for Naruto vs Sasuke: The Aftermath12/24/2024 c48 Kitten Arina
You are right about war and the whole Disney ending thing. And truthfully it would be a miracle for someone to save him after that beheading. But that doesn’t excuse you Killing Chouji. I know that I and many others have gotten at you for this and that it has change nothing, and will change nothing. But I can’t just let it go. Especially with the death of Asuma, you gave that character a chance at redeeming himself. There are two people in my opinion that could have and should have died instead of Chouji, with the way that you have written them.
You are right about war and the whole Disney ending thing. And truthfully it would be a miracle for someone to save him after that beheading. But that doesn’t excuse you Killing Chouji. I know that I and many others have gotten at you for this and that it has change nothing, and will change nothing. But I can’t just let it go. Especially with the death of Asuma, you gave that character a chance at redeeming himself. There are two people in my opinion that could have and should have died instead of Chouji, with the way that you have written them.
12/24/2024 c43 Kitten Arina
I wish that you would edit things by giving us a real chapter here after so long. Because I will never count this as an actual chapter. The way that fan fiction does.
I wish that you would edit things by giving us a real chapter here after so long. Because I will never count this as an actual chapter. The way that fan fiction does.
12/23/2024 c13 Kitten Arina
I am not much of a Young Sakura fan. I get why she ended up putting a target on both Naruto and Hinata, unfortunately Hinata. She thought that she was about to die so it makes sense but the only one that deserves that sort of treatment were the ones that did what they did to Sakura.
It has been awhile since you have updated this story in any fashion. I do hope that everything is alright. Would love to see an update even if is just a chapter being edited. So long as it was clear that, that is what actually took place.
I am not much of a Young Sakura fan. I get why she ended up putting a target on both Naruto and Hinata, unfortunately Hinata. She thought that she was about to die so it makes sense but the only one that deserves that sort of treatment were the ones that did what they did to Sakura.
It has been awhile since you have updated this story in any fashion. I do hope that everything is alright. Would love to see an update even if is just a chapter being edited. So long as it was clear that, that is what actually took place.
11/25/2024 c55 
27The Mother Rose
Thank you Thank you Thank you. That was the one thing that was pissing me off the most in this story. Sakura once again skates free for doing the things in the worst possible way imaginable simply because she was a lovesick little fool of a child. The problem with that ideology is she was raised from a very young age to know exactly what treason is and so surely knew she was committing it against her home village when she followed the instructions Sasuke gave her in the missive, he sent her. Not even for a second did she stop and consider how he was able to even send her that missive without it being intercepted. For the possibly smartest girl in her age group, she displayed remarkable stupidity in this incident. She knew for a fact Sasuke had abandoned the village and sided with their enemies. She knew for a fact she was required by village law to turn over any communication she might receive from him to higher authorities as they knew much better than she a (12, 13) year old girl might know the games a recent traitor might try to employ. But she ignored it all and skated free with no punishment because Tsunade saw herself in Sakura. Other than the normal reasonable trauma related to what had happened to her during her time with Sasuke and his Otanin(don't remember how to spell this right now. Too drunk.) compatriots, she truly did receive no punishment for her attempted abandonment and betrayal of her comrades. Everyone seemed to overlook the fact that Ino, Hinata and the other girls are only recognized potential victims because Sakura told Sasuke they were important to Naruto who he, Sasuke, sees as his number one enemy even if he thinks his true enemy is Itachi. Truth is for Sasuke the number one enemy is Naruto. Itachi is number 2. Sasuke truly believes he needs to kill Naruto.
