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7/22/2009 c6 6isabellamasens
This is getting really good. I'm such a big fan of your writing. I hope you update Miracles soon because I'm addicted to that. I like the writing style in this one. It's really good.
7/5/2008 c33 3Just Call Me Mrs Cullen
Omg, I loved this fanfic! :-) You're such a talented writer and I can't wait to read the squeal! SO GOOD, wow!
1/7/2008 c33 4ChermaineisAwesome
Wow, i don't even know what to say. Just, amazing.

I know tommy already told her that he never cared about her, but maybe we could find out if he was lying then or not. idk, but I just want to find out if he ever felt anything for her.
1/4/2008 c33 BentBackTulips
I don't mean for this to sound rude, but the point in which i got interested in this story was in the last half of this chapter. Maybe it's because I'm not a huge angst fan, or maybe it's because I don't like that way you made Tommy a total ass (on the outside a least).

With that said I'd like to say that you a phenomenal writer. Your personifications are so vivid and you describe scenes so well it's as if I've seen this all unfold before my very eyes. Not to mention your spelling and grammar is impeccable.

Your story is great, and with all these positive reviews I'm sure you realize that you are a fabulous writer. Now that I'm into the story, I can't wait for your next installment and I have high hopes for plenty of Jommy coming up ahead, though don't push it and make it unnatural! By the way, great job not doing that wither, I can't say how glad I am that this isn't some stupid fic where they get together instantly.

Anyways, sorry for the long review, I just wanted to tell you my opinions on the story. Overall it's a great work and i give it a sure A+, not that my opinions matter XD
1/2/2008 c33 29MyPassionateMusician
*blinks couple of time*

*mouth agape*

ah

omg omg omg omg omg omg

i just...

omg omg

i don't even know wat to say.

tht was so incredibly awesome!

tht SO beat my fav chapter!

haha!

i can't wait until part 2. it's gonna be great i kno it is!

questions jude would ask...

tommy doesn't have to answer but i know one question she's prolly dying to know "did you ever love me?"

tht's the question id be asking.

pmrs!
12/31/2007 c33 MadKelly
Wow That was an amazing chapter! I can't wait for part two to come out! :D
12/30/2007 c33 Shoutoutloud91
Damn it, I don't give a flip if it's 1 day until January 1st! AH! I wanna read more *begins wailing like a baby*. Now I remember why I read COMPLETED ffs. I save myself the trouble of nearly having a heart-attack over things like this...

Can't complain though. Your story's too awesome! :)

Now I have to go into the New Year with the thoughts of what he's protecting Jude from...

- Emily :)
12/30/2007 c33 browneyedgrl061
i love this story can't wait for second part but is this a jommy story?
12/30/2007 c33 5101ISFAN
I'm watching and waiting. I luv it update more FASTER please!
12/30/2007 c33 13filthysmile
Questions:

"Why are u such an ass"

"Are you just pretending to love me?"

"Who did u kill" [angie?]

"About his family and his past"

hope those helped and be sure to PMASAP
12/30/2007 c33 Allie
OMG! You got a huge 'aww' from me at the end.. Thank god Tommy hasn't gone all evil. But... murder? Whoa. I need more!
12/30/2007 c33 76driver picks the music
holy crap! that was awesome! i can't beliebe it! who did he kill? now i can't wait until january! lol!
12/29/2007 c33 31charley07
oh lord, you kill me. i think the story is finally getting to a breaking point and you throw the 'hiatus' card at me. boo. haha. anyways, i'm still enthralled with it, and still lost, but i'll continue reading until the end. maybe i'll understand someday? love it.
12/29/2007 c33 afan
well that answered some of my questions. Nice job, you really kept me hanging onto every single one of your words...i didn't want this to end.Well i still do want to know who he killed, who is the one that hired him to get close to jude and etc. Oh, one more thing before I close this review, my last one for the year 2007, I really liked how Tommy finally explained why he was acting like such an ass, pardon my french, and now he is finally being gentle with Jude. I know it is going to take time, but I think Jude will learn to trust him again, lets just hope he doesn't throw her into anymore freezing lakes just to prove his point. Love the story...great job, keep it up.
12/29/2007 c33 mandy1485hotmail.com
Aww, that was so sweet. I wasnt expecting that. Im confused though...In one of the chapters tommy whispered "Tommy wuold be proud." At least i thought it was tommy. Was it chris? lol Cuz ive been waiting for twin to appear and now it doesnt seem like there is one coming. lol PMASAP I cant wait to see what happens next. This is my fav!
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