for Fool Lystar1/19/2007 c5 
27PernDragonrider
Ohh, they timed it! Great chapter and very interesting twists you have going with this story.
Please, please, please, keep up the very excellent Pernese Dragonrider tale you have going here.
Pern
27PernDragonriderOhh, they timed it! Great chapter and very interesting twists you have going with this story.
Please, please, please, keep up the very excellent Pernese Dragonrider tale you have going here.
Pern
1/19/2007 c5 4Kitsuneko
...I think anyone who's ever written a story can be considered a review junkie. ^_^
What's gonna happen next? Definitely wanna see the next chapter.
4Kitsuneko...I think anyone who's ever written a story can be considered a review junkie. ^_^
What's gonna happen next? Definitely wanna see the next chapter.
1/19/2007 c5 PSTurner
You are right, a short chapter, but a good one. Packed with a lot of information. I look forward to the next one.
Pam
You are right, a short chapter, but a good one. Packed with a lot of information. I look forward to the next one.
Pam
1/19/2007 c5 Sorsa
Please update! I want to know what happens to Lystar!
Please update! I want to know what happens to Lystar!
1/18/2007 c4 PSTurner
good story. you have me hooked, and now I want to see where you take this.
Update soon please?
Pam
good story. you have me hooked, and now I want to see where you take this.
Update soon please?
Pam
1/9/2007 c4 27PernDragonrider
Exceptional chapter and I'm am very much looking forward to seeing where this tale goes.
I love the way you've written Lystar and Caliath along with everything else too. Keep up the wonderful work.
Pern
27PernDragonriderExceptional chapter and I'm am very much looking forward to seeing where this tale goes.
I love the way you've written Lystar and Caliath along with everything else too. Keep up the wonderful work.
Pern
1/2/2007 c4 Tabitha
I just wanted to thank you for this story. You have a very appealing writing style and I'm looking forward to your next post. Thinking good thoughts for Lystar and Caliath.
-Tabitha
I just wanted to thank you for this story. You have a very appealing writing style and I'm looking forward to your next post. Thinking good thoughts for Lystar and Caliath.
-Tabitha
1/2/2007 c4 astrokath
This is really a very interesting, very well written story. I do like the hints of a larger plot that you're seeding each chapter with. I'll certainly be on the lookout for later chapters.
This is really a very interesting, very well written story. I do like the hints of a larger plot that you're seeding each chapter with. I'll certainly be on the lookout for later chapters.
1/1/2007 c4 4Kitsuneko
Ooh, now THIS is getting interesting. This is just speculation, but I'm thinking time travel is part of why K'beth and Rosith are acting so oddly. Either way, I'm definitely interested in what happens next.
Another thought, but isn't K'beth kind of an odd name for a rider? It's usually only dragon names that end in th. Though I have to admit, I kinda like the name, regardless. ^^
4KitsunekoOoh, now THIS is getting interesting. This is just speculation, but I'm thinking time travel is part of why K'beth and Rosith are acting so oddly. Either way, I'm definitely interested in what happens next.
Another thought, but isn't K'beth kind of an odd name for a rider? It's usually only dragon names that end in th. Though I have to admit, I kinda like the name, regardless. ^^
12/29/2006 c3 GinaLee
A very good story - please write more - I like your characters!
A very good story - please write more - I like your characters!
12/16/2006 c3 Kitsuneko
I was a little confused at the beginning, but I knew what was going on by the end of the chapter, so I think you're fine. I really liked this chapter, actually, you got the emotion across very well.
I was a little confused at the beginning, but I knew what was going on by the end of the chapter, so I think you're fine. I really liked this chapter, actually, you got the emotion across very well.
12/16/2006 c3 Swift
This is a really good story. I don't mind the skips to the action, but I do think that you missed out on some good moments to show Lystar's personality and dilemmas.
I really liked how Lystar was determined, and succeeded, in not letting anyone know that she's blind in one eye. I think that the story would be more interesting if she kept that a secret for a long time, and to see how she manages to dodge questions and be creative in difficult situations. That's what I really liked in Chapter 2, how she learned to adapt and not seem like she's impaired at all.
The idea how everyone likes her, but thinks of her as clumsy and imcapable (and she thinks so too of herself, but is stubbornly trying to help) is very interesting and well written from the Weyrlingmaster (name escapes me at the moment, sorry) and Gilda's point of view. I can see a lot about the kind of person that Lystar is from those scenes. Good job!
About Lystar's emotions...(love the name Lystar, by the way!) I've read books about some people who are blind in one eye, and most of what I got was their frustration in not being able to see danger, etc. from that side. It makes them feel vulnerable, and they worry that they won't be able to compensate well enough in dangerous situations (as you've done a very good job describing with Threadfall).
I think that you've hit on most of the emotions very well: Fear, that she'll get forbidden to fly or getting Caliath killed; nervousness that she'll be discovered; determination to not let anyone know and to prove that she's the equal of anyone.
I don't feel that it needs much more. Just keep going the way you have, and I'm eagerly waiting to read more!
This is a really good story. I don't mind the skips to the action, but I do think that you missed out on some good moments to show Lystar's personality and dilemmas.
I really liked how Lystar was determined, and succeeded, in not letting anyone know that she's blind in one eye. I think that the story would be more interesting if she kept that a secret for a long time, and to see how she manages to dodge questions and be creative in difficult situations. That's what I really liked in Chapter 2, how she learned to adapt and not seem like she's impaired at all.
The idea how everyone likes her, but thinks of her as clumsy and imcapable (and she thinks so too of herself, but is stubbornly trying to help) is very interesting and well written from the Weyrlingmaster (name escapes me at the moment, sorry) and Gilda's point of view. I can see a lot about the kind of person that Lystar is from those scenes. Good job!
About Lystar's emotions...(love the name Lystar, by the way!) I've read books about some people who are blind in one eye, and most of what I got was their frustration in not being able to see danger, etc. from that side. It makes them feel vulnerable, and they worry that they won't be able to compensate well enough in dangerous situations (as you've done a very good job describing with Threadfall).
I think that you've hit on most of the emotions very well: Fear, that she'll get forbidden to fly or getting Caliath killed; nervousness that she'll be discovered; determination to not let anyone know and to prove that she's the equal of anyone.
I don't feel that it needs much more. Just keep going the way you have, and I'm eagerly waiting to read more!
12/15/2006 c3 2Rimmersworld
Yes you did jump into the action, but it was well done.
The time gap was easy to understand and your explanation was good.
If anything I would have liked the chapter to have been longer.
Your doing well!
2RimmersworldYes you did jump into the action, but it was well done.
The time gap was easy to understand and your explanation was good.
If anything I would have liked the chapter to have been longer.
Your doing well!
12/15/2006 c3 27PernDragonrider
This chapter very much shows her emotions and everything with a very realistic touch, to me anyway. Great addition to the story and I'm truly looking forward to seeing exactly where this eventually ends up.
Keep up the very excellent work,
Pern
27PernDragonriderThis chapter very much shows her emotions and everything with a very realistic touch, to me anyway. Great addition to the story and I'm truly looking forward to seeing exactly where this eventually ends up.
Keep up the very excellent work,
Pern
12/14/2006 c2 PernDragonrider
Wow, great start to a tale for the first two chatpers and I'm really looking forward to seeing where Lystar and her blue end up.
Keep up the excellent work,
Pern
Wow, great start to a tale for the first two chatpers and I'm really looking forward to seeing where Lystar and her blue end up.
Keep up the excellent work,
Pern