2/18/2015 c1 20Pheonix09
That was cute and awesome, I loved it and nice job

8/25/2014 c1 13Unseen Watcher
I like this version too. Nice.

1/3/2011 c1 11Ninjy
I completely and absolutely loved this! Great, great, great job!

9/29/2007 c1 7Calypphire
Aww, brilliant. You're good. (=^.^=)

8/26/2007 c1 14Cool Jay
Very interesting how the structure was made. The alternate ending you created was also excellently well thought. But I have to say that the music doesn't match towards the ending. At the begginning it suits pefectly well the battle, until the moment Raph is hesitating. I'd say the ending version in the movie would've matched, because the music is melancholic, so is the atmosphere when Raph runs away, leaving both him and his brother confused of what had just happened.

Most of Evanescence's songs are depressing, and what I'm trying to say is that your ending doesn't really fit in that type of music.

But despite all the effort you made, I say it was a good idea to have made a story like that. I really loved it when Leo apologizes and they hug in the end. Just pick the right music for the story and most of all, you have to know what are the lyrics' meanings, like towards which side it's going (positive side, negative side), what it's all about, the emotions, ect. You know, an "analysis" of the song.

I hope you don't take this hard, I'm just giving you advice of what you could do better. :)

Again, great story!

Cool Jay

8/25/2007 c1 cometandme
This was beautiful, i really liked the alternate ending of this part of the movie...great job...thumbs up!