for Detective Conan: Countdown to Destruction7/5/2013 c3 
2JuuRokuChan016
Just as constructive criticism, try to add more detail with the setting and actions, and I would recommend a beta reader, some of your punctuation is missing or incorrect. Also, because I can tell you are probably picturing exactly what you're writing, try to include what you see, like in chapter 2, I had no clue Heiji was even there until he spoke. Just little things like that will really make a big difference. :D Thank you for writing, and keep at it!
2JuuRokuChan016Just as constructive criticism, try to add more detail with the setting and actions, and I would recommend a beta reader, some of your punctuation is missing or incorrect. Also, because I can tell you are probably picturing exactly what you're writing, try to include what you see, like in chapter 2, I had no clue Heiji was even there until he spoke. Just little things like that will really make a big difference. :D Thank you for writing, and keep at it!
5/25/2008 c2 2A Bibliophile
The spelling and grammar errors detract from the plot. I suggest you find a Beta.
2A BibliophileThe spelling and grammar errors detract from the plot. I suggest you find a Beta.
10/24/2007 c3 Chronopropanol
Interesting, except that it is Kaito Kid, no Kito Kid. Otherwise, you've done a good job. I like your starting, especially.
Interesting, except that it is Kaito Kid, no Kito Kid. Otherwise, you've done a good job. I like your starting, especially.
10/23/2007 c3 18Horselvr4evr123
Ok, a little rushed and some grammatical errors. Also, an explanation of what the Cat's Eye is and it's significance to the story would clear up a lot of questions.
Other than that, it was pretty good! XD Keep up the great work! PLEASE update soon! ^^
If you would like any help, whether it be advice or a little bit of beta-ing, let me know. ^^ When I have the time (usually in the afternoon) I'd be more than happy to spend it helping other writers. ^^
18Horselvr4evr123Ok, a little rushed and some grammatical errors. Also, an explanation of what the Cat's Eye is and it's significance to the story would clear up a lot of questions.
Other than that, it was pretty good! XD Keep up the great work! PLEASE update soon! ^^
If you would like any help, whether it be advice or a little bit of beta-ing, let me know. ^^ When I have the time (usually in the afternoon) I'd be more than happy to spend it helping other writers. ^^
10/23/2007 c2 Horselvr4evr123
I do have to say it seems a little rushed and there are quite a few grammatical errors. But other than that, it's gettin' good! XD Keep up the great work! ^^
I do have to say it seems a little rushed and there are quite a few grammatical errors. But other than that, it's gettin' good! XD Keep up the great work! ^^
7/13/2007 c1 nobody
Sounds interesting. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Sounds interesting. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.