for Live Well, Laugh Often, Love Always7/11/2007 c11 Anonymous
Oh, I love Lily and James stories, but does the end always have to be so sad?
Oh, I love Lily and James stories, but does the end always have to be so sad?
5/29/2007 c11 ILMW
that was awesome!
that was awesome!
2/26/2007 c1 
5sorrybut
I'm really sorry, but it's kind of flat, very little imagrey if you know what I mean. Sorry...
5sorrybutI'm really sorry, but it's kind of flat, very little imagrey if you know what I mean. Sorry...
2/26/2007 c1 12SuGaRLiLy
I've only had time to read the first chapter- it's really not that bad so far. I might only suggest developing a better summary. "My first fic" might deter some people from reading it, since they might automatically assume that your writing is not as dynamic because you are new to fanfiction. Also, perhaps creating a more interesting title would work in your favor? I have seen so many fics on this site merely titled "Lily and James" or something along those lines. Change your title to something that will help your story to stand out from all the other Lily and James stories out there.
Just a suggestion!
=]
12SuGaRLiLyI've only had time to read the first chapter- it's really not that bad so far. I might only suggest developing a better summary. "My first fic" might deter some people from reading it, since they might automatically assume that your writing is not as dynamic because you are new to fanfiction. Also, perhaps creating a more interesting title would work in your favor? I have seen so many fics on this site merely titled "Lily and James" or something along those lines. Change your title to something that will help your story to stand out from all the other Lily and James stories out there.
Just a suggestion!
=]
2/25/2007 c1 winnifred
okay...first off, your summary "my first fanfic" is not acceptable. sorry, but it just doesn't work. it doesn't work to your advantage at all; by putting that in your summary readers think "oh he/she's a newbie" and they don't read it. and for chapter one...i thought it was okay. it seemed kinda rushed. so ya. there's my opinion.
okay...first off, your summary "my first fanfic" is not acceptable. sorry, but it just doesn't work. it doesn't work to your advantage at all; by putting that in your summary readers think "oh he/she's a newbie" and they don't read it. and for chapter one...i thought it was okay. it seemed kinda rushed. so ya. there's my opinion.
2/25/2007 c11 2believeinmagic14
omg love this story :)
i especially liked the jokes that all of them would make heehee
2believeinmagic14omg love this story :)
i especially liked the jokes that all of them would make heehee