for THE SCHOOL!8/21/2010 c3 idk
WRONG GRAMMAR!
WRONG GRAMMAR!
8/12/2010 c1 blank567
Your quotation marks are missing in the first chapter. Please use them whenever starting a dialogue. You also have quite a few grammer and spelling mistakes. Please use capital letters for the start of every sentence too. Other than that, pretty nice idea :]
Your quotation marks are missing in the first chapter. Please use them whenever starting a dialogue. You also have quite a few grammer and spelling mistakes. Please use capital letters for the start of every sentence too. Other than that, pretty nice idea :]
5/24/2010 c1 darkyukiko-devil23
...WTC?
i'm a bit confused because i couldn't see the quotation marks...anyway its good so far...
...WTC?
i'm a bit confused because i couldn't see the quotation marks...anyway its good so far...
5/15/2010 c16 
9beavermeadowsbev
I love the story though what keeps this from perfection is the grammatical errors, no offense. Heheheh
9beavermeadowsbevI love the story though what keeps this from perfection is the grammatical errors, no offense. Heheheh
4/3/2010 c5 AXELRIG
I can't help but say that this story would've been so much better if your grammar and spelling wasn't horrible.
I can't help but say that this story would've been so much better if your grammar and spelling wasn't horrible.
2/17/2010 c1 4Wisteria.Sinensis
I don't know if you're accepting constructive criticism or what not but here's my review:
Since you're using a third party's perspective, why not use quotation marks (" "). And you're always forgetting the necessary periods and the capitalization.
And, you're always using capitalization, which makes it look like they're always angry or something
*sigh* I'm done pointing out so I'm gonna check your lastest work (Maid In Love, or something like that) to see if you improve or not. Good luck on writing.
4Wisteria.SinensisI don't know if you're accepting constructive criticism or what not but here's my review:
Since you're using a third party's perspective, why not use quotation marks (" "). And you're always forgetting the necessary periods and the capitalization.
And, you're always using capitalization, which makes it look like they're always angry or something
*sigh* I'm done pointing out so I'm gonna check your lastest work (Maid In Love, or something like that) to see if you improve or not. Good luck on writing.
10/12/2009 c16 fdghfg
ITS RUBBISH
ITS RUBBISH
6/14/2009 c16 Caitlin
I love your stories!
I almost cry when they(Natsume & Mikan )weren't talking to each other!
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wel JANE!
I love your stories!
I almost cry when they(Natsume & Mikan )weren't talking to each other!
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wel JANE!
3/26/2009 c17 animeloveraddict
your story is fantabulous but somtimes it's not correct in grammar but i really like the story...(:
your story is fantabulous but somtimes it's not correct in grammar but i really like the story...(:
12/10/2008 c16 5LuckyStarWitch
I like it ^^...hehe...I can't believe there's an exact replica of them *swet drops*...do they have the same alices too ? o.O...anyways...wish luck to Kantarou and Mikki *The Famous smirk* hahaha ^^...and also...you did a GREAT job ^^
5LuckyStarWitchI like it ^^...hehe...I can't believe there's an exact replica of them *swet drops*...do they have the same alices too ? o.O...anyways...wish luck to Kantarou and Mikki *The Famous smirk* hahaha ^^...and also...you did a GREAT job ^^