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8/21/2010 c1 AELISH FORDE
I WAS TOUCHED AND FELT GRIEF PAINFUL

HEART RENDEAING.HAVE LOST VERY DEAR

ONES.IN MY OFTEN SILENT SUFFERING

HAVE OFTEN FELT LIKE SHOUTING CANT

YOU HEAR ME SCREAMING.

THIS POEM THO SAD HAS BROUGHT

RELIEF.I WISHED I HAD BEEN ABLE

TO EXPRESS MY LOSSES SO WELL.

THE POEM HAS SAID IT ALL.

MY LOST LOVES YOU WERE MY

NORTH SOUTH EAST AND WEST.

THANK YOU.THIS SHALL BE THERE EPITPAT.
9/28/2008 c1 6Hazmatt
I enjoyed that! Poor Stella! Poor Mac, losing someone else that he loves!
11/26/2007 c1 4ShylohJaye
aw!

poor Smack!

I'm sad now.. even if the writing was brilliant!

Good job!

-Dani
8/26/2007 c1 10Write Here2
Hey

I think you have a really good base for something here - and it works as a one-shot too. There are some spelling and grammar issues which you're probably aware of (I can be a little over-picky about these things), but the piece feels like the bones of something a little longer - maybe two or three chapters. I like it very much. You've certainly got ability and imagination, but perhaps the story could have benefited from a bit more development/editing. :)
6/25/2007 c1 5PastMyShoulder
aww what a nice but sad story ! great writing great writer :D

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