27The Mother RoseThank you Thank you Thank you. That was the one thing that was pissing me off the most in this story. Sakura once again skates free for doing the things in the worst possible way imaginable simply because she was a lovesick little fool of a child. The problem with that ideology is she was raised from a very young age to know exactly what treason is and so surely knew she was committing it against her home village when she followed the instructions Sasuke gave her in the missive, he sent her. Not even for a second did she stop and consider how he was able to even send her that missive without it being intercepted. For the possibly smartest girl in her age group, she displayed remarkable stupidity in this incident. She knew for a fact Sasuke had abandoned the village and sided with their enemies. She knew for a fact she was required by village law to turn over any communication she might receive from him to higher authorities as they knew much better than she a (12, 13) year old girl might know the games a recent traitor might try to employ. But she ignored it all and skated free with no punishment because Tsunade saw herself in Sakura. Other than the normal reasonable trauma related to what had happened to her during her time with Sasuke and his Otanin(don't remember how to spell this right now. Too drunk.) compatriots, she truly did receive no punishment for her attempted abandonment and betrayal of her comrades. Everyone seemed to overlook the fact that Ino, Hinata and the other girls are only recognized potential victims because Sakura told Sasuke they were important to Naruto who he, Sasuke, sees as his number one enemy even if he thinks his true enemy is Itachi. Truth is for Sasuke the number one enemy is Naruto. Itachi is number 2. Sasuke truly believes he needs to kill Naruto.
11/6/2024 c1 Guest
Naruto x yugito is better than Naruto x hinata.
Hinata has nothing in common with naruto
Naruto x yugito is better than Naruto x hinata.
Hinata has nothing in common with naruto
10/31/2024 c35 DarkHunter10
Not EXACTLY sure how the Uchiha could be considered "nobility" ANYWAY... The leaf was founded by an idiot that turned around and tried to destroy it, almost as soon as he helped FORM it.. Because nobody wanted him to rule it!... That sounds like a whiny child... Not a "noble leader". There has NEVER been a diamyo OR hokage from the uchiha clan... NOT ONE.. Soooo.. How exactly does ANYBODY consider them "nobility" in the first place? Their eyes? Well considering all one has to do to get those eyes is just TAKE them from someone that has em'... Um.. Doesn't seem very "noble" there either. Considering they work perfectly fine for ANYBODY that just "nabs them up" (plus the people seem to INSTANTLY know what they can do and use them for those purposes) ... Are EASY to exchange around between any/everyone AND the uchiha don't regenerate them... Doesn't seem like much of a "bloodline". Add in all the DOWNSIDES to trying to "level them up" and the ATROCIOUS ways they do... And well.. The "pink eye" REALLY doesn't seem like a bloodline OR an inborn power as much as it just looks like a "BAD WRITING DEVICE". Or AT BEST.. A "virus" because the sharringan REALLY IS able to be "spread" to ANYONE AT ALL...
Not EXACTLY sure how the Uchiha could be considered "nobility" ANYWAY... The leaf was founded by an idiot that turned around and tried to destroy it, almost as soon as he helped FORM it.. Because nobody wanted him to rule it!... That sounds like a whiny child... Not a "noble leader". There has NEVER been a diamyo OR hokage from the uchiha clan... NOT ONE.. Soooo.. How exactly does ANYBODY consider them "nobility" in the first place? Their eyes? Well considering all one has to do to get those eyes is just TAKE them from someone that has em'... Um.. Doesn't seem very "noble" there either. Considering they work perfectly fine for ANYBODY that just "nabs them up" (plus the people seem to INSTANTLY know what they can do and use them for those purposes) ... Are EASY to exchange around between any/everyone AND the uchiha don't regenerate them... Doesn't seem like much of a "bloodline". Add in all the DOWNSIDES to trying to "level them up" and the ATROCIOUS ways they do... And well.. The "pink eye" REALLY doesn't seem like a bloodline OR an inborn power as much as it just looks like a "BAD WRITING DEVICE". Or AT BEST.. A "virus" because the sharringan REALLY IS able to be "spread" to ANYONE AT ALL...
10/31/2024 c33 DarkHunter10
You know, I've never heard in ANY of the data books that Asuma was SUCH A DRUNK! Kurenai has a drinking problem (at least according to canon) but Asuma never did. All I can say, is you REALLY seem to dislike the character of Asuma and it shows... But Oh well.
