for Hylian Peacetime8/14/2017 c4 mole-rat-42
I really hope you'll update this someday! The characters were well written, there are minimal grammar and spelling mistakes, and you have the whole "which people remember Link after he was sent back" thing down. The Malon and Ingo pairing was a little odd (my memories are fuzzy, but isn't Ingo Malon's uncle? And he was adult when she was still a child... but I guess Hyrule is in medieval times, so that isn't that big of a deal) Sad you stopped writing before we got to meet Zelda though. I get it if you're busy, real life is hard, but I won't give up hope!
I really hope you'll update this someday! The characters were well written, there are minimal grammar and spelling mistakes, and you have the whole "which people remember Link after he was sent back" thing down. The Malon and Ingo pairing was a little odd (my memories are fuzzy, but isn't Ingo Malon's uncle? And he was adult when she was still a child... but I guess Hyrule is in medieval times, so that isn't that big of a deal) Sad you stopped writing before we got to meet Zelda though. I get it if you're busy, real life is hard, but I won't give up hope!
1/14/2011 c4 
3Genkl
Yay, an update! That's a very believable problem. The Gerudos would wonder what happened to their king.
I would not want to be in Nabooru's situation. To be torn between the two races would be hard. Is war going to break out in Hyrule? Will Nabooru be against Link? Look at me, now I'M bubbling with questions!
3GenklYay, an update! That's a very believable problem. The Gerudos would wonder what happened to their king.
I would not want to be in Nabooru's situation. To be torn between the two races would be hard. Is war going to break out in Hyrule? Will Nabooru be against Link? Look at me, now I'M bubbling with questions!
3/15/2008 c3 210Crystal Rose of Pollux
Oh, this is going great! Ingo and Malon... what a great twist!
Poor Link! I hope he has a happy ending!
Great work!
210Crystal Rose of PolluxOh, this is going great! Ingo and Malon... what a great twist!
Poor Link! I hope he has a happy ending!
Great work!
8/18/2007 c2 3ElysianFire
Aya! Malon married Ingo! I wasn't expecting that! I like your story so far. You've taking a different route than most people do with Zelda stories; I think it's interesting.
3ElysianFireAya! Malon married Ingo! I wasn't expecting that! I like your story so far. You've taking a different route than most people do with Zelda stories; I think it's interesting.
8/7/2007 c3 15Luigi Number 1 and Sonic 2
Yay, you got it up in time! Go you, Rach!
It does seem like not a lot happens in each chapter (I was hoping he'd meet Zelda here!), so you might want to step that up a little, but on the other hand, you do manage to update pretty frequently, too, to balance it out somewhat. So I guess it's really up to you!
It's very fun to see the characters interact, and I like how you're portraying Link's relationship to Malon - protective of her because she seemed innocent. Aww. I'm definitely interested to hear more about her marriage to Ingo, looking forward to seeing more of that, and also more about her perspective on their friendship.
And of course I'm curious to see who you have Zelda considering to marry. ;) An enjoyable chapter, update again soon! And yay, Epona plushies! *cuddles it* =P
15Luigi Number 1 and Sonic 2Yay, you got it up in time! Go you, Rach!
It does seem like not a lot happens in each chapter (I was hoping he'd meet Zelda here!), so you might want to step that up a little, but on the other hand, you do manage to update pretty frequently, too, to balance it out somewhat. So I guess it's really up to you!
It's very fun to see the characters interact, and I like how you're portraying Link's relationship to Malon - protective of her because she seemed innocent. Aww. I'm definitely interested to hear more about her marriage to Ingo, looking forward to seeing more of that, and also more about her perspective on their friendship.
And of course I'm curious to see who you have Zelda considering to marry. ;) An enjoyable chapter, update again soon! And yay, Epona plushies! *cuddles it* =P
8/4/2007 c3 4Altum
While the chapter held interest, not a whole lot happened within it. It's not a bad thing, though. I'm still adjusting to your narrative style, which focuses more on dialog than anything else. I enjoy the story and conversations a lot, though, so don't be discouraged.
I'm just a junky for details. I'd love to see what's going on around them or during the spaces between conversations.
I think you spelled Sheikah correctly, too.
4AltumWhile the chapter held interest, not a whole lot happened within it. It's not a bad thing, though. I'm still adjusting to your narrative style, which focuses more on dialog than anything else. I enjoy the story and conversations a lot, though, so don't be discouraged.
I'm just a junky for details. I'd love to see what's going on around them or during the spaces between conversations.
I think you spelled Sheikah correctly, too.
7/30/2007 c2 15Luigi Number 1 and Sonic 2
Wow. Malon and Ingo. That almost deserves a whole separate fanfic in itself to show how that happened, haha. =P Not to say it's a bad pairing, it's actually kind of cool in how unique it is, but I just need to get used to it more!
