for Just a Test Drive8/15/2020 c1 Hades415
You should have Beth walking in on Goliath and Elisa in a sweaty naked pile on Elisa s living room floor. And they finish right in front of her
You should have Beth walking in on Goliath and Elisa in a sweaty naked pile on Elisa s living room floor. And they finish right in front of her
10/21/2017 c1 AnOwlfulPun
Think maybe you coming back now will unstuck you? You could go into Goliath and Elisa probing this friends with hypotheticals. Then the two coming out to family and friends, fitting in their intimate conning together somehwere? Even go into normal couple things ot maybe not so normal things for them. One thing that struck me is that gargoyles probably don't do many of the intimate things that humans might like 69, blowjobs, cunilingus, or anal, if that's a route you'd like to explore. What about things less sexual like back scratches or head scratches? Massages?
Think maybe you coming back now will unstuck you? You could go into Goliath and Elisa probing this friends with hypotheticals. Then the two coming out to family and friends, fitting in their intimate conning together somehwere? Even go into normal couple things ot maybe not so normal things for them. One thing that struck me is that gargoyles probably don't do many of the intimate things that humans might like 69, blowjobs, cunilingus, or anal, if that's a route you'd like to explore. What about things less sexual like back scratches or head scratches? Massages?
8/7/2013 c1 
37PrayerGirl
This is really good! As for what to do, you should have Angela be tired of waitinfand jusst come right out and ask Goliath, "so when are you going to make it official?" And hes like what?! Ice breaker! Anyway please write more soon!
37PrayerGirlThis is really good! As for what to do, you should have Angela be tired of waitinfand jusst come right out and ask Goliath, "so when are you going to make it official?" And hes like what?! Ice breaker! Anyway please write more soon!
6/17/2013 c1 Xepher06
I absolutely love this story! You really got their personalities and manner of speaking correct.
It's sad that you have not updated but major writer's block and life...what can you do. This would be a really good one-shot or story! Should you ever change your mind. Thanks for the awesome read!
I absolutely love this story! You really got their personalities and manner of speaking correct.
It's sad that you have not updated but major writer's block and life...what can you do. This would be a really good one-shot or story! Should you ever change your mind. Thanks for the awesome read!
12/7/2012 c1 Rhyme2Rhapsody
Here's an idea! Have Chavez reign in the force to find out who Elisa's guy is. Like an in house investigation. Not because they are trying to be mean of course but because its fun and they are curious. Chavez calls a secret meeting with the department and they set up a plan to follow Elisa around town and see if her mysterious guy shows up. I think that idea might get your creative juices flowing!
Here's an idea! Have Chavez reign in the force to find out who Elisa's guy is. Like an in house investigation. Not because they are trying to be mean of course but because its fun and they are curious. Chavez calls a secret meeting with the department and they set up a plan to follow Elisa around town and see if her mysterious guy shows up. I think that idea might get your creative juices flowing!
12/6/2010 c1 16London Bai
Wonderful plot. But the spelling. Lord Almighty, the spelling! Fix that and I'd give this story 10 stars out of 5.
For ideas, hmmm... Now that Broadway and Angela know about Goliath and Elisa (if it wasn't obvious before), I see them going to the rest of the clan, but not saying anything... yet! :D Though, if anything, I think they might tell Fox.
As for Bluestone, because he's a guy, he could be asking anyone he might think would be 'good enough' for Elisa if he's the 'lucky guy.' I imagine Bluestone somewhat getting so stressed out about this, that he goes to the aid of Goliath (seeing as how he already knows about the gargoyles seeing as it's after the Avalon trip)
If you get really far in this story (and I hope you do), I think you should reintroduce Tatiana or the Werid Sisters so that Elisa would be able to somehow birth thier children. Either with Goliath as a human long enough to impregnate Elisa with human genes or with Elisa long enough to give birth to an egg. In another story, I've read that they made a hybrid, but I didn't really like that idea, seeing as how in later generations, it could effect the gargoyles natural DNA system and affect the later generation's efficency. Maybe it's just me and how my mind works sometimes.
Some ideas for you. I hope they come to some use.
16London BaiWonderful plot. But the spelling. Lord Almighty, the spelling! Fix that and I'd give this story 10 stars out of 5.
For ideas, hmmm... Now that Broadway and Angela know about Goliath and Elisa (if it wasn't obvious before), I see them going to the rest of the clan, but not saying anything... yet! :D Though, if anything, I think they might tell Fox.
As for Bluestone, because he's a guy, he could be asking anyone he might think would be 'good enough' for Elisa if he's the 'lucky guy.' I imagine Bluestone somewhat getting so stressed out about this, that he goes to the aid of Goliath (seeing as how he already knows about the gargoyles seeing as it's after the Avalon trip)
If you get really far in this story (and I hope you do), I think you should reintroduce Tatiana or the Werid Sisters so that Elisa would be able to somehow birth thier children. Either with Goliath as a human long enough to impregnate Elisa with human genes or with Elisa long enough to give birth to an egg. In another story, I've read that they made a hybrid, but I didn't really like that idea, seeing as how in later generations, it could effect the gargoyles natural DNA system and affect the later generation's efficency. Maybe it's just me and how my mind works sometimes.
Some ideas for you. I hope they come to some use.
8/12/2009 c1 4Masaka1
Ideas, huh? Well you asked for it. Since this situation is so heavy with drama you can go with the 'social injustice' side of things. Like Matt Bluestone can somehow smuggle Maza's secret out of her and then accidentally use said information in an argument with one of his co-workers. You know like 'Bluestone, you're such a disgrace! Alien conspiracies and Illuminati, what kind of crap is that for a cop to investigate?' and then Matt might accidentally say something like 'Well at least I'm not sleeping with my obsession like Ma...ah, oh jalapeno.'
