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97/5/2007 c1 kavithaa
First of all, the plot of this story is very interesting. BUT, this story could have been executed much, much better. I mean, the reunion scene was totally unbelievable. Think about it; is that how guy would react when he found out he had two five-year-old kids? Could he accept it THAT fast as Ron did in your story? I don't think so.
Just trying to help,
Kavitha
First of all, the plot of this story is very interesting. BUT, this story could have been executed much, much better. I mean, the reunion scene was totally unbelievable. Think about it; is that how guy would react when he found out he had two five-year-old kids? Could he accept it THAT fast as Ron did in your story? I don't think so.
Just trying to help,
Kavitha