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6BlindJedi
Great story so far. I am thoroughly enjoying it. I hope that you complete your story, for I know that other authors (sh, yes I'm one of them), start writing stories and fail to complete them. I love your characterizations and your build up towards a little more action. Here's an interesting thought for you. Would it not make sense to hide a Horcrux in the DADA office? It is said that the defense position is jinxed to allow a teacher only one year, and since Voldy is purported to have left Horcruxes in places he considers important, wouldn't Hogwarts be a likely venue? Regardless, keep up the great work.
6BlindJediGreat story so far. I am thoroughly enjoying it. I hope that you complete your story, for I know that other authors (sh, yes I'm one of them), start writing stories and fail to complete them. I love your characterizations and your build up towards a little more action. Here's an interesting thought for you. Would it not make sense to hide a Horcrux in the DADA office? It is said that the defense position is jinxed to allow a teacher only one year, and since Voldy is purported to have left Horcruxes in places he considers important, wouldn't Hogwarts be a likely venue? Regardless, keep up the great work.
3/17/2007 c4 2hash4uall
hey... ur story line is good.. but will u finish it? i have been reading books... after books.. it's just a disappointment that people dont complete.. anyway about ur story.. i think the part where harry seeking remnus help to go to godric hollow is a bit weird.. i mean he has never been to close to him.. and when is the training? is harry going to be exposing the truth to the order of phoenix? i think u are rushing into it too fast.. will please do update.. the part of harry intimidating dudley was really nice.. i like the letter concept too.. being realistic.. it's good.. please update .. cant wait...
2hash4uallhey... ur story line is good.. but will u finish it? i have been reading books... after books.. it's just a disappointment that people dont complete.. anyway about ur story.. i think the part where harry seeking remnus help to go to godric hollow is a bit weird.. i mean he has never been to close to him.. and when is the training? is harry going to be exposing the truth to the order of phoenix? i think u are rushing into it too fast.. will please do update.. the part of harry intimidating dudley was really nice.. i like the letter concept too.. being realistic.. it's good.. please update .. cant wait...
3/16/2007 c1 26Viopathartic
oh, I remember your fic over at harrypotterff right. I loved it, but I think you should post this at too. There's a lot of very well written fics and it's all H/Hr and reviews come fast. There's also R/L, D/G and J/L just to let you know. Check it out; you'll like it better. I'm also a writer here and over at portkey.
26Viopatharticoh, I remember your fic over at harrypotterff right. I loved it, but I think you should post this at too. There's a lot of very well written fics and it's all H/Hr and reviews come fast. There's also R/L, D/G and J/L just to let you know. Check it out; you'll like it better. I'm also a writer here and over at portkey.
3/16/2007 c3 3MerlockedWhovian
I really liked this chapter and the previos ones,too.I did notice however that you didn't say that all characters belong to J.K.Rowling blah...blah...blah you might want to add that they get really uptight about it.
3MerlockedWhovianI really liked this chapter and the previos ones,too.I did notice however that you didn't say that all characters belong to J.K.Rowling blah...blah...blah you might want to add that they get really uptight about it.
3/16/2007 c3 Janax
This is a great start to the story. I find your writing to be detailed, but not overly so. I like the level of thought that Harry & co. are showing and that you're not rushing around for the sake of rushing to a particular point. Well written so far!
I'll be interested to see how you deal with Harry's power. There have been a lot of different ideas about how he's been such a "poor" performer in most areas in the past, yet he needs enough to be successful (Yes, I'm one of those that think Book 6 was a waste in this regard)...
The only critique I had was the fact that Harry was worried about the underage restriction, yet had Hermione and/or Ron cast spells. He knows that the underage monitoring is monitored by location and not by individual, right (or am I losing touch myself)?
I'm eager to see what more you bring to the table - thanks for writing!
This is a great start to the story. I find your writing to be detailed, but not overly so. I like the level of thought that Harry & co. are showing and that you're not rushing around for the sake of rushing to a particular point. Well written so far!
I'll be interested to see how you deal with Harry's power. There have been a lot of different ideas about how he's been such a "poor" performer in most areas in the past, yet he needs enough to be successful (Yes, I'm one of those that think Book 6 was a waste in this regard)...
The only critique I had was the fact that Harry was worried about the underage restriction, yet had Hermione and/or Ron cast spells. He knows that the underage monitoring is monitored by location and not by individual, right (or am I losing touch myself)?
I'm eager to see what more you bring to the table - thanks for writing!