As for the clan's reactions...well that is really up to how nasty you want to get with gargoyle reactions. Broadway, Angela and Lexington seem like they would be fine with it (I add Lex in the list because he practically wants to adopt Fox's son for his own the big softie) but Brooklyn and Hudson might have negative reactions. Hudson would probably get over it sooner, given that he was always telling Goliath to trust Maza in other non-romantic situations but Brooklyn might just well...how he reacts could lead to several different branch plots. Plus there is the hightened Demon threat for the couple to panic over now.
Also there is the reaction of Derek 'Talon' Maza to worry about. Even though he is technically a monster now, how is he going to react to his sister's choice of beau?
And then there is the whole wide world of Fae implications. How well do you think changelings might be treated, how much interest does Titania show in the relationship, what if the Weird Sisters are consulted by one of the outraged friends to see where the relationship ends up and then the Sisters give that person one of those nasty Self-Fulfilling Prophecies for how Goliath and Maza might wind up?
You've just scratched the surface on all the fun-stuff, sweetie. Now that you've reached a crisis point you can have LOADS of fun. Trechery, predjudice, danger, sexual perversions, family-loyalties, doomed prophecies, civil unrest...the list just goes on and on.
The big question you have to ask yourself is, how intense do you want this story to get, and how much 'human evil' do you want to describe?
Feel free to ask me for help, I always love to give advise!
4Masaka1Ideas, huh? Well you asked for it. Since this situation is so heavy with drama you can go with the 'social injustice' side of things. Like Matt Bluestone can somehow smuggle Maza's secret out of her and then accidentally use said information in an argument with one of his co-workers. You know like 'Bluestone, you're such a disgrace! Alien conspiracies and Illuminati, what kind of crap is that for a cop to investigate?' and then Matt might accidentally say something like 'Well at least I'm not sleeping with my obsession like Ma...ah, oh jalapeno.'
As for the clan's reactions...well that is really up to how nasty you want to get with gargoyle reactions. Broadway, Angela and Lexington seem like they would be fine with it (I add Lex in the list because he practically wants to adopt Fox's son for his own the big softie) but Brooklyn and Hudson might have negative reactions. Hudson would probably get over it sooner, given that he was always telling Goliath to trust Maza in other non-romantic situations but Brooklyn might just well...how he reacts could lead to several different branch plots. Plus there is the hightened Demon threat for the couple to panic over now.
Also there is the reaction of Derek 'Talon' Maza to worry about. Even though he is technically a monster now, how is he going to react to his sister's choice of beau?
And then there is the whole wide world of Fae implications. How well do you think changelings might be treated, how much interest does Titania show in the relationship, what if the Weird Sisters are consulted by one of the outraged friends to see where the relationship ends up and then the Sisters give that person one of those nasty Self-Fulfilling Prophecies for how Goliath and Maza might wind up?
You've just scratched the surface on all the fun-stuff, sweetie. Now that you've reached a crisis point you can have LOADS of fun. Trechery, predjudice, danger, sexual perversions, family-loyalties, doomed prophecies, civil unrest...the list just goes on and on.
The big question you have to ask yourself is, how intense do you want this story to get, and how much 'human evil' do you want to describe?
Feel free to ask me for help, I always love to give advise!
5/23/2009 c1 19BigBadWolfyBoy
Awesome job!
As for ideas, well, if Matt were to find out, he might be shocked, but not one to going running to the Captain.
The other clan members have come to love Elisa as part of their clan, so perhaps you could go with Angela and Broadway telling the clan? Or you could have them approach Goliath and reassure him that they approve?
You could go many different angles on this and I believe you've done a wonderful job of capturing the characters and staying true to them. Bravo!
~BBWB~
19BigBadWolfyBoyAwesome job!
As for ideas, well, if Matt were to find out, he might be shocked, but not one to going running to the Captain.
The other clan members have come to love Elisa as part of their clan, so perhaps you could go with Angela and Broadway telling the clan? Or you could have them approach Goliath and reassure him that they approve?
You could go many different angles on this and I believe you've done a wonderful job of capturing the characters and staying true to them. Bravo!
~BBWB~
4/16/2009 c1 asdfdql
really amazing. you've managed to express goliath and elisa very well. if you could continue with this story, it'd be really awesome! :D
really amazing. you've managed to express goliath and elisa very well. if you could continue with this story, it'd be really awesome! :D
1/12/2009 c1 Chris
Nice! I love it, but I've got one unfortunate word to bring up: spelling. Good grief, the spelling!
Nice! I love it, but I've got one unfortunate word to bring up: spelling. Good grief, the spelling!
11/23/2008 c1 9Inu's Hanyo
hi
really good !
haha.. this is like the second fan fic. for gargoyles that ive read.. and i really like it.
umm. as for direction of the story.. i really dont know..
it depends on what you want the story to be.. like funny or tragic.. funny would be like the clan finding out and react in wierd ways... and tragic would be like... death? lol.. jk jk...
but really,, its good so far.
~ Inu's hanyo
9Inu's Hanyohi
really good !
haha.. this is like the second fan fic. for gargoyles that ive read.. and i really like it.
umm. as for direction of the story.. i really dont know..
it depends on what you want the story to be.. like funny or tragic.. funny would be like the clan finding out and react in wierd ways... and tragic would be like... death? lol.. jk jk...
but really,, its good so far.
~ Inu's hanyo
11/15/2008 c1 DarkQueen
I love it so fare plz updates soon!
I love it so fare plz updates soon!