for Believing Improbable Things6/3/2007 c37 Nat
please update soon dyin to know whats gonna happen!
this is a hot story
please update soon dyin to know whats gonna happen!
this is a hot story
5/23/2007 c37 Neha
Holy Crap! Ahem! I can't form a coherent thought right now...Hopefully that says how good this was!
Holy Crap! Ahem! I can't form a coherent thought right now...Hopefully that says how good this was!
5/22/2007 c1 
12Mirajane Scarlet
Firstly, while it wasn't entirely up to your usual standards, it was DAMN GOOD. *peels self off the wall* oh, god...Why does your fic have to be so good. *whines* I wish I had a boyfriend...I just about can't take it! I'm still freaking turned on! I'm going to go to work and I'll be standing there, putting stuff through the register and I'll just have this big, dopey smile on my face, like all day! Oh. My. God. I swear, I'm just going to be staring at any cute boy that comes to my till...so not good. lol.
Also, shut it. I offered to beta it for you.
Also, also, I noticed one thing. There are probably more but I was a bit *ahem*...distracted at the time, (again, damn!)
The sentence "Oh god, do that again" - is missing a period.
Oh, and a perfect song for this chapter is "But I Love You" by Rain.
And I liked the part where it was kinda confusing at first, like it flipped back and forth in time, that was cool.
My favorite part "I should have gone and masturbated, for sure, I thought sarcastically. “Please,” I breathed, and opened my eyes again, meeting his with something I refused to see as appeal, propping a semblance of a jaunty, unaffected grin on my mouth as if to say – just kidding, buddy; you can turf me off your lap now and we can both have a good laugh." Especially, "meeting his with something I refused to see as appeal,"- that's so Lauren, because, DUH, he LOVES HER TOO! Why can't she get that? Oh. My. God. As you know, you more than rock my universe. You shatter it into tiny, tiny, over pleasured little pieces. Haha. I've really got to go get ready for work...
Can't wait to see what happens next!
And aww, poor Sammy! And wow, Sharika is dense, but in a cute way. Somehow, when she does it, it's cute, but when Lauren does it its damned annoying. Don't know why...
But as always, love you so much!
-princess-.
12Mirajane ScarletFirstly, while it wasn't entirely up to your usual standards, it was DAMN GOOD. *peels self off the wall* oh, god...Why does your fic have to be so good. *whines* I wish I had a boyfriend...I just about can't take it! I'm still freaking turned on! I'm going to go to work and I'll be standing there, putting stuff through the register and I'll just have this big, dopey smile on my face, like all day! Oh. My. God. I swear, I'm just going to be staring at any cute boy that comes to my till...so not good. lol.
Also, shut it. I offered to beta it for you.
Also, also, I noticed one thing. There are probably more but I was a bit *ahem*...distracted at the time, (again, damn!)
The sentence "Oh god, do that again" - is missing a period.
Oh, and a perfect song for this chapter is "But I Love You" by Rain.
And I liked the part where it was kinda confusing at first, like it flipped back and forth in time, that was cool.
My favorite part "I should have gone and masturbated, for sure, I thought sarcastically. “Please,” I breathed, and opened my eyes again, meeting his with something I refused to see as appeal, propping a semblance of a jaunty, unaffected grin on my mouth as if to say – just kidding, buddy; you can turf me off your lap now and we can both have a good laugh." Especially, "meeting his with something I refused to see as appeal,"- that's so Lauren, because, DUH, he LOVES HER TOO! Why can't she get that? Oh. My. God. As you know, you more than rock my universe. You shatter it into tiny, tiny, over pleasured little pieces. Haha. I've really got to go get ready for work...
Can't wait to see what happens next!
And aww, poor Sammy! And wow, Sharika is dense, but in a cute way. Somehow, when she does it, it's cute, but when Lauren does it its damned annoying. Don't know why...
But as always, love you so much!
-princess-.
5/22/2007 c37 Mirajane Scarlet
Okay, firstly, not true. It wasn't up to your usual standards exactly, true, but it was still pretty damn good. And, And, And, I did say I'd beta it for you, but you didn't send it, so shut it.
