for Winwin7/8/2007 c3 Manga-Fanatic
Awsome story!
This is a well written story and it's interesting.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
UPDATE SOON? Please!
-Manga-Fanatic
Awsome story!
This is a well written story and it's interesting.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
UPDATE SOON? Please!
-Manga-Fanatic
7/3/2007 c3 
23Kenkaya
Very funny!
I love EdWin and I love cats so naturally i was going to enjoy this story no matter what! As for the Ed OOC thing, people act differently when they're alone vs. around other people so you could always use that excuse. I like how you included his one-sided conversations to kitty-Winry. I do the exact same thing with my cat! The poor thing probably thinks all humans are weird-schizco creatures thanks to me. Anyway, interesting plot so far. And the ring has the same circle the Homunculus used to make the stone? That pipes my curiousity. I'm still wondering how the Hell that turned her into a cat then but then again, this doesn't seem like the kind of story that's meant to make that much sense. I'm still enjoying all the crazy fun! Plus, that info really helps to expand the plot's potential. I especially like the line after Ed figures out its really Winry.
"Slowly, hesitantly, Winry nodded…
…and Edward fainted.
Actually, no he didn’t. Come on, he turned his brother into a suit of armor, lost two limbs, saw a strange “gate” thing, and fought against undead creatures that have superpowers; let’s face it, nothing surprises Edward anymore."
I cracked up at that! You definately have a point!
Now on to the critique part of my review. This is obviously meant to be a fun, not-to-be-taken-that-seriously story so I didn't mind any of the OOC or inconsistancies (in fact, I downright liked some of them.) You overdid the blushing thing a little bit, but again, didn't mind it to much since I could tell that was a personal preference. The one improvement I feel you could make is to perhaps add a few more sentences here and there to describe their surroundings. There were several times the characters seemed to just be moving from room to room without much sense of atmosphere. Also, I was a little confused as to when the last chapter took place. Was it the middle of the night? The next morning? Other than that, the story flowed pretty well (in my opinion.)
Anyways, good job so far and I totally feel you on the update situation. I'm notoriously bad myself. But take your time, give us an awesome next chapter, and good luck. I'm definately looking forward to more. Happy writing!
23KenkayaVery funny!
I love EdWin and I love cats so naturally i was going to enjoy this story no matter what! As for the Ed OOC thing, people act differently when they're alone vs. around other people so you could always use that excuse. I like how you included his one-sided conversations to kitty-Winry. I do the exact same thing with my cat! The poor thing probably thinks all humans are weird-schizco creatures thanks to me. Anyway, interesting plot so far. And the ring has the same circle the Homunculus used to make the stone? That pipes my curiousity. I'm still wondering how the Hell that turned her into a cat then but then again, this doesn't seem like the kind of story that's meant to make that much sense. I'm still enjoying all the crazy fun! Plus, that info really helps to expand the plot's potential. I especially like the line after Ed figures out its really Winry.
"Slowly, hesitantly, Winry nodded…
…and Edward fainted.
Actually, no he didn’t. Come on, he turned his brother into a suit of armor, lost two limbs, saw a strange “gate” thing, and fought against undead creatures that have superpowers; let’s face it, nothing surprises Edward anymore."
I cracked up at that! You definately have a point!
Now on to the critique part of my review. This is obviously meant to be a fun, not-to-be-taken-that-seriously story so I didn't mind any of the OOC or inconsistancies (in fact, I downright liked some of them.) You overdid the blushing thing a little bit, but again, didn't mind it to much since I could tell that was a personal preference. The one improvement I feel you could make is to perhaps add a few more sentences here and there to describe their surroundings. There were several times the characters seemed to just be moving from room to room without much sense of atmosphere. Also, I was a little confused as to when the last chapter took place. Was it the middle of the night? The next morning? Other than that, the story flowed pretty well (in my opinion.)
Anyways, good job so far and I totally feel you on the update situation. I'm notoriously bad myself. But take your time, give us an awesome next chapter, and good luck. I'm definately looking forward to more. Happy writing!
7/3/2007 c3 1Tsugumigirl101
no imperfections(sp?) here i think it's quite good ^_^ I also understand about hating 2 update and not feel like writting and stuff i get that 2 :( oh well got u on my alerts list and can't waite 4 ur next update :) oh and OOCness is good :)
1Tsugumigirl101no imperfections(sp?) here i think it's quite good ^_^ I also understand about hating 2 update and not feel like writting and stuff i get that 2 :( oh well got u on my alerts list and can't waite 4 ur next update :) oh and OOCness is good :)
7/3/2007 c3 44ShadowDragon-24
Suspense is killing me! . Story seems promising and I can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^ So, update soon!
44ShadowDragon-24Suspense is killing me! . Story seems promising and I can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^ So, update soon!
7/3/2007 c3 15Fibonacci to Infinity
I was to lazy to review on all the chapters, but please continue. You need to do one where Ed, gets turned into a cat! Tee hee. *Chuckles Evily*
15Fibonacci to InfinityI was to lazy to review on all the chapters, but please continue. You need to do one where Ed, gets turned into a cat! Tee hee. *Chuckles Evily*
7/3/2007 c3 DarkSquire008
Hey! I really love ur OOC Ed. That's how I would write if I did. I like the story. Please continue soon.
Hey! I really love ur OOC Ed. That's how I would write if I did. I like the story. Please continue soon.
6/19/2007 c2 2CaRiMaiLSKiTTleS
aww! (squeals) and she is in Edo's bath tub! (blushes badly and nose bleeds) Gosh she is one LUCKY kitty!
2CaRiMaiLSKiTTleSaww! (squeals) and she is in Edo's bath tub! (blushes badly and nose bleeds) Gosh she is one LUCKY kitty!
6/19/2007 c2 1MangaLover24
i really liked this chappy! but it seems like ed has forgotten all about winry, because you dont say that he is still worrying about her absence for the past couple of days...but please update!
1MangaLover24i really liked this chappy! but it seems like ed has forgotten all about winry, because you dont say that he is still worrying about her absence for the past couple of days...but please update!
6/18/2007 c2 1TheFennecFox
Two months later exactly! hahaha. Nice. Good chapter, update soon? Maybe on the 17th of July? XD
I'm just teasing. Can't wait for the next chapter though! ^_^
1TheFennecFoxTwo months later exactly! hahaha. Nice. Good chapter, update soon? Maybe on the 17th of July? XD
I'm just teasing. Can't wait for the next chapter though! ^_^