for Second Chance4/26/2009 c5 
2Legend of Shadow
I like how you fixed one of the biggest problems I had with the end of SEED, I love how you wrote everyone just as I see them when I give them the most credit as interesting characters, and I was quite thrilled at your application of SCIENCE! in the story.
No real criticism that stands out - narration and dialog are both solid, and I didn't notice any grammar or spelling flaws. All around excellent piece of writing about a character who doesn't get nearly enough credit.
2Legend of ShadowI like how you fixed one of the biggest problems I had with the end of SEED, I love how you wrote everyone just as I see them when I give them the most credit as interesting characters, and I was quite thrilled at your application of SCIENCE! in the story.
No real criticism that stands out - narration and dialog are both solid, and I didn't notice any grammar or spelling flaws. All around excellent piece of writing about a character who doesn't get nearly enough credit.
1/15/2009 c5 15Dragoon Swordsman
This is one of the more interesting takes I've seen on the idea of Flay surviving Jachin Due. Usually either the shuttle survives, or as in my own story she's not even in that situation in the first place. Here, on the other hand, the shuttle IS hit, and Flay is clinically dead (a plot device I've seen before; NOT a criticism), just frozen instead of outright vaporized. The heart-to-heart between Flay and Kira at the end was good, and long overdue considering how things went in canon.
Nice to see Cagalli being accepting of Flay; she's always struck me as having Athrun-level protectiveness as far as Kira is concerned. (And Flay won't have to be jealous anymore!) Speaking of Cagalli, points for her chat with Kira in the last chapter; that sort of brother/sister thing was sorely lacking in canon towards the end. For pity's sake, they interact maybe twice once their sibling status is revealed.
15Dragoon SwordsmanThis is one of the more interesting takes I've seen on the idea of Flay surviving Jachin Due. Usually either the shuttle survives, or as in my own story she's not even in that situation in the first place. Here, on the other hand, the shuttle IS hit, and Flay is clinically dead (a plot device I've seen before; NOT a criticism), just frozen instead of outright vaporized. The heart-to-heart between Flay and Kira at the end was good, and long overdue considering how things went in canon.
Nice to see Cagalli being accepting of Flay; she's always struck me as having Athrun-level protectiveness as far as Kira is concerned. (And Flay won't have to be jealous anymore!) Speaking of Cagalli, points for her chat with Kira in the last chapter; that sort of brother/sister thing was sorely lacking in canon towards the end. For pity's sake, they interact maybe twice once their sibling status is revealed.
10/3/2008 c5 6Honeypuff Moonmoon
Oh wow, this fic was amazing!
You have a really nice style of writing and you really expressed the characters well! I am a fan of Kira/Flay and you really did the pairing justice! And all the research you did, you really put in a lot of effort and it made for an awesome read! You also got Lacus in character which had to be difficult in the circumstances but you SO pulled it off!
You know you've done a great job when you're still getting reviews a year later.
Well done!
6Honeypuff MoonmoonOh wow, this fic was amazing!
You have a really nice style of writing and you really expressed the characters well! I am a fan of Kira/Flay and you really did the pairing justice! And all the research you did, you really put in a lot of effort and it made for an awesome read! You also got Lacus in character which had to be difficult in the circumstances but you SO pulled it off!
You know you've done a great job when you're still getting reviews a year later.
Well done!
2/5/2008 c5 2LaniZion
Being a Lacus fan, I have to say that you did a good job in portraying her. I also thought that it was very nice with the way she and Kira had their talk.
I really enjoyed reading through this, and though I would've preferred it to be a bit longer, I would say this is one of the better Kira/Flay fics. So, onto the sequel then, eh?
2LaniZionBeing a Lacus fan, I have to say that you did a good job in portraying her. I also thought that it was very nice with the way she and Kira had their talk.
I really enjoyed reading through this, and though I would've preferred it to be a bit longer, I would say this is one of the better Kira/Flay fics. So, onto the sequel then, eh?
2/5/2008 c1 LaniZion
Did some research on the subject, huh? Well, I learned something new from reading this. Told ya I'd get to it, ^^.
Now, while this seems like a novelization of those particular moments, I still found it enjoyable to be reading through them. Now, I wonder how the rest of this fiction while shape out.
Did some research on the subject, huh? Well, I learned something new from reading this. Told ya I'd get to it, ^^.
Now, while this seems like a novelization of those particular moments, I still found it enjoyable to be reading through them. Now, I wonder how the rest of this fiction while shape out.
11/20/2007 c5 32Deathzealot
I know that I reviewed Evolution but I did not review Second Chance so I decided to do so. Anyhow I love your style of writing it is almost like reading a real Novel and as an aside it is alot better then the SEED Novels. *chuckles* Though I do have one question if Roger had meet Kira before Evolution started and been on the Archangel before why hadn't he mentioned it when he was talking to Athrun and Cagalli in Evolution.
Also if you can, please read my Honor of a Knight fanfic and let know how it is. It may not be a Kira/Flay but it is not a Kira/Lacus either. I like to have people review my stories and give me constructive tips and stuff like that.
Anyways thanks for writing a really great Fanfic keep it coming...
32DeathzealotI know that I reviewed Evolution but I did not review Second Chance so I decided to do so. Anyhow I love your style of writing it is almost like reading a real Novel and as an aside it is alot better then the SEED Novels. *chuckles* Though I do have one question if Roger had meet Kira before Evolution started and been on the Archangel before why hadn't he mentioned it when he was talking to Athrun and Cagalli in Evolution.
