for Surrender4/21/2008 c22 Calimocho
Great update..
I almost missed it. The e-mail updates are down...
I thought that you did a really good job with the boy meeting Lucius's father.
I have to say Pansy makes me laugh...
I can't wait for the next chapter.
- Liz
Great update..
I almost missed it. The e-mail updates are down...
I thought that you did a really good job with the boy meeting Lucius's father.
I have to say Pansy makes me laugh...
I can't wait for the next chapter.
- Liz
4/21/2008 c22 unknown
look im sorry but for the past god knows how long i have followed this story with an absolute love for it.
ever since you posted the first chapter i loved the story with all the hidden stories and words amoungst and it was absolutely great!
but nowadays your story has gone completely down hill, its dull and goes on about hermione being sick and yadda yadda yadda, look i still love the story but if you want to keep readers interested you need to revv it up a bit. you've been going on for months now that something major in the plot is going to happen... well were is it? and that you say you know what will happen next chapter yet it takes you a few good weeks to come out with the next and an apology saying you went blank.
LOOK over the next few chapters and plan ahead. i still love the story and you will probably take complete offence to this but i meant no harm. just the fact that your writing has turned changed, even if the story was supposed to get darker, the first half was a lot better when it seems to me you knew what you were writing.
now its like you've gotten lost, you know how the ending will go but you just cant get the rest out.
but i must admit the chapter i did just currently read, was like you were finally opening up somewhat more.
faithful reader.
unknown.
look im sorry but for the past god knows how long i have followed this story with an absolute love for it.
ever since you posted the first chapter i loved the story with all the hidden stories and words amoungst and it was absolutely great!
but nowadays your story has gone completely down hill, its dull and goes on about hermione being sick and yadda yadda yadda, look i still love the story but if you want to keep readers interested you need to revv it up a bit. you've been going on for months now that something major in the plot is going to happen... well were is it? and that you say you know what will happen next chapter yet it takes you a few good weeks to come out with the next and an apology saying you went blank.
LOOK over the next few chapters and plan ahead. i still love the story and you will probably take complete offence to this but i meant no harm. just the fact that your writing has turned changed, even if the story was supposed to get darker, the first half was a lot better when it seems to me you knew what you were writing.
now its like you've gotten lost, you know how the ending will go but you just cant get the rest out.
but i must admit the chapter i did just currently read, was like you were finally opening up somewhat more.
faithful reader.
unknown.
4/2/2008 c21 pedestriancow
i liked this chapter because hermione stood up for herself. she isnt the type to let people walk all over her and sometimes this story portrays her as week but now she is back to her true nature. i also liked the ending and the interactions btw Hermione & Lucius. nice chapter! can't wait till the next update!
i liked this chapter because hermione stood up for herself. she isnt the type to let people walk all over her and sometimes this story portrays her as week but now she is back to her true nature. i also liked the ending and the interactions btw Hermione & Lucius. nice chapter! can't wait till the next update!
3/31/2008 c21 
11xx-Mione-Fan-xx
Poor house elf. The grandfather is a jerk.
Good chapter. :)
Update xD
11xx-Mione-Fan-xxPoor house elf. The grandfather is a jerk.
Good chapter. :)
Update xD
3/27/2008 c21 6Raynestorm16
YAY!
go hermoine...
this story is amazing.
What's up with drac's dad?
Anyways...
new chapter soon please!
6Raynestorm16YAY!
go hermoine...
this story is amazing.
What's up with drac's dad?
Anyways...
new chapter soon please!
3/20/2008 c21 Ashmo21
I'm totally in love with this fic and I can't wait for the next part. I can't wait to see the Voldy's reaction to this meeting..hehehe...
I'm totally in love with this fic and I can't wait for the next part. I can't wait to see the Voldy's reaction to this meeting..hehehe...
3/18/2008 c20 Raynestorm16
yay!
i have to read the next chapter at home...
my french teacher is a friggin retard...
lol...
yay!
i have to read the next chapter at home...
my french teacher is a friggin retard...
lol...
3/13/2008 c21 dancinchic93
so ive just found your delightful stories today and read through the first one and what you've posted of this one and all i can say is that they are amazing. These stories are some of the better hg/dm stories there are out there and you kept them in character. Update Soon!
so ive just found your delightful stories today and read through the first one and what you've posted of this one and all i can say is that they are amazing. These stories are some of the better hg/dm stories there are out there and you kept them in character. Update Soon!
3/4/2008 c21 6The Queen of Confusion
Wow! She was brillant! And he acually gave her a complement. Wow!
Great chapter! Hope to see more soon!
SARAH
6The Queen of ConfusionWow! She was brillant! And he acually gave her a complement. Wow!
Great chapter! Hope to see more soon!
SARAH
3/3/2008 c21 1Erytha
this is a good chapter! soz for taking ages to review! but this is amazing and that man is ruude! lool
update soon!
1Erythathis is a good chapter! soz for taking ages to review! but this is amazing and that man is ruude! lool
update soon!
3/2/2008 c21 Gryff-Slytherin
Great story so far! Keep it going and please update soon! Way to go Hermione! I'm curious how the spy can get into the Heads Common Room/Dorm without anyone opening the portrait...is he using the pipes or something like that?
Great story so far! Keep it going and please update soon! Way to go Hermione! I'm curious how the spy can get into the Heads Common Room/Dorm without anyone opening the portrait...is he using the pipes or something like that?