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6/12/2007 c1 34Baby Kat Snophlake
Don't go overboard with repetitive description. Once we know that the mantises bleed blue, then azure, then blue, then azure, I would hope that it doesn't change. ~_^

It's nice to give us a good idea what color everything is, but be careful about saying it too much. It interrupts the fighting. To be honest, it feels like you are trying too hard to get good description. Don't try so hard. The story will run more smoothly.

~~Kat
6/12/2007 c1 2screamingedge
Finally, a fanfic that embarrases Raine! (I don't hate her, I just think she's a bit arrogant)
6/12/2007 c1 1Nasusi
That was a nice story! I liked it when Lloyd was in danger and Kratos came to help him! Kratos is a great healer!
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