for Specks of Dust4/4/2015 c22 Blaine H
Please, please, please continue the story.
Please, please, please continue the story.
11/14/2012 c2 Guest
*thumbs up*
*thumbs up*
5/24/2011 c1 
2D. C. Copeland
How the hell have I missed this story for so long? Your prologue alone blew me away...I'll make sure to leave another, longer review once I get a few chapters further in
2D. C. CopelandHow the hell have I missed this story for so long? Your prologue alone blew me away...I'll make sure to leave another, longer review once I get a few chapters further in
2/27/2010 c22 Anonymous
REALLY good story, I can't wait for more chapters!
REALLY good story, I can't wait for more chapters!
1/30/2010 c22 Amere Mortal
Yay, a new post! Glad I checked. I had almost given up.
Yay, a new post! Glad I checked. I had almost given up.
11/25/2009 c22 1Ilyenna
really captivating story I like the character development, Ensa is very interesting, actually they are all really interesting, you have quite a talent!
1Ilyennareally captivating story I like the character development, Ensa is very interesting, actually they are all really interesting, you have quite a talent!
10/31/2009 c22 4Kar-Vermin
AT LAST! WO HO! MORE SPECKS! MORE DUST! MORE "OF"!
Well, you know what I mean. This has been too long coming, but well worth the wait. You pick up the action seamlessly, and give us your crisp eye for detail. This isn't just a generic "trap destination," it's an actual room with an actual purpose. It's the little things like that, which are everpresent in all your chapters, that make this tale stand out.
The characters are all on target as well. Emlyn's nervousness, Ali's blase attitude (plus she gets a chance to shine here!) and Shadow's "off doing something mysterious in the corner." Ensa and Star are a joy to watch as well.
I also like the way that Ensa explains the magic symbols to Emlyn- in layman's terms, not strictly game ones.
Big thumbs up. Where's the next one? 8-0
4Kar-VerminAT LAST! WO HO! MORE SPECKS! MORE DUST! MORE "OF"!
Well, you know what I mean. This has been too long coming, but well worth the wait. You pick up the action seamlessly, and give us your crisp eye for detail. This isn't just a generic "trap destination," it's an actual room with an actual purpose. It's the little things like that, which are everpresent in all your chapters, that make this tale stand out.
The characters are all on target as well. Emlyn's nervousness, Ali's blase attitude (plus she gets a chance to shine here!) and Shadow's "off doing something mysterious in the corner." Ensa and Star are a joy to watch as well.
I also like the way that Ensa explains the magic symbols to Emlyn- in layman's terms, not strictly game ones.
Big thumbs up. Where's the next one? 8-0
2/4/2009 c21 Amere Mortal
And...
Is this story going to be completed? I keep checking back, but no more has been posted.
And is this story going anywhere? There does not seem to be any plot development happening, just a bunch of misfits travelling together, to no purpose, just wandering aimlessly about. Would like to be proven wrong, as the writing itself is good. As for the previous chapter, it's inclusion is still incomprehensible, as it added nothing, clarified nothing, had no attachment points whatsoever. Skip any more of those.
And...
Is this story going to be completed? I keep checking back, but no more has been posted.
And is this story going anywhere? There does not seem to be any plot development happening, just a bunch of misfits travelling together, to no purpose, just wandering aimlessly about. Would like to be proven wrong, as the writing itself is good. As for the previous chapter, it's inclusion is still incomprehensible, as it added nothing, clarified nothing, had no attachment points whatsoever. Skip any more of those.
1/17/2009 c21 Kar-Vermin
Spectacular!
Your skill in characterization and in descriptive details remains masterful.
* Ali had been right; the tower was ruined. Emlyn stood with Ensa on the road and craned his neck backwards to look up at it. The round stone tower was bulging at the base, and he could pick the larger stones surrounding the small arched windows. The bottom storey was in relatively good repair, only missing a few stones and bits of mortar, but the second storey had a gaping hole through the side closest to the road, and only traces of the wall footings showed that there must have once been a third above that. The trees and undergrowth pushed up close against the tower, cradling its sandy coloured stones in a blanket of greenery, and they could both hear the rustling and snapping as Ali pushed her way through the tangle somewhere out of sight.*
You have this way of making the world around Emlyn and friends come alive. Just in a simple little passage like this. It makes it easy for our mind's eye to visualize.