Danzo with the sharringan was kinda an obvious move.. EVERY villain gets the sharringan AT SOME POINT... It's almost a requirement... Also, it seems DISTURBINGLY easy to just "hot swap" eyeballs in this series doesn't it?.. This supposedly "great and powerful bloodline" seems about as difficult to acquire as a pokemon card. Don't need medics or risky procedures.. Or EVEN OPERATING ROOMS... NOPE just grab em' and stuff em' in the eye sockets... They just start working. That seems a LITTLE SUS to me. Seems funny in boruto they just got RID of the whole damn mechanic and gave people "cyber eyes" which DOES EVERYTHING A SHARRINGAN, M. SHARRINGAN AND BYAKKGUAN can do, all rolled into one and that dozens can have at any time... Well so much for the "great and powerful abilities, done through meticulous bloodline breeding". Also do you ever find it ODD... That naruto ALWAYS NEEDS ALL THIS STUPID "training", but Obitdo, Nageto, sasuke and Itachi NEVER need to train in ANYTHING, they just spontaneously develop powers and INSTANTLY know entire suites of uses for them. That seems like very shoddy writing.
You know, I've never heard in ANY of the data books that Asuma was SUCH A DRUNK! Kurenai has a drinking problem (at least according to canon) but Asuma never did. All I can say, is you REALLY seem to dislike the character of Asuma and it shows... But Oh well.
Danzo with the sharringan was kinda an obvious move.. EVERY villain gets the sharringan AT SOME POINT... It's almost a requirement... Also, it seems DISTURBINGLY easy to just "hot swap" eyeballs in this series doesn't it?.. This supposedly "great and powerful bloodline" seems about as difficult to acquire as a pokemon card. Don't need medics or risky procedures.. Or EVEN OPERATING ROOMS... NOPE just grab em' and stuff em' in the eye sockets... They just start working. That seems a LITTLE SUS to me. Seems funny in boruto they just got RID of the whole damn mechanic and gave people "cyber eyes" which DOES EVERYTHING A SHARRINGAN, M. SHARRINGAN AND BYAKKGUAN can do, all rolled into one and that dozens can have at any time... Well so much for the "great and powerful abilities, done through meticulous bloodline breeding". Also do you ever find it ODD... That naruto ALWAYS NEEDS ALL THIS STUPID "training", but Obitdo, Nageto, sasuke and Itachi NEVER need to train in ANYTHING, they just spontaneously develop powers and INSTANTLY know entire suites of uses for them. That seems like very shoddy writing.
10/30/2024 c7 DarkHunter10
"Kakashi only hoped that Naruto would be far more understanding with him, than he had ever been with Naruto" yes, I have noticed that a major failing of the series; is that the adults expect the CHILDREN to be FAR MORE ADULT then they, themselves are. I look at some of the characters like: Hiruzen, Danzo, Horuma, Koharu and a few others and the only thing that springs to mind is.. "HOW HAVE YOU LIVED THIS LONG?!"? Then with people like kakashi, Mizuki and quite a few others?.. "HOW ARE YOU SUPPOSED TO BE YOUR RANK?" Case in point for kakashi, not only NOT noticing WHO naruto is... But also he fought and LOST to zabuzza.. Kakashi is a LIGHTNING ninja.. He fought a guy STANDING ON A LAKE, who was soaking wet and who was holding a HUGE IRON ROD! How does ANYBODY lose in that situation?
You know, there is "caring for your comrades and teammates" and then there is "being stupid when your FORMER teammates are TRYING TO KILL YOU!"... Or "putting DOWN a 'mad dog' when it goes rabid". I still don't understand where all this CARING AND CONCERN stem from... They BARELY INTERACTED and NONE of it was good. But then again I'm not REALLY clear on how a team is supposed to create SPONTANEOUS "teamwork" after being formed, in under a hour, when they've been taught for YEARS to be in COMPETITION with each other.
