for Fear4/7/2007 c1 
32Sapphyre Blu
hehehehe-Oh you got me. I didn't see that one coming-hehehehe good job :):):)
32Sapphyre Bluhehehehe-Oh you got me. I didn't see that one coming-hehehehe good job :):):)
4/7/2007 c1 30NotARedhead
Very cute little premise, but you need to work on character voices. Tony and Kate don't sound natural. You've written Kate as though she's talking like Ziva, sort of, and Tony's language - even his thoughts - are too formal. But it did make me laugh. I thought, "Oh ... here's another angst fic about Tony be captured," and it turned out all it was was the elevator. Hee!
30NotARedheadVery cute little premise, but you need to work on character voices. Tony and Kate don't sound natural. You've written Kate as though she's talking like Ziva, sort of, and Tony's language - even his thoughts - are too formal. But it did make me laugh. I thought, "Oh ... here's another angst fic about Tony be captured," and it turned out all it was was the elevator. Hee!