Of course, all the characters behave true to form here.
One thing. The last sentance...
*They never heard what she would have said, because with a crash that made Emlyn jump clean off the ground the door slammed shut and they were thrown into midnight blackness.* Not all of them. You yourself remind us in this chapter that Ensa has darkvision.
Waiting for more- and there WILL be more, right? :)
Spectacular!
Your skill in characterization and in descriptive details remains masterful.
* Ali had been right; the tower was ruined. Emlyn stood with Ensa on the road and craned his neck backwards to look up at it. The round stone tower was bulging at the base, and he could pick the larger stones surrounding the small arched windows. The bottom storey was in relatively good repair, only missing a few stones and bits of mortar, but the second storey had a gaping hole through the side closest to the road, and only traces of the wall footings showed that there must have once been a third above that. The trees and undergrowth pushed up close against the tower, cradling its sandy coloured stones in a blanket of greenery, and they could both hear the rustling and snapping as Ali pushed her way through the tangle somewhere out of sight.*
You have this way of making the world around Emlyn and friends come alive. Just in a simple little passage like this. It makes it easy for our mind's eye to visualize.
Of course, all the characters behave true to form here.
One thing. The last sentance...
*They never heard what she would have said, because with a crash that made Emlyn jump clean off the ground the door slammed shut and they were thrown into midnight blackness.* Not all of them. You yourself remind us in this chapter that Ensa has darkvision.
Waiting for more- and there WILL be more, right? :)
7/18/2008 c19 Kar-Vermin
Very good chapter. I was surprised (pleasantly) when you shifted back to The Orc & Rose. I didn't think we'd see any more of that, but we have, and (best of all) I suspect it was for a reason. A hidden hint dropped here and there...
Winter In The Wolf Country, though? Is that an outside reference to something?
Very good chapter. I was surprised (pleasantly) when you shifted back to The Orc & Rose. I didn't think we'd see any more of that, but we have, and (best of all) I suspect it was for a reason. A hidden hint dropped here and there...
Winter In The Wolf Country, though? Is that an outside reference to something?
7/17/2008 c18 Kar-Vermin
Wonderful chapter (as if there was a doubt). You are the master (mistress?) of character development!
I will say that all of Ensa's comments to Star about her companions smacks a bit of exposition- ie, Star is just there in tis scene so Ensa can muse out loud without sounding like a crazy person. Why not simply let us hear Ensa's thoughts?
On the other hand, I do like how you handle Star. The rat is a familiar, not a person- a point many other D&D stories (and campaigns too, for that matter) fail to realize. It's a different mindset.
Waiting for more!
Wonderful chapter (as if there was a doubt). You are the master (mistress?) of character development!
I will say that all of Ensa's comments to Star about her companions smacks a bit of exposition- ie, Star is just there in tis scene so Ensa can muse out loud without sounding like a crazy person. Why not simply let us hear Ensa's thoughts?
On the other hand, I do like how you handle Star. The rat is a familiar, not a person- a point many other D&D stories (and campaigns too, for that matter) fail to realize. It's a different mindset.
Waiting for more!
6/30/2008 c18 Amere Mortal
Oh, I like the way this is developing, the way you are developing the characters. Great work.
Oh, I like the way this is developing, the way you are developing the characters. Great work.
6/23/2008 c18 2Ride4Ruin
Wow. She actually tripped up Shadow and got something out of him in only a minute or so of dialogue. Emyln's past prodding failed miserably, yet here Ensa is able to get him to spill something about his past with only a few choice questions. Guess that's why she's the wizard and he's the meat shield.
And I absolutely adore the interaction between her and Star, those two are great!
2Ride4RuinWow. She actually tripped up Shadow and got something out of him in only a minute or so of dialogue. Emyln's past prodding failed miserably, yet here Ensa is able to get him to spill something about his past with only a few choice questions. Guess that's why she's the wizard and he's the meat shield.
And I absolutely adore the interaction between her and Star, those two are great!