for DeLUSiON10/30/2013 c7 
13999-2317-999
Uh...are you planning to put someone from Demonata in here, like Dervish or Bec or maybe Beranabus? If that I think you should use Kernel since he is lonely and everything. Or just throw demons in and watch who will rescue her or things like that.
13999-2317-999Uh...are you planning to put someone from Demonata in here, like Dervish or Bec or maybe Beranabus? If that I think you should use Kernel since he is lonely and everything. Or just throw demons in and watch who will rescue her or things like that.
10/19/2013 c8 Bec Potter
I love this story so much. Its been years sine the last update ao i get it if you've given up on it but if not its amazing. Please update!
I love this story so much. Its been years sine the last update ao i get it if you've given up on it but if not its amazing. Please update!
6/19/2013 c8 James
Well, I'm new to fanfiction but here's what I think. Your progression is slow, then really really fast, and it feels like the fluidity of the fic suffers because of this. It's like, all Hogwarts and then BAM, demons. I feel like there should've been more subtle hints because without the title and prelude it's very difficult to make this out as a crossover up until this point. I also don't like that Artery came out of no-where, there was no hinting to a window, no signs of Lord Loss's realm. Also, I don't like the fact that the demons still have access to the corpses, unless they're only figments of magic. Also, I find it very hard to like the protagonist. She's done nothing special, she's very boring and she isn't really growing on me. She has no real definitive or special magic and although she's performed two small feats I'd like to see her do more, and maybe relate it to the mystical art of wandless magic. I'd also like to see more stuff based off the Demonata Universe, but it's your fic not mine. Don't take any of this critique as me saying I don't like the fic, because I love the fic. Some things are just getting to me. If you think any of my critiques are wrong or you'd like me to fortify them, just drop me an email; .
Well, I'm new to fanfiction but here's what I think. Your progression is slow, then really really fast, and it feels like the fluidity of the fic suffers because of this. It's like, all Hogwarts and then BAM, demons. I feel like there should've been more subtle hints because without the title and prelude it's very difficult to make this out as a crossover up until this point. I also don't like that Artery came out of no-where, there was no hinting to a window, no signs of Lord Loss's realm. Also, I don't like the fact that the demons still have access to the corpses, unless they're only figments of magic. Also, I find it very hard to like the protagonist. She's done nothing special, she's very boring and she isn't really growing on me. She has no real definitive or special magic and although she's performed two small feats I'd like to see her do more, and maybe relate it to the mystical art of wandless magic. I'd also like to see more stuff based off the Demonata Universe, but it's your fic not mine. Don't take any of this critique as me saying I don't like the fic, because I love the fic. Some things are just getting to me. If you think any of my critiques are wrong or you'd like me to fortify them, just drop me an email; .
5/20/2012 c8 Nina
WHEN WILL YOU UPDATE? AM DYING WAITING FOR THIS! UPDAAAAAAAATE! ( Please hurry!)
WHEN WILL YOU UPDATE? AM DYING WAITING FOR THIS! UPDAAAAAAAATE! ( Please hurry!)
5/19/2012 c8 nina
this story roxxxxxxxx;) does aria get with harry or does she get transferred to gryfindor. pliz continue! (cant wait for harry and co. to find shes in sltherin
this story roxxxxxxxx;) does aria get with harry or does she get transferred to gryfindor. pliz continue! (cant wait for harry and co. to find shes in sltherin
5/30/2011 c2 Queen NekoChan
She? That's not Grubbs? Or did you just turn him into a girl? Oh well. I'll find out later.
She? That's not Grubbs? Or did you just turn him into a girl? Oh well. I'll find out later.
7/15/2010 c7 ScarletRonove
I really enjoy reading your story... it's very different, like nothing i've ever read before but in a good way. Aria and Snape look like they could be a cool pairning... don't know why but i can already feel the sparks between them. Can't wait to read more :)
I really enjoy reading your story... it's very different, like nothing i've ever read before but in a good way. Aria and Snape look like they could be a cool pairning... don't know why but i can already feel the sparks between them. Can't wait to read more :)
5/18/2010 c8 1beksta
Brilliant so far, I'd almost given up all hope of finding any decent shan fics. I loved how just when you started to get all JKRish you whent back to the world of shan.
Update soon.
1bekstaBrilliant so far, I'd almost given up all hope of finding any decent shan fics. I loved how just when you started to get all JKRish you whent back to the world of shan.
Update soon.
5/18/2010 c8 16shhIwasn'there
well Hogwarts is all too good but pleeeaaase! does Dervish come in? I can't wait. update soon!
16shhIwasn'therewell Hogwarts is all too good but pleeeaaase! does Dervish come in? I can't wait. update soon!
5/18/2010 c5 shhIwasn'there
this is really awesome. youir writing is good, and the plot interesting. ummm...does Dervish come in any time soon?
this is really awesome. youir writing is good, and the plot interesting. ummm...does Dervish come in any time soon?