for When I realised2/12/2008 c1 Starfire99
The story is good, but the japanese in it ruined it. I didn't understand half the stuff they said. Everything else in this story (including half the dialogue) is in english, so I don't know why in the world you'd use japanese AND english dialogue. I can see using the honorifics, but most people reading this site don't know japanese, so your use of japanese phrases ruins the story.
In short, pick a damn language. Either write the entire thing in Japanese, or write the entire thing in english.
The story is good, but the japanese in it ruined it. I didn't understand half the stuff they said. Everything else in this story (including half the dialogue) is in english, so I don't know why in the world you'd use japanese AND english dialogue. I can see using the honorifics, but most people reading this site don't know japanese, so your use of japanese phrases ruins the story.
In short, pick a damn language. Either write the entire thing in Japanese, or write the entire thing in english.
12/7/2007 c1 
3Tsukhiro Kimiko
hm... like i said, it's a bit weird.. but nvm.. keep up the good work, haru-chan!
3Tsukhiro Kimikohm... like i said, it's a bit weird.. but nvm.. keep up the good work, haru-chan!
10/27/2007 c1 35Kaira-chan15
Aww how cute, I love this pairing! I liked how easily Hiashi approved of it. Nice work! ^_^
35Kaira-chan15Aww how cute, I love this pairing! I liked how easily Hiashi approved of it. Nice work! ^_^
9/10/2007 c1 1Slim Shady
Good but ease up on the Japanese cause it's hard to see what happened between them when they confessed.
1Slim ShadyGood but ease up on the Japanese cause it's hard to see what happened between them when they confessed.
9/9/2007 c1 4rurouni shadow
i think nejji and naruto are in character...but im not sure about hiashi. ^^ great job though! =D
4rurouni shadowi think nejji and naruto are in character...but im not sure about hiashi. ^^ great job though! =D
9/8/2007 c1 16Topaznik-Citrine
aww! that was the .most. kawaii thing ever! domo arigatou! there was so much japanese @[email protected] make my eyes all swirly! lol. it was great. congrats on a great one-fic ^-^
16Topaznik-Citrineaww! that was the .most. kawaii thing ever! domo arigatou! there was so much japanese @[email protected] make my eyes all swirly! lol. it was great. congrats on a great one-fic ^-^
9/8/2007 c1 leftandright
cute! but could you tell me what all those japenese words mean. and doujobu or something like that. I mean we dont all speak japenese, unfortunatly. well actually most of you on here do. But i dont sadly.
cute! but could you tell me what all those japenese words mean. and doujobu or something like that. I mean we dont all speak japenese, unfortunatly. well actually most of you on here do. But i dont sadly.