for Happenings of Our Lives7/1/2010 c1 
3edwardfiend
this is the second time i've read this and i just wanted to say that i love it. :)
3edwardfiendthis is the second time i've read this and i just wanted to say that i love it. :)
7/24/2007 c3 4Missjlh
It felt extremely rushed, as if you were trying to move from plot point to plot point, and it really took away from the story. Also, I am sure Tonks would not leave St. Mungos as Lupin went into CA. It had some really good ideas in it, I would just suggest trying to rewrite it and expanding on them, slowing down the story a little so it doesn't seem rushed.
4MissjlhIt felt extremely rushed, as if you were trying to move from plot point to plot point, and it really took away from the story. Also, I am sure Tonks would not leave St. Mungos as Lupin went into CA. It had some really good ideas in it, I would just suggest trying to rewrite it and expanding on them, slowing down the story a little so it doesn't seem rushed.
7/2/2007 c3 6Hufflelove412
I loved it apart from I didn't understand the "just like Harry Potter" part
6Hufflelove412I loved it apart from I didn't understand the "just like Harry Potter" part
6/29/2007 c2 7Remizak
Okay...I'm going to be honest. This chapter felt rushed. I think that the general plot of it was good, but that the events happened too quickly. I also think the conversations could have been longer and the descriptive details that really do add life to a story were not really present in this chapter. As I said, it has a good base, it just needs a bit of dressing up.
Steamrose, I know your friend is the person who writes(or wrote) this story and I am curious to know how old they are. They have good ideas, but need to develop the characters, details and the plot a bit more.
And I probably sound like a big meanie right now. I'm sorry. What I've said is out of constructive criticism and please take it as such. I really and truly belive there is a talented writer behind the pen of this fic. That writer just needs to slow down and add some detail :]
Please keep writing because you will continue to improve. As they say, you only get better with practice.
Remizak
@-;-
7RemizakOkay...I'm going to be honest. This chapter felt rushed. I think that the general plot of it was good, but that the events happened too quickly. I also think the conversations could have been longer and the descriptive details that really do add life to a story were not really present in this chapter. As I said, it has a good base, it just needs a bit of dressing up.
Steamrose, I know your friend is the person who writes(or wrote) this story and I am curious to know how old they are. They have good ideas, but need to develop the characters, details and the plot a bit more.
And I probably sound like a big meanie right now. I'm sorry. What I've said is out of constructive criticism and please take it as such. I really and truly belive there is a talented writer behind the pen of this fic. That writer just needs to slow down and add some detail :]
Please keep writing because you will continue to improve. As they say, you only get better with practice.
Remizak
@-;-
6/28/2007 c1 Remizak
An interesting start to a story. Now what's going to happen? Lol. A very good start. Keep up the good work.
Remizak
@-;-
An interesting start to a story. Now what's going to happen? Lol. A very good start. Keep up the good work.
Remizak
@-;-