Also if you can, please read my Honor of a Knight fanfic and let know how it is. It may not be a Kira/Flay but it is not a Kira/Lacus either. I like to have people review my stories and give me constructive tips and stuff like that.
Anyways thanks for writing a really great Fanfic keep it coming...
10/16/2007 c5 22Big-Babidi
It's always such a treat to find good authors who write fics that pair Kira up with someone who isn't Lacus. While I see the first chapter of this fic's sequel is already up, I might as well post a review here before checking it out.
The writing quality is solid. Good descriptions of scenes both in and out of combat, as well as having on good hold on characters' canon personalities. Don't see anything to criticize really, so time to read the sequel!
~bigbabidi
22Big-BabidiIt's always such a treat to find good authors who write fics that pair Kira up with someone who isn't Lacus. While I see the first chapter of this fic's sequel is already up, I might as well post a review here before checking it out.
The writing quality is solid. Good descriptions of scenes both in and out of combat, as well as having on good hold on characters' canon personalities. Don't see anything to criticize really, so time to read the sequel!
~bigbabidi
10/9/2007 c5 1Vanguarde
That was most excellent. You portrayed the characters very well, good job. I enjoyed reading this and I'm a bit disappointed it's over, but I understand that it's hard to write on anything after that. I can't wait to read more stories from you. Keep up the good work.
1VanguardeThat was most excellent. You portrayed the characters very well, good job. I enjoyed reading this and I'm a bit disappointed it's over, but I understand that it's hard to write on anything after that. I can't wait to read more stories from you. Keep up the good work.
10/8/2007 c5 bloodyknight85
'Ah ha! Fllay and Kira finally together... I can see that happening... Well, it's happening, isn't it? Good luck to them, i suppose... Is this the end? No continuation at all... That's too bad... You wrote great, that is all i can say, man...'
Keep up the good work, dude... Update sooN!
'Ah ha! Fllay and Kira finally together... I can see that happening... Well, it's happening, isn't it? Good luck to them, i suppose... Is this the end? No continuation at all... That's too bad... You wrote great, that is all i can say, man...'
Keep up the good work, dude... Update sooN!
10/6/2007 c5 7Zidane Lightning Saix
Although people think as Lacus as a "perfect being", she's in fact a very weak girl. I still remember when she crumble in Kira's chest crying for he father's death. In here, she just value Kira's love for Flay as greater that his love for her, even after the ring and kiss scene (which in some asian countries means engagement)
We've seen Kira in GS/GSD not expressing much of his inner feelings, and that's how he is, not "Jesus Yamato" as some point.
Nice ending here, and the fact that Kira will not be so absorbed with Terminal/Clyne Faction as GSD now that he has Flay at his side, may set things for a nice sequel.
7Zidane Lightning SaixAlthough people think as Lacus as a "perfect being", she's in fact a very weak girl. I still remember when she crumble in Kira's chest crying for he father's death. In here, she just value Kira's love for Flay as greater that his love for her, even after the ring and kiss scene (which in some asian countries means engagement)
We've seen Kira in GS/GSD not expressing much of his inner feelings, and that's how he is, not "Jesus Yamato" as some point.
Nice ending here, and the fact that Kira will not be so absorbed with Terminal/Clyne Faction as GSD now that he has Flay at his side, may set things for a nice sequel.
10/5/2007 c5 3Scarlet Troll
I really loved this chapter. Can't wait for the sequel!
And I don't think you made Lacus perfect. I don't really like Lacus 'cause she seems so 'perfect' in GSeed / Destiny to me. But that's just my opinion...
Yay for KiraFllay
3Scarlet TrollI really loved this chapter. Can't wait for the sequel!
And I don't think you made Lacus perfect. I don't really like Lacus 'cause she seems so 'perfect' in GSeed / Destiny to me. But that's just my opinion...
Yay for KiraFllay
10/5/2007 c5 2Irui
/quote/Regardless of her past opinions, if this girl made Kira happy, Cagalli wasn’t going to stand in their way./end quote/
YAY; like totally
this is what i really think Cagalli would've done too
/quote/“Kira, it would hurt so much more if you stayed with me just to be polite,” she said. “But I love that you care.” He managed a smile, and Lacus pressed a tender kiss against his forehead. “Just remember that if you ever need anyone, I’ll be here.”/end quote/
AW-so sweet
/quote/Do you love me back? Can you love me after all that’s happened?/end quote/
i like this line; so deep in meaning
Beautiful ending; most ppl are happy. That includes Lacus; sure she's sad that she can't be with him, but when you really, truly love someone, you would want the best and happiness for them, ne?
~Irui
2Irui/quote/Regardless of her past opinions, if this girl made Kira happy, Cagalli wasn’t going to stand in their way./end quote/
YAY; like totally
this is what i really think Cagalli would've done too
/quote/“Kira, it would hurt so much more if you stayed with me just to be polite,” she said. “But I love that you care.” He managed a smile, and Lacus pressed a tender kiss against his forehead. “Just remember that if you ever need anyone, I’ll be here.”/end quote/
AW-so sweet
/quote/Do you love me back? Can you love me after all that’s happened?/end quote/
i like this line; so deep in meaning
Beautiful ending; most ppl are happy. That includes Lacus; sure she's sad that she can't be with him, but when you really, truly love someone, you would want the best and happiness for them, ne?
~Irui
10/5/2007 c5 backlash5
Thats what I call a good ending. You do know how to write a story, you should write a follow-up story about what happens next.
7hankx
Thats what I call a good ending. You do know how to write a story, you should write a follow-up story about what happens next.
7hankx