I did notice one thing: the sentence "Oh god, do that again" is missing a period at the end. There are probably more spelling errors etc in the porn part, but I was a bit too distracted while reading it to notice. Also, about that, damn, why does this fic have to make me soo...well, horny, for a lack of a better word. Damn, I wish I had a boyfriend...
Anyways...
a perfect song for this chapter would be "But I Love You" by Rain. Some of the lyrics are
"Don't wanna come back to you/Don't wanna see you/Don't wanna love you/But I love you, but I love you/ Don't wanna hang on to you/Don't wanna hold you/Don't wanna miss you/But I miss you, but I miss you/"
Yes, some of it is in Korean, but it still fits. :)
Okay, firstly, not true. It wasn't up to your usual standards exactly, true, but it was still pretty damn good. And, And, And, I did say I'd beta it for you, but you didn't send it, so shut it.
I did notice one thing: the sentence "Oh god, do that again" is missing a period at the end. There are probably more spelling errors etc in the porn part, but I was a bit too distracted while reading it to notice. Also, about that, damn, why does this fic have to make me soo...well, horny, for a lack of a better word. Damn, I wish I had a boyfriend...
Anyways...
a perfect song for this chapter would be "But I Love You" by Rain. Some of the lyrics are
"Don't wanna come back to you/Don't wanna see you/Don't wanna love you/But I love you, but I love you/ Don't wanna hang on to you/Don't wanna hold you/Don't wanna miss you/But I miss you, but I miss you/"
Yes, some of it is in Korean, but it still fits. :)
5/21/2007 c37 2ArtemiScribbles
Excuse Me! "Sorry this chapter was so crap this week"? Honey, if that was crap, don't ever write anything when you're in top form, becasue it'll kill me. Jesus. I'm still catching my breath. Eherm, okay, let's start at the beginning. One, love the weather witch. Two, love jealous Sam, too, too cute. Three, oh hell, nevermind, it was all great, but let's get to the point shall we? Seriously my dear, that was too hot for words, and more than that, it was really deep and sweet, and desperately perfect. It's always really hard to write a chapter like this, that's so anticipated, and so important, a culmination of a relationship that you've been building, something that is going to define how that relationship exists and continues to develop, something that will change it irrevocably. And you just, knocked it right out of the park. It's so hard to write something that will manage to encompass everything that you've built, becasue otherwise it will feel false, something that fulfills expectations, and something that creates a solid platform for: next? I'm really flabbergasted by how well you've managed to pull it all off. Flumoxed. Gobsmacked. Awed. I don't usually do to much quoting, but, really,
"He was sitting on the opposite bed; long legs sprawled out in front of him as he read the local newspaper, dark blue denim encasing those tanned, muscled limbs, a green shirt hiding his chest, hair rumpled from continuous meetings with his calloused fingers, eyes sleepy and unfocused. He looked bored, tired and a little grumpy, bottom lip pushed out more than was natural, one brow drawn down as he read, calloused fingers spread across the white and black."
This is a perfect, beautiful, viceral image. No wonder poor Lauren lost control.
Two,
"This wasn’t an unusual feeling, in fact, lust and I had become so well acquainted in the past few months we were filing for china and curtain patterns together."
This is so great because it is such a quintisential Lauren-ism. And it keeps this scene really grounded in the characters. They are still themselves, this is still part of the larger story and relationship. Facts which it is easy to be distracted from in a bit like this.
Three,
"Because if I did it with him again, it’d just be more real, and more meaningful – because the library thing? So able to be passed off on a combustion of explosive emotions and vulnerability. If I tried now, and he did accepted and returned, I mean, there’s no excuse. No spirits, no alcohol, no striking and just-exposed revelations. It would just be me, and Dean, and the two of us having sex. Nothing between us but skin and sweat. It’s a concept that I simultaneously revelled in – Dean, naked, always good, right? – and wanted to run far, far away from. If I initiated this, he’d know something. I’d be opening myself to him."
We don't lose sight of the very important, very serious, very emotional crossroads this is for Lauren, it isn't all about the sex.
And actually, that is what I loved so much about this part. That even though there is the sex (which is fantastic), it's done in a way that is them, that is sweet, that is right. There's laughter and challenges and inuendo, all those things that make up thier everyday realtionship and personalities is channeled here. And that makes it so real, and...and...no, I just don't have the words. I'm gonna just leave it at fabulous, because I'd have to invent something othrwise, and you've left my brain to scrambled for that. Really, so so, perfect. You surpassed my every expectation.
