for Oh I miss him3/10/2013 c1 Guest
Its really good! A very different ending but I like how it isnt long :)
-sneezingpanda12345
Its really good! A very different ending but I like how it isnt long :)
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6/29/2009 c1 Anonymous
Wow Shizuki try reading this again harry does die,
great job u might wanna try to make it flow more and check ur spelling, but other than that great job
Wow Shizuki try reading this again harry does die,
great job u might wanna try to make it flow more and check ur spelling, but other than that great job
9/22/2007 c1 
107Shizuku Tsukishima749
Aw, that was so sweet! Brilliant job dude, really! I can't believe this hasn't gotten any more reviews than two; it definitely DESERVES more! Oh well; some people just can't see how beautiful this is! Poor Hermione, Ron, Lupin, and the rest of them; that's so sad! I'm glad Harry doesn't die, though, I REALLY AM! But I REALLY wish he would have ended up with Hermione and Ron and Ginny with...someone random. Who cares=, as long as it's Harry and Hermione, I'm fine! (Although I'm not a Ron/Luna fan...) Anyway, amazing work n this , man, really; keep it up!
Sincerely signed,
Shizuku Tsukishima749 :D ;D :) ;)
107Shizuku Tsukishima749Aw, that was so sweet! Brilliant job dude, really! I can't believe this hasn't gotten any more reviews than two; it definitely DESERVES more! Oh well; some people just can't see how beautiful this is! Poor Hermione, Ron, Lupin, and the rest of them; that's so sad! I'm glad Harry doesn't die, though, I REALLY AM! But I REALLY wish he would have ended up with Hermione and Ron and Ginny with...someone random. Who cares=, as long as it's Harry and Hermione, I'm fine! (Although I'm not a Ron/Luna fan...) Anyway, amazing work n this , man, really; keep it up!
Sincerely signed,
Shizuku Tsukishima749 :D ;D :) ;)
9/4/2007 c1 39devilssmile666
Hey, I just figured I'd review for this fic, even though you only requested the two CSI fics. I'm a Harry Potter fan, but I don't write any, nor do I read many HP fics.
Okay, your spelling.grammar needs improvement. There were quite a few errors: "People were dying for him and they goes an does this" I 'm not even sure what it was suppose to read, but it could be "People were dying for him, then he goes and does this" or "...for him and they go and do that" or any other way you can think of.
"And because I'm not they only one grieving Rom hasn't left his room" should be "Because I'm not the only one grieving" (go to new paragraph) "Ron hasn't left his room"
"And you-know-who is dead..." Should be "And You-Know-Who is dead" (you alwasy, always, ALWAYS capitalize a person's name, even if it's a nickname, or something else.)
Other than that, this is a really good fic. Very sad...thank God the seventh book didn't end like that!:D Keep writing, and I'll review to give you pointers for your writing (if it's a catagory I'm familiar with!)
~devilssmile6
39devilssmile666Hey, I just figured I'd review for this fic, even though you only requested the two CSI fics. I'm a Harry Potter fan, but I don't write any, nor do I read many HP fics.
Okay, your spelling.grammar needs improvement. There were quite a few errors: "People were dying for him and they goes an does this" I 'm not even sure what it was suppose to read, but it could be "People were dying for him, then he goes and does this" or "...for him and they go and do that" or any other way you can think of.
"And because I'm not they only one grieving Rom hasn't left his room" should be "Because I'm not the only one grieving" (go to new paragraph) "Ron hasn't left his room"
"And you-know-who is dead..." Should be "And You-Know-Who is dead" (you alwasy, always, ALWAYS capitalize a person's name, even if it's a nickname, or something else.)
Other than that, this is a really good fic. Very sad...thank God the seventh book didn't end like that!:D Keep writing, and I'll review to give you pointers for your writing (if it's a catagory I'm familiar with!)
~devilssmile6