I like the sound of Milana and Chavis, and I hope we'll get to see more of their friendship. =)
My memory of Ocarina of Time feels fuzzy, though, so I'm kind of confused about how some people remember Link and some don't. Would Malon really remember meeting him even after time was rewound at the end of Ocarina? Or did Link just meet her again afterwards since then? I can't quite figure it out. =P
Anyway, it's looking interesting so far, and it'll be fun to read about Link and Zelda's reunion. It does seem a bit fast-paced with the focus on dialogue more than on narration, so you might want to balance it out more, but I'm really enjoying this. Keep updating! =)
I have a lot of story ideas that I'd love to work on (though none of them are fanfiction), so hopefully I'll be updating firal_writings within the month. It's just a matter of getting enough inspiration that I actually take time to sit down and write. =P
15Luigi Number 1 and Sonic 2Wow. Malon and Ingo. That almost deserves a whole separate fanfic in itself to show how that happened, haha. =P Not to say it's a bad pairing, it's actually kind of cool in how unique it is, but I just need to get used to it more!
I like the sound of Milana and Chavis, and I hope we'll get to see more of their friendship. =)
My memory of Ocarina of Time feels fuzzy, though, so I'm kind of confused about how some people remember Link and some don't. Would Malon really remember meeting him even after time was rewound at the end of Ocarina? Or did Link just meet her again afterwards since then? I can't quite figure it out. =P
Anyway, it's looking interesting so far, and it'll be fun to read about Link and Zelda's reunion. It does seem a bit fast-paced with the focus on dialogue more than on narration, so you might want to balance it out more, but I'm really enjoying this. Keep updating! =)
I have a lot of story ideas that I'd love to work on (though none of them are fanfiction), so hopefully I'll be updating firal_writings within the month. It's just a matter of getting enough inspiration that I actually take time to sit down and write. =P
7/29/2007 c2 4Altum
Interesting having Malon and Ingo as a pair. Not sure how I feel about that. Hopefully you show Ingo's more selfish and jealous side throughout the story, as that's sort of what defined him.
Again, didn't find any errors, and the dialog felt believable.
4AltumInteresting having Malon and Ingo as a pair. Not sure how I feel about that. Hopefully you show Ingo's more selfish and jealous side throughout the story, as that's sort of what defined him.
Again, didn't find any errors, and the dialog felt believable.
7/29/2007 c1 Altum
Not bad. A little on the short side, but it's still the beginning. Didn't spot much wrong grammar-wise, but the transition from Link talking to Epona to being at this ranch felt oddly transitioned.
Other than that, a good start.
Not bad. A little on the short side, but it's still the beginning. Didn't spot much wrong grammar-wise, but the transition from Link talking to Epona to being at this ranch felt oddly transitioned.
Other than that, a good start.
7/23/2007 c1 15Luigi Number 1 and Sonic 2
Aww yay, Rach! Zach told me that Paul mentioned something about your Zelda fanfic, so I came over to your profile to see if you had it up yet, and I'm so excited to see that you do! *hugs*!
First of all, I really like the time you chose to set it in, so we can see what happens with Link after what Ocarina of Time shows - I never really thought about it before, to be honest, so that's a cool concept right from the start. =)
Also, I really really like the way that you write Link! It was cute and just a nice touch how he talks to Epona as if she can understand him, like she's a friend of his, and he just seems very much like he would be if he could talk in the games. So, I applaud your in-character writing skills. =P
I'm really looking forward to seeing where you go with this! I'm adding it to my Story Alert list and Favorite Stories list, so I will definitely be waiting for the next update. =)
And btw, I just checked Ocarina of Time really quick for you, and yeah, they spell it "cucco," so you just need that one extra C and that's it.
Update again SOON!
15Luigi Number 1 and Sonic 2Aww yay, Rach! Zach told me that Paul mentioned something about your Zelda fanfic, so I came over to your profile to see if you had it up yet, and I'm so excited to see that you do! *hugs*!
First of all, I really like the time you chose to set it in, so we can see what happens with Link after what Ocarina of Time shows - I never really thought about it before, to be honest, so that's a cool concept right from the start. =)
Also, I really really like the way that you write Link! It was cute and just a nice touch how he talks to Epona as if she can understand him, like she's a friend of his, and he just seems very much like he would be if he could talk in the games. So, I applaud your in-character writing skills. =P
I'm really looking forward to seeing where you go with this! I'm adding it to my Story Alert list and Favorite Stories list, so I will definitely be waiting for the next update. =)
And btw, I just checked Ocarina of Time really quick for you, and yeah, they spell it "cucco," so you just need that one extra C and that's it.
Update again SOON!
7/23/2007 c1 19Operatastic SuperSop
I liked it! :) I think "cucco" is how you spell it, so you're fine. ;)
Aw... poor Link. At least the future now is not bleak like when he was trying to fight Ganondorf 8 years into the future...wait... it is 8 years into the future... on the other timeline... you know what I mean. lol
I look forward to seeing where this story progresses. :)
Thanks for your reviews on my fanfics! :)
Keep writing (update soon!)
-Operatastic Supersop-
19Operatastic SuperSopI liked it! :) I think "cucco" is how you spell it, so you're fine. ;)
Aw... poor Link. At least the future now is not bleak like when he was trying to fight Ganondorf 8 years into the future...wait... it is 8 years into the future... on the other timeline... you know what I mean. lol
I look forward to seeing where this story progresses. :)
Thanks for your reviews on my fanfics! :)
Keep writing (update soon!)
-Operatastic Supersop-