for Loves Strange Encounters8/21/2022 c1 catspats31
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5/24/2017 c1 peonyfics
I never thought of ray to be a screamer w! This also had funny moments I LURVED IT
I never thought of ray to be a screamer w! This also had funny moments I LURVED IT
12/18/2007 c1 
6RosalieHale122
O.O i can not believe how brill this is! it's the best story that i've ever read!
6RosalieHale122O.O i can not believe how brill this is! it's the best story that i've ever read!
5/3/2007 c1 3KingJJ
Nice story, not the greatest lemon, but it was good. I loved this sentence "Then is when the remainder of Kais restraint fell out the window onto the street below, got ran over, and died." It made me laugh my ass off, I read it to my roommate cuz she was lookin at me funny. lol Good work! XD
3KingJJNice story, not the greatest lemon, but it was good. I loved this sentence "Then is when the remainder of Kais restraint fell out the window onto the street below, got ran over, and died." It made me laugh my ass off, I read it to my roommate cuz she was lookin at me funny. lol Good work! XD
4/18/2007 c1 Chinatsu Nekoi
GOD THAT WAS SO GOOD! REALLY FOR THE FIRST STORY WITH LEMON GOOD! AND HELL WITH THE SPELLING GRAMMAR EITHER WAY GOOD!
GOD THAT WAS SO GOOD! REALLY FOR THE FIRST STORY WITH LEMON GOOD! AND HELL WITH THE SPELLING GRAMMAR EITHER WAY GOOD!
4/13/2007 c1 10As Silent As The Shadows
Hm...well the overall idea was good. You had a couple spelling and grammar errors, but nothing too bad. Personally I think it needed a little bit more dialouge before the lemon, and the whole changing POV thing cuts away from the story. But, whatever floats your boat. Not bad for your first story. Good job. ^_^ ASATS
10As Silent As The ShadowsHm...well the overall idea was good. You had a couple spelling and grammar errors, but nothing too bad. Personally I think it needed a little bit more dialouge before the lemon, and the whole changing POV thing cuts away from the story. But, whatever floats your boat. Not bad for your first story. Good job. ^_^ ASATS