2ArtemiScribblesExcuse Me! "Sorry this chapter was so crap this week"? Honey, if that was crap, don't ever write anything when you're in top form, becasue it'll kill me. Jesus. I'm still catching my breath. Eherm, okay, let's start at the beginning. One, love the weather witch. Two, love jealous Sam, too, too cute. Three, oh hell, nevermind, it was all great, but let's get to the point shall we? Seriously my dear, that was too hot for words, and more than that, it was really deep and sweet, and desperately perfect. It's always really hard to write a chapter like this, that's so anticipated, and so important, a culmination of a relationship that you've been building, something that is going to define how that relationship exists and continues to develop, something that will change it irrevocably. And you just, knocked it right out of the park. It's so hard to write something that will manage to encompass everything that you've built, becasue otherwise it will feel false, something that fulfills expectations, and something that creates a solid platform for: next? I'm really flabbergasted by how well you've managed to pull it all off. Flumoxed. Gobsmacked. Awed. I don't usually do to much quoting, but, really,
"He was sitting on the opposite bed; long legs sprawled out in front of him as he read the local newspaper, dark blue denim encasing those tanned, muscled limbs, a green shirt hiding his chest, hair rumpled from continuous meetings with his calloused fingers, eyes sleepy and unfocused. He looked bored, tired and a little grumpy, bottom lip pushed out more than was natural, one brow drawn down as he read, calloused fingers spread across the white and black."
This is a perfect, beautiful, viceral image. No wonder poor Lauren lost control.
Two,
"This wasn’t an unusual feeling, in fact, lust and I had become so well acquainted in the past few months we were filing for china and curtain patterns together."
This is so great because it is such a quintisential Lauren-ism. And it keeps this scene really grounded in the characters. They are still themselves, this is still part of the larger story and relationship. Facts which it is easy to be distracted from in a bit like this.
Three,
"Because if I did it with him again, it’d just be more real, and more meaningful – because the library thing? So able to be passed off on a combustion of explosive emotions and vulnerability. If I tried now, and he did accepted and returned, I mean, there’s no excuse. No spirits, no alcohol, no striking and just-exposed revelations. It would just be me, and Dean, and the two of us having sex. Nothing between us but skin and sweat. It’s a concept that I simultaneously revelled in – Dean, naked, always good, right? – and wanted to run far, far away from. If I initiated this, he’d know something. I’d be opening myself to him."
We don't lose sight of the very important, very serious, very emotional crossroads this is for Lauren, it isn't all about the sex.
And actually, that is what I loved so much about this part. That even though there is the sex (which is fantastic), it's done in a way that is them, that is sweet, that is right. There's laughter and challenges and inuendo, all those things that make up thier everyday realtionship and personalities is channeled here. And that makes it so real, and...and...no, I just don't have the words. I'm gonna just leave it at fabulous, because I'd have to invent something othrwise, and you've left my brain to scrambled for that. Really, so so, perfect. You surpassed my every expectation.
5/21/2007 c36 ArtemiScribbles
Okay, OMG, this chapter was fabulous! And I didn't get to read it for more than a week! And it was torturous! My bloody friend (no, no, I love her, I do) didn't have her internet running, and I couldn't do anything for a week, more! And it was aweful, aweful. When I think of what I missed. You should have heard the crap she gave me about it too(I may, or may not, have thrown a tiny, itty bitty, kind of tantrum, what can I say, I need my BIT fix). I made her read it when we got back home and even she liked it and she doesn't even watch the show, so, how's that for a compliment. Not that it suprises me. Anyway. Yes, back to the chapter. I don't know hon, these last few chapters, it's like you somehow stepped up your game (although up to what I don't know, since it was alrady awsome. What comes after fabulous? Stupendous?) In this, all your little one liners, and the way Lauren's stream of conciousness is maifested, was brilliant. I loved the cookie doough fight, that was inspired. And I love "tired" Lauren. She was hysterical. And the whole part about burtng out that Sam fantasizes about Sharika LOL. I laughed so hard. I also really love the bantery interaction between her and Dean. It really drives home the point that they are friends, that they have that comfortable kind of connection, and I love to see that, becasue it's something his character doesn't really get much of on the show. And drunk S/S, hilarious! and cute. And finally, you finished it off with just the right amount of much. "It's not like I'd ever let anything bad happen to you", I just, melted. It's so simple, but so much what Lauren needs to hear. Sigh. Perfection.
