for The Prince of Shadows6/27/2007 c7 
9dglsprincess105
m, seems Sam and Tucker are now on okay terms with Dash. Something must have happen in the human world when Danny disappeared. He, he, Shadow was so cute as a baby and I actually awed when his first word was Clocky, and then, to please his father, he said Daddy. (So, even as a baby, he was smart, cool.)
HAHAHAHA! Why do I get the feeling that every ghost in the Ghostzone will dance and sing in celebration when Danny and Shadow finally leave the GhostZone for good.
9dglsprincess105m, seems Sam and Tucker are now on okay terms with Dash. Something must have happen in the human world when Danny disappeared. He, he, Shadow was so cute as a baby and I actually awed when his first word was Clocky, and then, to please his father, he said Daddy. (So, even as a baby, he was smart, cool.)
HAHAHAHA! Why do I get the feeling that every ghost in the Ghostzone will dance and sing in celebration when Danny and Shadow finally leave the GhostZone for good.
6/25/2007 c1 20REBD
i like this story and just becouse you asked i think that clockwork and danny should be just really good friend or like brother. your story is good and i look forword to reading more.
20REBDi like this story and just becouse you asked i think that clockwork and danny should be just really good friend or like brother. your story is good and i look forword to reading more.
6/23/2007 c6 9dglsprincess105
So, I can only guess that Danny was yelling a lot at the ghosts when he was pregnant, and when they retaliated, the shadows protected him. Interesting thought. (I was laughing my head off when I imagined a pregnant Danny yelling curse words at every ghost he encountered.)
A sugar high Shadow! That's actually cute, considering how intense the three-year old is.
(I'm also glad that Dan has to suffer a chatterbox Clockwork.)
9dglsprincess105So, I can only guess that Danny was yelling a lot at the ghosts when he was pregnant, and when they retaliated, the shadows protected him. Interesting thought. (I was laughing my head off when I imagined a pregnant Danny yelling curse words at every ghost he encountered.)
A sugar high Shadow! That's actually cute, considering how intense the three-year old is.
(I'm also glad that Dan has to suffer a chatterbox Clockwork.)
6/20/2007 c4 katie
STOP WRITING.
right now, if you get this and are working on the next chapter of the story, RUN A MAGNET OVER YOUR HARDDRIVE.
I didn't think it was possible to be in pain from reading, but this is possibly the WORST EVER story I've read.
My eyes were practically bleeding here. Really, it was THAT bad.
I mean, I don't even know how you can write this bad. Did you try to make it horrible? Because if not, you've got a real talent there.
Not only are the characters totally not themselves, this is a boring, overused plot. You obviously aren't mature enough to use rape in a plot and make it interesting.
What is with everyone using rape everywhere as a plot device anyway?
Not only that, but why the hell would Vlad rape Danny anyway? You might want to explain that soon, or else this is story might just spontaneously explode from the sheer lack of forethought put into it.
So, either think about what you write and the characters involved before you write, or throw this story in the garbage because its practically un-redeemable.
Just think about the everything the characters do. In a good story, their personality will validate their actions, intentions, and such. THen the reactions from others should do the same because their is a lot of out of character-ness going on here.
STOP WRITING.
right now, if you get this and are working on the next chapter of the story, RUN A MAGNET OVER YOUR HARDDRIVE.
I didn't think it was possible to be in pain from reading, but this is possibly the WORST EVER story I've read.
My eyes were practically bleeding here. Really, it was THAT bad.
I mean, I don't even know how you can write this bad. Did you try to make it horrible? Because if not, you've got a real talent there.
Not only are the characters totally not themselves, this is a boring, overused plot. You obviously aren't mature enough to use rape in a plot and make it interesting.
What is with everyone using rape everywhere as a plot device anyway?
Not only that, but why the hell would Vlad rape Danny anyway? You might want to explain that soon, or else this is story might just spontaneously explode from the sheer lack of forethought put into it.
So, either think about what you write and the characters involved before you write, or throw this story in the garbage because its practically un-redeemable.
Just think about the everything the characters do. In a good story, their personality will validate their actions, intentions, and such. THen the reactions from others should do the same because their is a lot of out of character-ness going on here.
6/20/2007 c6 REBD
this story is good it had me sitting on the eage on the eage the hole time i read look forword to more.
this story is good it had me sitting on the eage on the eage the hole time i read look forword to more.
6/15/2007 c6 Mira
this SUCKED ASS. Sorry, but plz don't finish this story. It's just dumb as hell.
this SUCKED ASS. Sorry, but plz don't finish this story. It's just dumb as hell.
6/5/2007 c6 1Undoubtfuly Lost
(snort) How rude. I find it extremely amusing that they had the nerve to criticize you, yet leave no way for you to contact them. I don't know. Maybe I'm just bitchy at heart =x, but If someone did that to me, I'd chew out their ass.
(sigh) Don't let them affect you. They probably have no talent so they make themselves feel better by shooting everybody else down.
Anyways. I love this fic! So cute! Please don't stop writing because of people like that!
