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More please
More please
1/3/2009 c8 
9little girl-GROWN UP
Cooey! XD
Here I am and this review shall show you that I finally read the story.
BTW, here's a funny mistake (don't be mad): "a topsy".
It's okay if you're not updating soon. I could try to come up with an idea for you... if you want to-
9little girl-GROWN UPCooey! XD
Here I am and this review shall show you that I finally read the story.
BTW, here's a funny mistake (don't be mad): "a topsy".
It's okay if you're not updating soon. I could try to come up with an idea for you... if you want to-
1/1/2009 c2 little girl-GROWN UP
Hi.
Sorry but I have to tell you... naturally it's possible to read stories without quotation marks for direct speech and when I'm reading your story I can understand what you want to say but nevertheless I'd suggest you put them in :D
There are also some grammatical errors but the missing quotation marks had been the greater 'problem'.
Let's see what'll happen in the other chaps ^.^
Hi.
Sorry but I have to tell you... naturally it's possible to read stories without quotation marks for direct speech and when I'm reading your story I can understand what you want to say but nevertheless I'd suggest you put them in :D
There are also some grammatical errors but the missing quotation marks had been the greater 'problem'.
Let's see what'll happen in the other chaps ^.^
11/16/2007 c7 4RococoSpade
sveral grammar errors in the first few chaps, but its gotten much better. and i like the story line.
4RococoSpadesveral grammar errors in the first few chaps, but its gotten much better. and i like the story line.
10/13/2007 c1 11September's Nobara
Interesting premise, though the way all the dialogue is bunched together, it makes reading incredibly difficult, as well as confusing the reader about who is talking at that time. Every time a new character speaks, it requires a new paragraph:
"Hey, Dib, look who's here."
"Huh?" Dib said, racing over to the window where Gaz was.
There is also sporadic capitalization and punctuation (missing periods, question marks, quotation marks, etc.), as well as a bit of confusion between "there" and "their". I suggest procuring a reputable proofreader.
Take care,
~September's Nobara.
11September's NobaraInteresting premise, though the way all the dialogue is bunched together, it makes reading incredibly difficult, as well as confusing the reader about who is talking at that time. Every time a new character speaks, it requires a new paragraph:
"Hey, Dib, look who's here."
"Huh?" Dib said, racing over to the window where Gaz was.
There is also sporadic capitalization and punctuation (missing periods, question marks, quotation marks, etc.), as well as a bit of confusion between "there" and "their". I suggest procuring a reputable proofreader.
Take care,
~September's Nobara.
9/22/2007 c1 7Applesauce.Flavored.Resisty
Hey! Guess who! ;]
I like it! You should go comment on my stuff, too. But you don't have to. I just like telling people what to do. xDD
Good story! Try to seperate speech from normal actions, though. :]
-Applesauce.Flavored.Resisty-chan
7Applesauce.Flavored.ResistyHey! Guess who! ;]
I like it! You should go comment on my stuff, too. But you don't have to. I just like telling people what to do. xDD
Good story! Try to seperate speech from normal actions, though. :]
-Applesauce.Flavored.Resisty-chan
9/13/2007 c6 7piloneo
Dib's 'saving the world' plan was to take Zim to the movies? LOL
I really like this one. Gir and Gaz are great, and the 'gaymo' thing was funny!
7piloneoDib's 'saving the world' plan was to take Zim to the movies? LOL
I really like this one. Gir and Gaz are great, and the 'gaymo' thing was funny!
8/16/2007 c3 b1oom
Decent consept, but it's hard to read since you seem to have completely ignored punctuation. Try using quotations to separate speech from narration and hit the enter key each time someone speaks.
Decent consept, but it's hard to read since you seem to have completely ignored punctuation. Try using quotations to separate speech from narration and hit the enter key each time someone speaks.
8/13/2007 c1 44MissDomaYuset
This was a bad start. The grammer was really off and I had a hard time following.
44MissDomaYusetThis was a bad start. The grammer was really off and I had a hard time following.