginny. I think it is a given that Gred and Forge will be on his side, but if you put Molly and ARthur at odds with each other it might make things more interesting.
Second, Make Nevill a really close friend in a unexpected way. I got the hint of Luna earlier and of Hermione as well.
Thirdly, please keep Lupin true to Harry, but you might want to put Tonks in with "bumblebee" (sniggers) to make things a bit interesting.
Lastly, don't make this H/Hr ship. that tends to be a bit too 'cliche' in my opinion.
Keep up the great work.
11/30/2006 c2 3LandUnderWave
'A lemon drop eating version of Voldemort'... XD What I think is really funny in this chapter (besides the above quote) is that once he claims his heratige most of the high-up wizarding world is running around panicing. Thanks!
Lilz
3LandUnderWave'A lemon drop eating version of Voldemort'... XD What I think is really funny in this chapter (besides the above quote) is that once he claims his heratige most of the high-up wizarding world is running around panicing. Thanks!
Lilz
11/30/2006 c2 The Vole Shepherd
Although it is a good story in concept, there are a few things that should possibly be changed.
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Why is Harry related to all these people? I could possibly see the Potter and Black (even Weasley) houses, but it seems unlikely at best that he is related to all these different houses. We know that his mother was from a Muggle ancestry, and that his father was the pureblood side.
Also, why would he be elected the heir of houses that are still alive? Isn't the point of inheritance that the person has to die first and leaves them in your will in order for you to inherit anything? A furtherer note: why would he own Hogwarts?
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On a grammar note, please space out that big block paragraph of doom on the second chapter.
Although it is a good story in concept, there are a few things that should possibly be changed.
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Why is Harry related to all these people? I could possibly see the Potter and Black (even Weasley) houses, but it seems unlikely at best that he is related to all these different houses. We know that his mother was from a Muggle ancestry, and that his father was the pureblood side.
Also, why would he be elected the heir of houses that are still alive? Isn't the point of inheritance that the person has to die first and leaves them in your will in order for you to inherit anything? A furtherer note: why would he own Hogwarts?
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On a grammar note, please space out that big block paragraph of doom on the second chapter.
11/30/2006 c2 ShadowCub
I don't think Snape cares enough to put any charm on Harry, as for his lack of knowledge, we see that Harry cares nothing about learning about the WW, he depends on Hermoine to come up with the answers to everything he needs instead of looking and reading for himself. The Weasleys any idiot would have realized that was a set up, she's got a million kids but she has to look for the crossing. Most of Harry's problems are his own fault he so wants to be in with the 'good' crowd, he takes Ron's and Hagrids word about the Snakes. I like the story but please don't try to blame Snape and the snakes cause Harry is a bigioted idiot.
I don't think Snape cares enough to put any charm on Harry, as for his lack of knowledge, we see that Harry cares nothing about learning about the WW, he depends on Hermoine to come up with the answers to everything he needs instead of looking and reading for himself. The Weasleys any idiot would have realized that was a set up, she's got a million kids but she has to look for the crossing. Most of Harry's problems are his own fault he so wants to be in with the 'good' crowd, he takes Ron's and Hagrids word about the Snakes. I like the story but please don't try to blame Snape and the snakes cause Harry is a bigioted idiot.
11/22/2006 c1 darthdrew1704
dude a most excellent start to a most excellent story Its got my interest peaqued I must say that is hard to do, but you have managed that with one chapter I'm impressed.
hope you continue the most excellent story,
darth
dude a most excellent start to a most excellent story Its got my interest peaqued I must say that is hard to do, but you have managed that with one chapter I'm impressed.
hope you continue the most excellent story,
darth