In the long term, the ninja teams are a GREAT IDEA, they work in a LOT of genres, it's a very tried and true setup.. But in the short term?...The way this series SETS UP the teams? Just DOES NOT COMPUTE. It's very "forced" and not very believable.
"Kakashi only hoped that Naruto would be far more understanding with him, than he had ever been with Naruto" yes, I have noticed that a major failing of the series; is that the adults expect the CHILDREN to be FAR MORE ADULT then they, themselves are. I look at some of the characters like: Hiruzen, Danzo, Horuma, Koharu and a few others and the only thing that springs to mind is.. "HOW HAVE YOU LIVED THIS LONG?!"? Then with people like kakashi, Mizuki and quite a few others?.. "HOW ARE YOU SUPPOSED TO BE YOUR RANK?" Case in point for kakashi, not only NOT noticing WHO naruto is... But also he fought and LOST to zabuzza.. Kakashi is a LIGHTNING ninja.. He fought a guy STANDING ON A LAKE, who was soaking wet and who was holding a HUGE IRON ROD! How does ANYBODY lose in that situation?
You know, there is "caring for your comrades and teammates" and then there is "being stupid when your FORMER teammates are TRYING TO KILL YOU!"... Or "putting DOWN a 'mad dog' when it goes rabid". I still don't understand where all this CARING AND CONCERN stem from... They BARELY INTERACTED and NONE of it was good. But then again I'm not REALLY clear on how a team is supposed to create SPONTANEOUS "teamwork" after being formed, in under a hour, when they've been taught for YEARS to be in COMPETITION with each other.
In the long term, the ninja teams are a GREAT IDEA, they work in a LOT of genres, it's a very tried and true setup.. But in the short term?...The way this series SETS UP the teams? Just DOES NOT COMPUTE. It's very "forced" and not very believable.
10/30/2024 c6 DarkHunter10
I don't think Kakashi failed ALL his "students" (term used VERY LOOSELY here), because with sasuke an old addage comes to mind.. "you can't fix stupid"... Well you can't really fix "evil" either.. If anything Kakashi was TOO GOOD an instructor to the uchiha.. If he taught him LESS, then orochimaru wouldn't have thought sasuke was WORTH going after.. The uchiha was ALWAYS going to go down the route he went down... You could tell that from the jump... ANYONE could tell that from the jump... He probably shouldn't have been put in the shinobi corps to begin with... Instead, spent several years in a nice "white room"... All-in-all there are several things that COULD have been done different, but it boils down to, it was a BAD MATCH UP.. Those three had NO BUSINESS being on the same team together and with THAT sensei... One does not add gasoline to a fire, lace a stick of dynamite, or combine batteries and bonfires... There are just some things you DO NOT mix.. You'd THINK after minato's team, Jiriaya's team AND the sannin that the Leaf would KNOW what to look for, in order to AVOID these problems... But they NEVER SEEM TO LEARN!
I don't think Kakashi failed ALL his "students" (term used VERY LOOSELY here), because with sasuke an old addage comes to mind.. "you can't fix stupid"... Well you can't really fix "evil" either.. If anything Kakashi was TOO GOOD an instructor to the uchiha.. If he taught him LESS, then orochimaru wouldn't have thought sasuke was WORTH going after.. The uchiha was ALWAYS going to go down the route he went down... You could tell that from the jump... ANYONE could tell that from the jump... He probably shouldn't have been put in the shinobi corps to begin with... Instead, spent several years in a nice "white room"... All-in-all there are several things that COULD have been done different, but it boils down to, it was a BAD MATCH UP.. Those three had NO BUSINESS being on the same team together and with THAT sensei... One does not add gasoline to a fire, lace a stick of dynamite, or combine batteries and bonfires... There are just some things you DO NOT mix.. You'd THINK after minato's team, Jiriaya's team AND the sannin that the Leaf would KNOW what to look for, in order to AVOID these problems... But they NEVER SEEM TO LEARN!
