for Adoption1/27/2012 c12 
4LeeshyLoo
Haha, I just finished reading Awakening Love: The Idiots' Version and then decided on reading this. First of all, I want to say that I just found it disturbing and funny at the same time when Hikaru like raped Haruhi while she was in Tamaki's body :/ I was only laughing because one of my friends at school today told me she read a fanfic where Haruhi still had long hair and went to the third music room and then the host club all raped her and then they apparently raped her too hard that she died and then they raped her more after she was dead and then Tamaki was like: "Mmm shes still warm..." then I was like D: and then they dumped her body in the bushes outside the school.. and then we talked about pancakes.. but I'm not here to talking about raping Haruhi..or am I? (lol) But yeah, I would honestly have to say that I would LOVE to see (well, read) a sequel to this, if you have the time, that is. Where Haruhi goes through her 9 long months of pregnancy - could write about times when she would have all sorts of different and weird cravings for food.. like, a... bacon-wrapped sausage covered in butter? lol I don't know. And then later on in the pregnancy (like 6 or 7 months or something) the baby would start kicking and then of course that would lead to some good ol' TamaxHaru romancy, mushy, fluffy goodness :D But yeah, I understand if you don't want to write a sequel though *tear*
~LeeshyLoo 3
4LeeshyLooHaha, I just finished reading Awakening Love: The Idiots' Version and then decided on reading this. First of all, I want to say that I just found it disturbing and funny at the same time when Hikaru like raped Haruhi while she was in Tamaki's body :/ I was only laughing because one of my friends at school today told me she read a fanfic where Haruhi still had long hair and went to the third music room and then the host club all raped her and then they apparently raped her too hard that she died and then they raped her more after she was dead and then Tamaki was like: "Mmm shes still warm..." then I was like D: and then they dumped her body in the bushes outside the school.. and then we talked about pancakes.. but I'm not here to talking about raping Haruhi..or am I? (lol) But yeah, I would honestly have to say that I would LOVE to see (well, read) a sequel to this, if you have the time, that is. Where Haruhi goes through her 9 long months of pregnancy - could write about times when she would have all sorts of different and weird cravings for food.. like, a... bacon-wrapped sausage covered in butter? lol I don't know. And then later on in the pregnancy (like 6 or 7 months or something) the baby would start kicking and then of course that would lead to some good ol' TamaxHaru romancy, mushy, fluffy goodness :D But yeah, I understand if you don't want to write a sequel though *tear*
~LeeshyLoo 3
6/26/2011 c4 3NoOneEverLonely
Your plot line is great, but your punctuation and grammar is atrocious. Trust me when i say no one will take the story seriously if it's submerged in incorrect grammar. I love the plot, and you have really good ideas though. Thanks for writing a good story as far as i've read!
3NoOneEverLonelyYour plot line is great, but your punctuation and grammar is atrocious. Trust me when i say no one will take the story seriously if it's submerged in incorrect grammar. I love the plot, and you have really good ideas though. Thanks for writing a good story as far as i've read!
3/20/2011 c12 1koolgirl123456789
the story was good, but how you wrote it was terrible, so on a scale 1-10 i give it a 3.5
1koolgirl123456789the story was good, but how you wrote it was terrible, so on a scale 1-10 i give it a 3.5
3/19/2011 c2 koolgirl123456789
you can't just say "said him" or "said her" it's not proper!YOU'RE A DING BELL!I MEAN HOW COULD YOU POSSIBLY NOT KNOW THAT! !
you can't just say "said him" or "said her" it's not proper!YOU'RE A DING BELL!I MEAN HOW COULD YOU POSSIBLY NOT KNOW THAT! !
12/6/2009 c2 46Celeste Belle
Seems good so far. You need to check the grammar, however, it gets worse each chapter.
46Celeste BelleSeems good so far. You need to check the grammar, however, it gets worse each chapter.
10/25/2009 c2 uiWEFNOIGERAUO12446
okay. normally i dont flame, but there are SO MANY GRAMMAR MISTAKES IN HERE. it took me forever to decipher it. you need help with past tense words. alot. you should get a beta reader.
okay. normally i dont flame, but there are SO MANY GRAMMAR MISTAKES IN HERE. it took me forever to decipher it. you need help with past tense words. alot. you should get a beta reader.
12/20/2008 c12 urimarimo
aw. is it over?...
oh well.
this story was really well written. i like the idea and everything.
^^
aw. is it over?...
oh well.
this story was really well written. i like the idea and everything.
^^
12/13/2008 c4 10missmcweir
It seems to be an interesting storyline, but I have to agree to what somebody else already pointed out: You should look for a beta reader and go over the story again. The reader can understand most of time, still mistakes are always tiring. I noticed there were a lot of wrong verb forms (tenses, especially) and wrong use of pronouns. Otherwise, the storyline so far is goodm and you have the chracters behaving as much in character as possible in a fanfic. You worked a lot for this story, and I appreciate your effort, but you can still make it better. Also, think about deleting the author's note chapter. Again,this is mostly praise from a fellow author.
10missmcweirIt seems to be an interesting storyline, but I have to agree to what somebody else already pointed out: You should look for a beta reader and go over the story again. The reader can understand most of time, still mistakes are always tiring. I noticed there were a lot of wrong verb forms (tenses, especially) and wrong use of pronouns. Otherwise, the storyline so far is goodm and you have the chracters behaving as much in character as possible in a fanfic. You worked a lot for this story, and I appreciate your effort, but you can still make it better. Also, think about deleting the author's note chapter. Again,this is mostly praise from a fellow author.
11/16/2008 c1 6X-Lady-Nazina-Of-The-West-X
Hey I like your story so far it is pretty good but also very sad. I also have to say no offense meant you could do with a beta reader to correct some mistakes. As some words are not right for the sentences that they are in. However apart from that this story is pretty good so far and i like it.
Lady Nazina.
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6X-Lady-Nazina-Of-The-West-XHey I like your story so far it is pretty good but also very sad. I also have to say no offense meant you could do with a beta reader to correct some mistakes. As some words are not right for the sentences that they are in. However apart from that this story is pretty good so far and i like it.
Lady Nazina.
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9/15/2008 c12 1Katie Harsan
Oh my god, that was so good, i loved it. You did a great job at keeping the characters in character, which is just how i like it. Sequel please!
1Katie HarsanOh my god, that was so good, i loved it. You did a great job at keeping the characters in character, which is just how i like it. Sequel please!