6/25/2007 c38 Jess
oh god, haha please keep writing, i've read this 5 or 6 times and i'm constantly checking to see if it's been updated, it's awesome, i love the way you write, can't wait to read the next few chapters

6/14/2007 c38 29Ty3
Uh oh. Plotty. That's not even a word, but it sounds scary. lol Anyway, as promised, I'm dropping you a review because I love this story. Dean and Lauren are so twisted that you've gotta love it. I also really like the end where Dean just has to say something that makes Lauren unable to forget what she's been thinking. That's just like Dean.

6/10/2007 c29 LisaLocke
Okay, so I'm no where caught up yet and when I read a story that's already started, I don't usually comment until I catch up, but I just had to tell you that you have hooked me and it is making it impossible for me to study stupid Canadian History for my exam in the morning. lol, I was sitting at the computer earlier today for like 4 hours, and after about 10 minutes of studying, I would go right back to reading for 20 minutes. I can't help it, can you blame me for being intrigued by Dean, Sam, Lauren, and Sharika intead of Canada's role in WWI ? lol,

I thought I would complain to you about how good and addicting your story is, : ) .

And your my age too which is incredible, your writing is amazing !

I'm loving the story ! :D

6/4/2007 c38 2ArtemiScribbles
Oh Lauren. Oh, this chapter makes me so unbearably sad. In a good way. As in, the writing is so...wow. I'm amazed at how well you've captured the desperate, empty feeling inside her. It's so deep and complex, and...how old did you say you were again? Aside from writing a hella hot sex scene, you also have a remarkable grasp on human emotion and our twisted means of self-denial and expression. Not to mention a really awesome hand with tone. That is what always amazes me about your chapters, how you make the whole thing, feel a certain way. All this edge and pain and concealment.

"More everything-except clear".

That line really got to me.

And when Lauren is watching Sam and Sharika, and there's that little moment of evny, becasue even though she's finally got what she thought she wanted, sex with Dean, she'd rather have the love. Such a moving contrast here between the two couples, one the physical and stiffled emotions that are knawing at them, and the others, love, even unacknowledged, and NO physical, but they are happy.

"The slippery knots of lust twining around the pounding fist. Maybe it was his heart."

Do I detect a hint of Dean POV in this chapter?

Methinks I do, and I LOVE it. Even though I adore Lauren, I do think that situations like this, the really emotional and really physical stuff, is enhanced by dual perspective. Excellent stuff.

And I really like how, even though Dean is clearly also in denial about the true depth of what is going on between them, I get the sense that he's a little more clear than she is. All that thigh nudging, and, I dunno, that line,

"Got an itch Lauren?" almost seemed to be followed by a silent, rhetorical,

"Is that all it is?"

And I think, while he is clearly enjoying the sex(it is Dean after all), he's actually suprisingly open to it being more, that, in a way, it already is for him, but he doesn't need to put a lable on it. He feels it, and, that's it, he shys away from analysing, but is showing affection in his way, but she needs something more overt. Oh dear. Fasten you seatbelts, methinks it's going to be a bumpy ride.

Poor Lauren. Poor Poor Lauren.

As always darling, loved it, and, when you turn out stuff of this calibre, how can I bitch about the wait? (Nearly killed me!, But so worth it.)

I don't know, am I off base with that?

6/3/2007 c38 6Elrik Lasanti
Right. Haven't been reviewing lately. Mea culpa. Whip me if you will.

But seriously, Hot. Hot. Very hot. Very good. Very in character. This probably motivates me to write my own stuff, but you're going to have to whip me for that.

You go girl.

6/3/2007 c38 12Mirajane Scarlet
Murder weapon! I need to find a murder weapon! STUPID LAUREN! And stupid Dean too! What is the boy thinking? I've just got to know! What does he think she thinks is going on? Like, does he know what she's thinking? Oh god. She needs like medicated help! I'm starting to feel a bit sorry for her now, actually. Stupid, stupid, stupid girl!

On the other hand, this is so not helping...'cause I don't have a boyfriend, and reading what you write just makes me want to go and tackle someboy! lol. Yes, I put someboy instead of somebody. Damn, why do you have to be such a good pron writer? *shudders*

But, seriously, all crazy-oh-my-god-you're-unbelievable praise aside, you really need to edit this chapter. There are quite a few mistakes in it, there are some misspelled words, some sentences that don't have periods, and a few sentences and sections where the tenses get a bit messed up. I could point them all out, but well, that'd take a while. So I'll just say you need to go through it and fix some stuff.

6/3/2007 c38 9Licensetocreep
oh my sweet gods

I think this is my favorite chappie so far!

Its just so dark and brutal and everything is so fucking brill!

the verbiage and the sharp, to the point narratorness just fits so perfectly with Dean+Lauren right now. They are sharp, to the point, go nowhere beyond what they've got now.

and the little cuteness with Sam and Sharika is just a perfect foil to Dean and Laurne

this chapter is amazing like "woah!"