10/29/2024 c4 DarkHunter10
You know, I like that whole statement of the "regulations being dropped, to make more chunnin".. It EXPLAINS Mizuki, something I've never seen a FF do before.
You know, I like that whole statement of the "regulations being dropped, to make more chunnin".. It EXPLAINS Mizuki, something I've never seen a FF do before.
10/29/2024 c3 DarkHunter10
So the NARA, The clan of INTELLIGENCE... Couldn't figure out the difference between a kunai and a scroll? PLUS couldn't tell who naruto's parents were? Despite his last name, clan symbol made on ALL his clothes, verbal tic of Kushina and him being a MIRROR IMAGE of Minato that they ALL grew up with? ... *blinks*.. Um.. "logic error". I also find a bit of "logical disconnect" because they (and all the other clan heads) would have known KUSHINA for years.. And SHE WAS THE PREVIOUS JINCHURIKI of the same being, they all have lost their minds over, with trying to BREAK THE "PRISON" of!
"it was a mistake Shikamaru"... A...Mistake?... No it wasn't A (as in single) mistake, it was 4 mistakes made on the day and then 3 REPEATED every single day for 12 years!.. I can't even tell how MANY mistakes that adds up to. I'm not sure just saying "kages are human".. Is QUITE ENOUGH... Anybody can SEE the blunders THAT WOULD happen. But then to let it continue? No, most definitely not a "it was a human mistake".
So the NARA, The clan of INTELLIGENCE... Couldn't figure out the difference between a kunai and a scroll? PLUS couldn't tell who naruto's parents were? Despite his last name, clan symbol made on ALL his clothes, verbal tic of Kushina and him being a MIRROR IMAGE of Minato that they ALL grew up with? ... *blinks*.. Um.. "logic error". I also find a bit of "logical disconnect" because they (and all the other clan heads) would have known KUSHINA for years.. And SHE WAS THE PREVIOUS JINCHURIKI of the same being, they all have lost their minds over, with trying to BREAK THE "PRISON" of!
"it was a mistake Shikamaru"... A...Mistake?... No it wasn't A (as in single) mistake, it was 4 mistakes made on the day and then 3 REPEATED every single day for 12 years!.. I can't even tell how MANY mistakes that adds up to. I'm not sure just saying "kages are human".. Is QUITE ENOUGH... Anybody can SEE the blunders THAT WOULD happen. But then to let it continue? No, most definitely not a "it was a human mistake".
10/28/2024 c2 DarkHunter10
"the village's most guarded and costly secret"? Or "the village's dumbest, most pointless and kept without ANY FORESIGHT to the future what-so-ever, secret"?
"the village's most guarded and costly secret"? Or "the village's dumbest, most pointless and kept without ANY FORESIGHT to the future what-so-ever, secret"?
10/28/2024 c1 DarkHunter10
"the leaf's greatest enemy"? No, I don't think that's kurama.. That particular "honor" goes to the Uchiha clan.. Between their eyes being used by ALMOST EVERY villain in the ENTIRE SERIES... Along with Madara, Obitdo and Shin PLUS sasuke... I believe they TAKE THE CAKE in "amount of destruction and just complete EVIL on the village, if not the WORLD itself... Not to mention, fairly SHREDDING their reputation since ALL of the clan hail from THE SAME VILLAGE.
"the leaf's greatest enemy"? No, I don't think that's kurama.. That particular "honor" goes to the Uchiha clan.. Between their eyes being used by ALMOST EVERY villain in the ENTIRE SERIES... Along with Madara, Obitdo and Shin PLUS sasuke... I believe they TAKE THE CAKE in "amount of destruction and just complete EVIL on the village, if not the WORLD itself... Not to mention, fairly SHREDDING their reputation since ALL of the clan hail from THE SAME VILLAGE.
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