for I See You12/22/2007 c6 
3blueyed18
I really like this story. It's unique and very well written. I really can't wait until Rory and Logan get together. Which, I hope will happen. Right? :)
3blueyed18I really like this story. It's unique and very well written. I really can't wait until Rory and Logan get together. Which, I hope will happen. Right? :)
12/21/2007 c6 monique89
Love this story!
can't believe i haven't found it before now. I love the different rory/logan meeting.
Great chapter mate :)
Love this story!
can't believe i haven't found it before now. I love the different rory/logan meeting.
Great chapter mate :)
3/24/2007 c1 12Philipa Aleshre
There are some things I wanna say about this.
First of all, I like the concept of this whole story. I really see Logan thinking the way you wrote him in the first chapters about being invisible and wanted for himself rather than for his last name. I also liked the casual encounter between him and Rory, it was cute. Even though you wrote the prologue and the first two chapters in the same page, it was cool and I liked it.
But I do have some observations you may want to hear. For example, I definitely think that you wrote Logan's way of speaking way too serious for him. You did a great job with his thoughts, but I think his way of talking made him sound older than you wrote him. I'd also would have liked a few explanations at the beggining of this, like some author notes, saying that Chris and Lorelai married (which I'm guessing they did), or that it's and AU and Rory and Logan never met at Yale... you know, stuff like that is kind of handful for the reader and it's good to write it because they can have a better idea of what you're going to write.
I liked a lot how you said that Logan once thought of being an architect, but never really did it because of his family. It was something I could also see happening. Finn's appearance was a nice touch too, and... Sophia, is she a creation of yours or did I miss something in the show? I've been kind of out of my mind lately and at times I forget lots of things.
So, I don't think this sucks, but if you think you need a beta, then try to get one.
Bye! Keep writing!
PS: I'm reading the second chapter later because I'm going to bed now.
12Philipa AleshreThere are some things I wanna say about this.
First of all, I like the concept of this whole story. I really see Logan thinking the way you wrote him in the first chapters about being invisible and wanted for himself rather than for his last name. I also liked the casual encounter between him and Rory, it was cute. Even though you wrote the prologue and the first two chapters in the same page, it was cool and I liked it.
But I do have some observations you may want to hear. For example, I definitely think that you wrote Logan's way of speaking way too serious for him. You did a great job with his thoughts, but I think his way of talking made him sound older than you wrote him. I'd also would have liked a few explanations at the beggining of this, like some author notes, saying that Chris and Lorelai married (which I'm guessing they did), or that it's and AU and Rory and Logan never met at Yale... you know, stuff like that is kind of handful for the reader and it's good to write it because they can have a better idea of what you're going to write.
I liked a lot how you said that Logan once thought of being an architect, but never really did it because of his family. It was something I could also see happening. Finn's appearance was a nice touch too, and... Sophia, is she a creation of yours or did I miss something in the show? I've been kind of out of my mind lately and at times I forget lots of things.
So, I don't think this sucks, but if you think you need a beta, then try to get one.
Bye! Keep writing!
PS: I'm reading the second chapter later because I'm going to bed now.
3/20/2007 c5 Cyndi-rhyla
i cant wait to see how rory will react when logan says he likes her. im crossing my fingers that she reciprocate but knowing how author can sometimes like to torture their readers, i'd say she will resist at first :p
wonderful update. post more soon. cheers!
i cant wait to see how rory will react when logan says he likes her. im crossing my fingers that she reciprocate but knowing how author can sometimes like to torture their readers, i'd say she will resist at first :p
wonderful update. post more soon. cheers!
3/20/2007 c5 cathyrock
Loved it all, In ROme, maybe Rory could insist to see all historical places, and drag Logan with her, they could go the Fontaine Trevis, something could happen. Just random ideas,can't wait to read more.
Loved it all, In ROme, maybe Rory could insist to see all historical places, and drag Logan with her, they could go the Fontaine Trevis, something could happen. Just random ideas,can't wait to read more.
3/20/2007 c5 kmcmenimon
i really like your story. you should have them visit the spanish steps. the old roman forum, the collessium,(sp), vatican, and the pantheon.
i really like your story. you should have them visit the spanish steps. the old roman forum, the collessium,(sp), vatican, and the pantheon.
3/20/2007 c5 Wouldn'tItBeLoverly
OMG! you totally stole from other stories! have you by any chance read "And then she smiled at me" and "The game of life"+
the food-envy thing, and the woman who mixed up the brands.
rip-off!
I don't like leaving bad reviews, but stealing others ideas, that's just lame.
OMG! you totally stole from other stories! have you by any chance read "And then she smiled at me" and "The game of life"+
the food-envy thing, and the woman who mixed up the brands.
rip-off!
I don't like leaving bad reviews, but stealing others ideas, that's just lame.
3/14/2007 c4 cathyrock
I love your story. I just came back form Italy, so I can't wait to find out what's going to happen there. Is Tristan going to try something? PLease update as soon as you can.
I love your story. I just came back form Italy, so I can't wait to find out what's going to happen there. Is Tristan going to try something? PLease update as soon as you can.
3/10/2007 c4 dolce amore mio
i can't wait for the next chapter! living in italy and all. please update soon!
i can't wait for the next chapter! living in italy and all. please update soon!
3/9/2007 c4 Cyndi-rhyla
wonderful chapter. you still haven't reveal what tristan role is in rory's life ;) judging from the easy camaderie that flows between the two, my initial guess is good friends but i often am proven wrong :)
i like the fact that you are establishing a solid friendship between rory and logan before you push them together in a relationship. in most cases, its often that logan will make his move by showing his infamous huntzberger charm at the beginning and both will get to know each other in between dates, parties and pillow talks. jumping too quickly in a relationship sometimes doesn't bode well for this two so im really glad that you are taking it slow. just dont make it too slow though :p
i look forward on how logan, tristan and rory interact in italy. post more soon.
cheers!
wonderful chapter. you still haven't reveal what tristan role is in rory's life ;) judging from the easy camaderie that flows between the two, my initial guess is good friends but i often am proven wrong :)
i like the fact that you are establishing a solid friendship between rory and logan before you push them together in a relationship. in most cases, its often that logan will make his move by showing his infamous huntzberger charm at the beginning and both will get to know each other in between dates, parties and pillow talks. jumping too quickly in a relationship sometimes doesn't bode well for this two so im really glad that you are taking it slow. just dont make it too slow though :p
i look forward on how logan, tristan and rory interact in italy. post more soon.
cheers!