Okay, OMG, this chapter was fabulous! And I didn't get to read it for more than a week! And it was torturous! My bloody friend (no, no, I love her, I do) didn't have her internet running, and I couldn't do anything for a week, more! And it was aweful, aweful. When I think of what I missed. You should have heard the crap she gave me about it too(I may, or may not, have thrown a tiny, itty bitty, kind of tantrum, what can I say, I need my BIT fix). I made her read it when we got back home and even she liked it and she doesn't even watch the show, so, how's that for a compliment. Not that it suprises me. Anyway. Yes, back to the chapter. I don't know hon, these last few chapters, it's like you somehow stepped up your game (although up to what I don't know, since it was alrady awsome. What comes after fabulous? Stupendous?) In this, all your little one liners, and the way Lauren's stream of conciousness is maifested, was brilliant. I loved the cookie doough fight, that was inspired. And I love "tired" Lauren. She was hysterical. And the whole part about burtng out that Sam fantasizes about Sharika LOL. I laughed so hard. I also really love the bantery interaction between her and Dean. It really drives home the point that they are friends, that they have that comfortable kind of connection, and I love to see that, becasue it's something his character doesn't really get much of on the show. And drunk S/S, hilarious! and cute. And finally, you finished it off with just the right amount of much. "It's not like I'd ever let anything bad happen to you", I just, melted. It's so simple, but so much what Lauren needs to hear. Sigh. Perfection.
5/21/2007 c37 3Carpetbag
guh... attempts to form coherent thoughts... cannot... goes for cold shower... dies...
3Carpetbagguh... attempts to form coherent thoughts... cannot... goes for cold shower... dies...
5/21/2007 c3 Lovlychica
Just started this morning and I will prolly be finished by tonight, after work and family stuff. Nice story.
Just started this morning and I will prolly be finished by tonight, after work and family stuff. Nice story.
5/20/2007 c37 9The Goddess Aurora
Okay, so I lied. I didn't go to bed but stayed up to read this. It could be my tired mind telling me that I love you, but I think it's just the fangirl buried in my skin.
It was amazing, and I liked the format, very new. Plus, you know, Porn. Very good, make your stomach melt and your pulse pound good. It just figures Lauren would end up just saying it, it's so her. To sum up: HAWT. Totally, on fire.
I loved it, and you know I adore you.
Now to sleep.
Aurora
9The Goddess AuroraOkay, so I lied. I didn't go to bed but stayed up to read this. It could be my tired mind telling me that I love you, but I think it's just the fangirl buried in my skin.
It was amazing, and I liked the format, very new. Plus, you know, Porn. Very good, make your stomach melt and your pulse pound good. It just figures Lauren would end up just saying it, it's so her. To sum up: HAWT. Totally, on fire.
I loved it, and you know I adore you.
Now to sleep.
Aurora
5/20/2007 c37 29Ty3
Well...that was HOT. Wow. Yeah. I'm going to go have some nice, naughty dreams now. Uh...yeah.
29Ty3Well...that was HOT. Wow. Yeah. I'm going to go have some nice, naughty dreams now. Uh...yeah.
5/20/2007 c37 Diva0789
two words...fucking amazing!...finally!...damn it...ive waited a long ass time for this and it was worth it...i cant wait till next weekend!...lol...see ya then...well, not SEE...but...yeah, you know what i mean...i hope...lol...ttyl!
two words...fucking amazing!...finally!...damn it...ive waited a long ass time for this and it was worth it...i cant wait till next weekend!...lol...see ya then...well, not SEE...but...yeah, you know what i mean...i hope...lol...ttyl!
5/20/2007 c37 xo.paradise
Wow. That's pretty much all I can say. First of all, I loved the whole two-guys-fighting-over-Sharika thing, and Sammy getting all jealous. That was great. And then Dean/Lauren...I don't even know what to say, except for finally! It's about time. Now I'm excited for next week's chapter to see what those two will be like afterwards. Should be interesting...
