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12/6/2012 c10 Foolish Little Brother
I may have forgotten to review this chapter.
12/6/2012 c11 Foolish Little Brother
Ugh... good chapter but the porn stuff, lol.
12/5/2012 c9 Foolish Little Brother
Wish the chapter was bit longer, but since I am so sleepy, I guess it was a good thing.
12/5/2012 c8 Foolish Little Brother
Okay this chapter got me laughing plenty of times a bit. Good job with this one.
12/4/2012 c7 Foolish Little Brother
Eeehhhh... what to say about this chapter. I guess all I can say for now is that it is good.
12/4/2012 c6 Foolish Little Brother
I would have slammed my head to the desk if I knew it wouldn't have broken my laptop. Never liked it when people messed with Naruto's appearance, the personality... I prefer to never change, but with different things happening, I kind of expect the 'slight' change.
12/3/2012 c5 Foolish Little Brother
Well, this was a good chapter, I love your writing style, it has a lot of talking, but it is actually okay, something that is hard to find these days. These days when people have chapters that are full of talking it is very repetitive and becomes boring, yours is pretty good.

All I can say is that this story may need an entire rewrite because of the new things that has come in the canon Naruto. Simple changes of changing the name of Naruto's mom's name into her actual name, Kushina. Everything else is fine as it is, since it is just fan-fiction.

I hope you come back to writing so I can use you for you skill and have you entertain me with this story... I am somewhat kidding about the using part, but I do hope to see you back again.
12/3/2012 c4 Foolish Little Brother
This chapter was pretty good. Made me laugh a bit since so much has changed in Canon Naruto that could have helped you so much more, but still pretty good.
12/2/2012 c3 Foolish Little Brother
I never like whining about things I don't like, so I will just say that the change of Naruto's appearance is too much for my liking. I may be confused about these changes and how he looks when normal and in his original form... ugh... I guess I have to continue on to learn for myself.
12/2/2012 c2 Foolish Little Brother
*sigh* Going for that kind of thing huh... well, I guess that part should not matter much at all. Great chapter and I like how long they are, if they were a bit/much longer then that would be a great bonus!

Really interested in you writing style.
12/2/2012 c1 Foolish Little Brother
I liked the chapter a lot and your writing style is really good. Only thing I did not like much was the high lights to Naruto's misery. I think Naruto would not mention it much nor would he let others find out. Meh, that's just me though.

I been trying to work with my writing style and when I saw your style it fit perfectly to the kind of writing style I want to learn...
12/2/2012 c20 NamikazesDemonKyuubi
All I gotta say is you need to update...stat...asap...right NOW lol...to leave a story this good halfway through sucks...and to leave off where you did is just plain sinful...and to top it off, you haven't updated in forever...Blasphemy! Now I'm going to be thinking about this story for the next few weeks watching for updates that I doubt will be coming :(...such is life I guess (sigh)
11/25/2012 c20 breakingheart93
omg! hurrry i wanna know who he loses as a friend!
11/19/2012 c1 Guest
Nice Story
11/18/2012 c6 Rake1810
Really curious if he's calling Naruto 'demon' as a title, like demon boy etc or if he actually thinks he's a demon. His actions and opinions seem to be slightly at odds.
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