1Undoubtfuly Lost(snort) How rude. I find it extremely amusing that they had the nerve to criticize you, yet leave no way for you to contact them. I don't know. Maybe I'm just bitchy at heart =x, but If someone did that to me, I'd chew out their ass.
(sigh) Don't let them affect you. They probably have no talent so they make themselves feel better by shooting everybody else down.
Anyways. I love this fic! So cute! Please don't stop writing because of people like that!
6/5/2007 c6 2pinkypie543
o fooy (is that a word ?) i thought there was a new chapter! . . o well, i think your last to comments were fucked "I LIKE TO SEE THERE ASSES WRITE A STORY" . HUT HUM will yes anyway i really like YOUR story and think you should continue how it is...plz update with a real chapter :)
2pinkypie543o fooy (is that a word ?) i thought there was a new chapter! . . o well, i think your last to comments were fucked "I LIKE TO SEE THERE ASSES WRITE A STORY" . HUT HUM will yes anyway i really like YOUR story and think you should continue how it is...plz update with a real chapter :)
6/5/2007 c6 34Rin0rourke
Though the review could have been worded a bit nicer, this strange shadowy commenter did give some pretty good crit. Who knows, maybe the reason it sounds so bitchy is because this person had a bad day as well. *shrug*
But I do agree on one thing, the descriptions. Even if you plan on beginning pretty much everything in the 7th chapter a little detail about surroundings and you know, characters (its been a few years, tell us how puberty went.for Danny) Its hard to really get into a story when all we have to get into is dialogue and internal thoughts.
Don't get me wrong, simple writing is simple reading and leaves much room for the imagination to wander, however too much room and they might as well be talking in a little white room.
We all know how fun conversations surrounded by stark white walls can be.
-Rin
34Rin0rourkeThough the review could have been worded a bit nicer, this strange shadowy commenter did give some pretty good crit. Who knows, maybe the reason it sounds so bitchy is because this person had a bad day as well. *shrug*
But I do agree on one thing, the descriptions. Even if you plan on beginning pretty much everything in the 7th chapter a little detail about surroundings and you know, characters (its been a few years, tell us how puberty went.for Danny) Its hard to really get into a story when all we have to get into is dialogue and internal thoughts.
Don't get me wrong, simple writing is simple reading and leaves much room for the imagination to wander, however too much room and they might as well be talking in a little white room.
We all know how fun conversations surrounded by stark white walls can be.
-Rin
6/5/2007 c1 anonymous
um wow. not wow in a good way either.
this story could be good, but it needs to slow down a little and perhaps be a little less superficial.
the whole skipping danny's feelings about the rape, make him sound like he has no emotions and is a one dimensional character.
and, your whole, omg who is the rapist? didn't work. at all. we all knew who it was, even though it seems like you omitted his name in the beginning to make it a big secret.
it wasn't. we all knew.
there is little to no character developement in this story at all. also, the descriptions are severely lacking.
on another note, the POV switiching seems like something a first grader would write.
or maybe a kindergardner, i don't want to insult first graders.
you really should consider going back and editing this story to fix what could maybe, possibly be a good slash fan fiction.
or deleting this story and starting from scratch. You really do need to delve into the minds of the character and get the emotion of the story. Rape is a big emotional issue and even the strongest of people have problems facing it.
A story isn't just action, you have to put the emotional side of it too. So other that all that, the story has an interesting plot line, it just needs to be executed better.
um wow. not wow in a good way either.
this story could be good, but it needs to slow down a little and perhaps be a little less superficial.
the whole skipping danny's feelings about the rape, make him sound like he has no emotions and is a one dimensional character.
and, your whole, omg who is the rapist? didn't work. at all. we all knew who it was, even though it seems like you omitted his name in the beginning to make it a big secret.
it wasn't. we all knew.
there is little to no character developement in this story at all. also, the descriptions are severely lacking.
on another note, the POV switiching seems like something a first grader would write.
or maybe a kindergardner, i don't want to insult first graders.
you really should consider going back and editing this story to fix what could maybe, possibly be a good slash fan fiction.
or deleting this story and starting from scratch. You really do need to delve into the minds of the character and get the emotion of the story. Rape is a big emotional issue and even the strongest of people have problems facing it.
A story isn't just action, you have to put the emotional side of it too. So other that all that, the story has an interesting plot line, it just needs to be executed better.
5/30/2007 c1 1Undoubtfuly Lost
um... It didn't let me finish my review for the 5th chapter.. so I'm going to review again!
Like I said before. This is a wonderful story! I love the idea of Danny having a child and Dash getting protective...ish over Danny. Please, Please, Please continue! I can not wait to see what happens next!
Yup. That pretty much sums it up! =) -Lost...
1Undoubtfuly Lostum... It didn't let me finish my review for the 5th chapter.. so I'm going to review again!
Like I said before. This is a wonderful story! I love the idea of Danny having a child and Dash getting protective...ish over Danny. Please, Please, Please continue! I can not wait to see what happens next!
Yup. That pretty much sums it up! =) -Lost...