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for Little Devils Never Cry:Halloween

4/1/2014 c1 Draugr
Love it :D
11/7/2007 c1 1Devils Melody
That was really cute! The part with the monkey in the trunk was great. I'll have to try that once.
11/2/2007 c1 constructive criticizm
OK first you need to make a *new* paragraph when another person speaks. It's not good to have everyone speaking in the same paragraph. It looks too amateur.

Another thing, watch your tenses and your punctuation.

I hope you take these things into consideration and that this is not a flame. Flames put you down as a person,but critizm is there to help the author get better and not look stupid.
11/1/2007 c1 39Eric Draven201
Its cute almost Scooby Doo-esque at first

Great Job!
10/31/2007 c1 zenbon zakura
lol you got arkahm lady as mary dante and virgel and sparda and his wive eva lol hurry and update!

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