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3/11/2007 c2 12Crimson Tears
The end when the guests are going into the hotel seems to be a bit rushed. Otherwise this chapter was pretty amazing. I love the description of the swirling mist. Very nice. One criticism, Spell checker!

"The Vauxhall sped away, tyres kicking up dirt and gravel as it turned out from the rest stop and onto the highway." -

Tyres= Tires

“I saw a sign that said we were 1 kilometre from Sororca back there.”

kilometre= Kilometer

Other than that fantastic job! I know damn typo demons! I look forward to the next chapter!

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3/11/2007 c1 Crimson Tears
Wow, very nicely written. I enjoyed this story very much. I got the feeling that it was very cloudy and over cast, just on the verge of raining. You didn't describe the weather, but the context suggested the feel. Very nicely done. I look forward to more chapters!

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