Wow. That's pretty much all I can say. First of all, I loved the whole two-guys-fighting-over-Sharika thing, and Sammy getting all jealous. That was great. And then Dean/Lauren...I don't even know what to say, except for finally! It's about time. Now I'm excited for next week's chapter to see what those two will be like afterwards. Should be interesting...
5/20/2007 c37 Delsunhine86
Okay no time for pleasantries long review
First of all WOAH GIRL U GOT MAD SKILLZ- sorry for my bad attempt at ghetto- I was blushing like crazy. *del start singing... it's gettin hot in here*
secondly Love the beginning, you like literally had me entice on the first line, at first i was like WTF with the whole time thing but it made sense and i really like it overall-new thing you startin or just a once off?
then the whole D/L moments, we waitin and waitin for weeks and like always you came through... i have to say that this was your second best chapter in my opinion - First of course being the bathroom scene, really how do you top that? however this came close..;)
okay at last but not least, i don't know why, but i love it when he said her name, i thought you handle this well. it was like all the angst and doubts that he didn't want her that she ranted about in previous chapters slip away and i am really excited how the fall out is gonna play out.
Love always DEL
Am really sorry about your Beta, although want to clarify what this is suppose to mean " abandon ship y’all. It can only get worse." cause i think it's only gonna get better and you need to look at your reviews -300 yay- to realize we love you and you are a GOD
Oh considered this one of the stalker breathing phone calls lol
Okay no time for pleasantries long review
First of all WOAH GIRL U GOT MAD SKILLZ- sorry for my bad attempt at ghetto- I was blushing like crazy. *del start singing... it's gettin hot in here*
secondly Love the beginning, you like literally had me entice on the first line, at first i was like WTF with the whole time thing but it made sense and i really like it overall-new thing you startin or just a once off?
then the whole D/L moments, we waitin and waitin for weeks and like always you came through... i have to say that this was your second best chapter in my opinion - First of course being the bathroom scene, really how do you top that? however this came close..;)
okay at last but not least, i don't know why, but i love it when he said her name, i thought you handle this well. it was like all the angst and doubts that he didn't want her that she ranted about in previous chapters slip away and i am really excited how the fall out is gonna play out.
Love always DEL
Am really sorry about your Beta, although want to clarify what this is suppose to mean " abandon ship y’all. It can only get worse." cause i think it's only gonna get better and you need to look at your reviews -300 yay- to realize we love you and you are a GOD
Oh considered this one of the stalker breathing phone calls lol
5/20/2007 c37 1summerbreeze247
You couldn't write a crap chapter if you tried, and this is definetly not a crap chapter. Finally! After that time in the library I was just waiting for Lauren to jump Dean and it happened, though really she didnt jump him so much as climb on him and then proposition him :) And while I admit the scatteredness of the chapter was a little distracting, I managed to get through it. First I actually read it chronologically and then I just read it as you posted it, I found that the scattered pattern wasn't all that hard to follow. I'm glad that towards the end it seemed like maybe Lauren was realizing that she wasn't just another warm body for Dean. And the sex..do we even have to praise you and tell you how amazingly well you write it? Many writers can't pull it off but you really stayed true to the characters, their snarkiness, and yet still managed to make it incredibly real and exactly what we need after all the angst. And I love jealous Sam, and I agree with Lauren I like Greg or George whatever :) Can't wait for the next chapter!
1summerbreeze247You couldn't write a crap chapter if you tried, and this is definetly not a crap chapter. Finally! After that time in the library I was just waiting for Lauren to jump Dean and it happened, though really she didnt jump him so much as climb on him and then proposition him :) And while I admit the scatteredness of the chapter was a little distracting, I managed to get through it. First I actually read it chronologically and then I just read it as you posted it, I found that the scattered pattern wasn't all that hard to follow. I'm glad that towards the end it seemed like maybe Lauren was realizing that she wasn't just another warm body for Dean. And the sex..do we even have to praise you and tell you how amazingly well you write it? Many writers can't pull it off but you really stayed true to the characters, their snarkiness, and yet still managed to make it incredibly real and exactly what we need after all the angst. And I love jealous Sam, and I agree with Lauren I like Greg or George whatever :) Can't wait for the next chapter!