for And Miles To Go Before I Sleep1/17/2011 c1 
2obscurci la lumiere
Excellent exposition. I love this story and positively hope you continue one day soon.
2obscurci la lumiereExcellent exposition. I love this story and positively hope you continue one day soon.
1/26/2009 c1 88Lasgalendil
Definitely intriguing! I see you haven't updated for awhile...are you planning on finishing this story? I would like to know more about what Bellatrix is searching for at the beginning of the piece, and what secret she is trying to hide from the Dark Lord. We get the feeling of terror and suspense (especially using Occlumency against him!), but we don't really have a clue as to what is going on.
There were a few typos, but I think someone else mentioned most of them already. I did notice 'ends of his robe' instead of 'end of his robe.' Stylistically, I would like to see more consistently with 'forcing herself to breath evenly, deepLY in through her nose." Evenly, deep (the way it is published) combines an adverb with an adjective when they are both describing a verb.
I hope you update this! AU can be a great medium. Keep writing!
88LasgalendilDefinitely intriguing! I see you haven't updated for awhile...are you planning on finishing this story? I would like to know more about what Bellatrix is searching for at the beginning of the piece, and what secret she is trying to hide from the Dark Lord. We get the feeling of terror and suspense (especially using Occlumency against him!), but we don't really have a clue as to what is going on.
There were a few typos, but I think someone else mentioned most of them already. I did notice 'ends of his robe' instead of 'end of his robe.' Stylistically, I would like to see more consistently with 'forcing herself to breath evenly, deepLY in through her nose." Evenly, deep (the way it is published) combines an adverb with an adjective when they are both describing a verb.
I hope you update this! AU can be a great medium. Keep writing!
7/16/2007 c1 2Sasquatch1
the idea's extremely interesting. Bellatrix as a horcrux...no wonder she's insane...looking forward to pansy's role.
2Sasquatch1the idea's extremely interesting. Bellatrix as a horcrux...no wonder she's insane...looking forward to pansy's role.
4/30/2007 c1 20Visible
I'm intrigued. I'm happy that this will be a Pansy story. Hope to hear from this soon enough.
-Lylian
20VisibleI'm intrigued. I'm happy that this will be a Pansy story. Hope to hear from this soon enough.
-Lylian
4/30/2007 c1 pinehead
I only noticed two mistakes: Ran through her mind, not run threw her mind. And a bottle, not an bottle. Must be a typo. Have the same problems with homophones by the way. -(Where/were).
Your story's very intriguing, can't wait for the next chapter!
(Oh and, lol, somehow I found the very last line funny. Good luck with your exams.)
I only noticed two mistakes: Ran through her mind, not run threw her mind. And a bottle, not an bottle. Must be a typo. Have the same problems with homophones by the way. -(Where/were).
Your story's very intriguing, can't wait for the next chapter!
(Oh and, lol, somehow I found the very last line funny. Good luck with your exams.)