for The Feud1/28/2009 c3 
13NorikoTheGhost
wow! i love this chapter..i love how ryan tells how much he loves his twin and how much less of an ice princess sharpay is as a sister..it's like you're giving me a background about my fave characters (yes, i just love the Evans' twins!)
love this chap so far..keep up the good work.. ;-)
*NorikoTheGhost*
13NorikoTheGhostwow! i love this chapter..i love how ryan tells how much he loves his twin and how much less of an ice princess sharpay is as a sister..it's like you're giving me a background about my fave characters (yes, i just love the Evans' twins!)
love this chap so far..keep up the good work.. ;-)
*NorikoTheGhost*
1/28/2009 c2 NorikoTheGhost
the first chapter is good..but it would have been better if you had separated the twin's dialouges..
i mean, instead of this: Just than the door creaked ooen and my brother poked his head in. "Hi sis". I smiled "Hey Ry, come in" I said as I hid my diary under my pillow. "Whats up?" I asked. He groans and lays down on my bed. "Nothing i'm so bored" he sighs and looks at me "What about you?" "Oh just getting ready for my date with Troy Bolton" I say smirking at his astonished look.
you should have written it like this: Just than the door creaked open and my brother poked his head in. "Hi sis." he said.
I smiled "Hey Ry, come in" I said as I hid my diary under my pillow. "Whats up?" I asked.
He groans and lays down on my bed. "Nothing i'm so bored" he sighs and looks at me "What about you?"
"Oh just getting ready for my date with Troy Bolton" I say smirking at his astonished look.
-just some advice for you so that us (your readers) wouldn't get confused.. ;-) try to avoid making your story just one paragraph, other than that your story is wonderful..no offense meant, just giving an advice.. :-) and oh, this one is going on my favorite's list.. ;-)
*NorikoTheGhost*
the first chapter is good..but it would have been better if you had separated the twin's dialouges..
i mean, instead of this: Just than the door creaked ooen and my brother poked his head in. "Hi sis". I smiled "Hey Ry, come in" I said as I hid my diary under my pillow. "Whats up?" I asked. He groans and lays down on my bed. "Nothing i'm so bored" he sighs and looks at me "What about you?" "Oh just getting ready for my date with Troy Bolton" I say smirking at his astonished look.
you should have written it like this: Just than the door creaked open and my brother poked his head in. "Hi sis." he said.
I smiled "Hey Ry, come in" I said as I hid my diary under my pillow. "Whats up?" I asked.
He groans and lays down on my bed. "Nothing i'm so bored" he sighs and looks at me "What about you?"
"Oh just getting ready for my date with Troy Bolton" I say smirking at his astonished look.
-just some advice for you so that us (your readers) wouldn't get confused.. ;-) try to avoid making your story just one paragraph, other than that your story is wonderful..no offense meant, just giving an advice.. :-) and oh, this one is going on my favorite's list.. ;-)
*NorikoTheGhost*
1/28/2009 c1 NorikoTheGhost
hey there..i just read your reviews on my stories..thanks for all the wonderful things you've said.. :-)
anyways, i came to your page to check out your stories..
to be honest, i don't read M-rated fanfics but your trailer is very interesting..i hope troy would choose sharpay in the end but if you want a Tryan story, then it's not a problem either.. :-)
well, i'm gonna go to the first chap now..see yah.. ;-)
(and thanks for the compliment) *smiles*
hey there..i just read your reviews on my stories..thanks for all the wonderful things you've said.. :-)
anyways, i came to your page to check out your stories..
to be honest, i don't read M-rated fanfics but your trailer is very interesting..i hope troy would choose sharpay in the end but if you want a Tryan story, then it's not a problem either.. :-)
well, i'm gonna go to the first chap now..see yah.. ;-)
(and thanks for the compliment) *smiles*
12/3/2008 c4 26Girly 411
okay, really good so far. look back at my suggestions. And this is really amazing! total amazingness! I luv it can't wait for an update! I'll be here to help if you need any ideas. right now i'm drawing up blank. sry. Luv ya!
26Girly 411okay, really good so far. look back at my suggestions. And this is really amazing! total amazingness! I luv it can't wait for an update! I'll be here to help if you need any ideas. right now i'm drawing up blank. sry. Luv ya!
12/3/2008 c3 Girly 411
I can totally see that. Aww...so cute. I'm leaning towards Tryan...though normally I can't stand that pairing, but I think you'd be able to pull it off very well. I can only read it if it's not too graphic, bold, or anything like that. And ony if it's really well written, but there's no worries there. You're an awesome writer! Can't wait for an update! Though I wouldn't mind if it were Troypay...I just luv that pairing, but if you do, you should get Ryan with someone. He needs someone to please him since he never thinks of himself. sighs...update!
I can totally see that. Aww...so cute. I'm leaning towards Tryan...though normally I can't stand that pairing, but I think you'd be able to pull it off very well. I can only read it if it's not too graphic, bold, or anything like that. And ony if it's really well written, but there's no worries there. You're an awesome writer! Can't wait for an update! Though I wouldn't mind if it were Troypay...I just luv that pairing, but if you do, you should get Ryan with someone. He needs someone to please him since he never thinks of himself. sighs...update!
12/3/2008 c2 Girly 411
Oh, that's so cute! okay, so love their relationship so far...wonder what will happen next. hm...ponders. Will read on!
Oh, that's so cute! okay, so love their relationship so far...wonder what will happen next. hm...ponders. Will read on!
12/3/2008 c1 Girly 411
okay...luv the idea. i can't wait to read more! the trailor is really good and will def read on. you're so talented and this is just a great expansion of your talents. Luv ya!
okay...luv the idea. i can't wait to read more! the trailor is really good and will def read on. you're so talented and this is just a great expansion of your talents. Luv ya!
1/18/2007 c3 2Anelriel
DUH! Charlene! Naturally, it must be Ry! Sharpay can kiss Zeke or some other pathetic life-form for all I am concerned. If you do not hearken to my review as such, I shall "roast you...like a turkey!" LOL! Not likely. That was humorous though! In any event, what are you doing yet reading this review? UPDATE! My silly little sugar cane! LOL! Very well done! May the Force be with you. ^_^
2AnelrielDUH! Charlene! Naturally, it must be Ry! Sharpay can kiss Zeke or some other pathetic life-form for all I am concerned. If you do not hearken to my review as such, I shall "roast you...like a turkey!" LOL! Not likely. That was humorous though! In any event, what are you doing yet reading this review? UPDATE! My silly little sugar cane! LOL! Very well done! May the Force be with you. ^_^
1/17/2007 c3 Shoelace22
This is a great story. even though I don't like Tryan I think you should have Troy and Ryan get together.
This is a great story. even though I don't like Tryan I think you should have Troy and Ryan get together.
1/14/2007 c2 59Angel of the Starz
O! I can't wait for the next chapter! Love this story. Update soon.
59Angel of the StarzO! I can't wait for the next chapter! Love this story. Update soon.
1/11/2007 c1 Sammy Riddle
Hm...It sounds great!Can't wait to actually read it!Oh and RYAN,RYAN,RYAN!I love Tryan...So that's MY two cents...Make it good!
Hm...It sounds great!Can't wait to actually read it!Oh and RYAN,RYAN,RYAN!I love Tryan...So that's MY two cents...Make it good!