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Really creepy. Personally I think Dark Side Atton is very believable-I would like some inkling of Dark Side Exile's motivation in this, though. If it's all about lust, I don't think his POV would be so shot through with...paranoia, with suspicion, with the mystery he finds appealing.
You write well and viscerally.
192skywalker05Really creepy. Personally I think Dark Side Atton is very believable-I would like some inkling of Dark Side Exile's motivation in this, though. If it's all about lust, I don't think his POV would be so shot through with...paranoia, with suspicion, with the mystery he finds appealing.
You write well and viscerally.