for Change one thing11/6/2016 c8 A1B2C3D4E5F6G7H8I9J10K11L12M13
I noticed this was weird and getting weirder, Inread only part way through chapter 9 before I had to stop, this is so bad: spelling errors, misuse of words, and improper grammar.
I'm no master myself but holy crap.
I noticed this was weird and getting weirder, Inread only part way through chapter 9 before I had to stop, this is so bad: spelling errors, misuse of words, and improper grammar.
I'm no master myself but holy crap.
1/25/2012 c17 
37dem bones
Read a couple of reviews on this story and it's kind of ridiculous that this story is dissed because of it's grammatical and spelling errors. I mean there is worser fanfiction out there with far more spelling and grammatical errors than this story and...FYI, the spelling errors I find in those kind of stories are so bad it's impossible to read.
Certainly there are spelling errors and grammatical errors but it at least looks like some effort in re-reading your work is present AND I CAN ACTUALLY READ IT!
On another note, it's kind of ridiculous to judge a fanfiction on spelling and grammar. I mean it's like trying saying 'Oh I've just read this story that's absolutely perfect I mean this author is practically a god. No spelling errors present and good grammar. I mean who cares about the story's content, who cares if the idea is any good. I only care about the spelling and grammatical errors and that's deterring me from enjoying the WORLD!"
Oh and keeping all this in mind, it's kind of ridiculous to say that this is the reason this story receives such negative reviews. I mean some of the stories with the most reviews either are stories with good spelling and grammar but with characters completely OOC or stories that had good ideas but bad grammar and spelling.
But to get to the point, I LOVED this story. It was very inspiring, and very original, sure it had inconsistencies with canon and all but it wasn't enough to bug me. There's a lot of cool interesting concepts with spells and potions. Peter seems alot more intelligent then in canon and I wished Snape and Harry's relationship had developed alot more before he was taken back to the Dursleys. This is probably the first story that has believably made me hate Madam Pomfrey. I especially love the part where everyone thinks Harry is crazy that part was pulled off so beautifully. It wasn't a lengthy story and all and it could have been longer but it's short and complete and that is an obstacle in itself.
With all the original concepts mentioned you should try writing a story that doesn't follow the books I'm certain that you could pull it off a good adventure story keeping this in mind. :D
37dem bonesRead a couple of reviews on this story and it's kind of ridiculous that this story is dissed because of it's grammatical and spelling errors. I mean there is worser fanfiction out there with far more spelling and grammatical errors than this story and...FYI, the spelling errors I find in those kind of stories are so bad it's impossible to read.
Certainly there are spelling errors and grammatical errors but it at least looks like some effort in re-reading your work is present AND I CAN ACTUALLY READ IT!
On another note, it's kind of ridiculous to judge a fanfiction on spelling and grammar. I mean it's like trying saying 'Oh I've just read this story that's absolutely perfect I mean this author is practically a god. No spelling errors present and good grammar. I mean who cares about the story's content, who cares if the idea is any good. I only care about the spelling and grammatical errors and that's deterring me from enjoying the WORLD!"
Oh and keeping all this in mind, it's kind of ridiculous to say that this is the reason this story receives such negative reviews. I mean some of the stories with the most reviews either are stories with good spelling and grammar but with characters completely OOC or stories that had good ideas but bad grammar and spelling.
But to get to the point, I LOVED this story. It was very inspiring, and very original, sure it had inconsistencies with canon and all but it wasn't enough to bug me. There's a lot of cool interesting concepts with spells and potions. Peter seems alot more intelligent then in canon and I wished Snape and Harry's relationship had developed alot more before he was taken back to the Dursleys. This is probably the first story that has believably made me hate Madam Pomfrey. I especially love the part where everyone thinks Harry is crazy that part was pulled off so beautifully. It wasn't a lengthy story and all and it could have been longer but it's short and complete and that is an obstacle in itself.
With all the original concepts mentioned you should try writing a story that doesn't follow the books I'm certain that you could pull it off a good adventure story keeping this in mind. :D
3/13/2011 c17 1sm1982
What a great story.
I really enjoyed reading this story, Can't wait to read the sequel.
Hope that there will be a sequel, As i can hardly wait to read about what will happen.
Keep up the great work.
SM
1sm1982What a great story.
I really enjoyed reading this story, Can't wait to read the sequel.
Hope that there will be a sequel, As i can hardly wait to read about what will happen.
Keep up the great work.
SM
10/2/2008 c2 me
'yer' ? that's quite annoying actually.
'yer' ? that's quite annoying actually.
8/31/2008 c5 15lovemeforwhoiam15
This is a good plot but I can't read anymore because of how it's writen.
This is a good plot but I can't read anymore because of how it's writen.
8/30/2008 c3 annlbailie
Krum is spelled krum not Crum
Krum is spelled krum not Crum
8/28/2008 c17 9Ariana-807
Ha! that was a nice ending ;)And I REALLY hope you're going to start that sequel! :D
9Ariana-807Ha! that was a nice ending ;)And I REALLY hope you're going to start that sequel! :D
8/27/2008 c1 4gardensigernumbli
it's a bit weird. the sentences are really long and it doesnt quite flow very well. but otherwise it's a good story.
4gardensigernumbliit's a bit weird. the sentences are really long and it doesnt quite flow very well. but otherwise it's a good story.
8/27/2008 c17 3LupinandHarry
I understand your delays..man those Olympics were AWESOME! im sad that they are over..
Wonderful end..I loved this story, I cant wait for the sequel! Sque
3LupinandHarryI understand your delays..man those Olympics were AWESOME! im sad that they are over..
Wonderful end..I loved this story, I cant wait for the sequel! Sque
6/28/2008 c16 9Ariana-807
Oh no Sirius! I don't know if I, as well as Harry, can watch him die! Oh God, I can't wait to see if my pleas are beeing heard :P
9Ariana-807Oh no Sirius! I don't know if I, as well as Harry, can watch him die! Oh God, I can't wait to see if my pleas are beeing heard :P
6/20/2008 c16 PT
Vukk, if you read the next chapter you'll realise that there's a note from the author! Also, the note is in her bio!
Start writing so I can flame YOUR ass!
Vukk, if you read the next chapter you'll realise that there's a note from the author! Also, the note is in her bio!
Start writing so I can flame YOUR ass!
6/19/2008 c1 Vukk
"“Wow” Harry said, he still couldn’t believe that dragons were real creatures, he couldn’t wait to see a real one."
So the dragon Harry helped send to Charlie was fake? Sorry, but when you have such a glaring problem with your recollection of the books, it discourages people to read your stories; the dragon incident in 1st year is a major scene for the book (more than just a way to get detention), so please don't say its authentic just because you didn't can't remember something so simple.
"“Wow” Harry said, he still couldn’t believe that dragons were real creatures, he couldn’t wait to see a real one."
So the dragon Harry helped send to Charlie was fake? Sorry, but when you have such a glaring problem with your recollection of the books, it discourages people to read your stories; the dragon incident in 1st year is a major scene for the book (more than just a way to get detention), so please don't say its authentic just because you didn't can't remember something so simple.