for Beyond The Sun11/29/2007 c5 
226Zaedah
Oh Great Prophetess,
I beseech forgiveness for my long absence. I need to quit one of my jobs so I can focus on reading works like this. Here's my opinion. Are you sitting comfortably? Good, then we shall begin...
The first thing that stands out for me is the description. Not just the basic, 'when she said this, she was standing by a tree' type of description. No, my Pig uses detail, which is a gift in and of itself. We get to see the tree. We know the leaves are blowing. We feel the wind as well. That kind of extra-mile information goes a long way. Reading dialogue is one thing. Being given the visual clues to hear it better in the scene is quite another. You do this so well.
Emotions and humor are essential to my enjoyment. I need snap. I need wit. But I also need the tangible confusions and tension of the characters. I have them here. Thanks for that.
All in all, I am infinitely pleased to have the chance to watch this fic come together. I will be more vigilant in my reviews because you deserve to be applauded. And I am clapping loudly. In front of a microphone. And a bullhorn.
~~Zaedah
226ZaedahOh Great Prophetess,
I beseech forgiveness for my long absence. I need to quit one of my jobs so I can focus on reading works like this. Here's my opinion. Are you sitting comfortably? Good, then we shall begin...
The first thing that stands out for me is the description. Not just the basic, 'when she said this, she was standing by a tree' type of description. No, my Pig uses detail, which is a gift in and of itself. We get to see the tree. We know the leaves are blowing. We feel the wind as well. That kind of extra-mile information goes a long way. Reading dialogue is one thing. Being given the visual clues to hear it better in the scene is quite another. You do this so well.
Emotions and humor are essential to my enjoyment. I need snap. I need wit. But I also need the tangible confusions and tension of the characters. I have them here. Thanks for that.
All in all, I am infinitely pleased to have the chance to watch this fic come together. I will be more vigilant in my reviews because you deserve to be applauded. And I am clapping loudly. In front of a microphone. And a bullhorn.
~~Zaedah
11/28/2007 c5 29RixxiSpooks
I have decided, considering you bless me with long, rambling fantastic reviews that I will return the favor!
I love this chapter! It made me laugh so much at Rose's sudden obviously terrifying outburst! It is exactly how I think I would react, with increduality (I dont believe that's a word but ah well. That just made me think of that advert 'Ah Bisto' anyhoo) Yeah, I've lost my thread now...Oh and how the outlaws react! Teehee! They're like 'What on earth?'
Whoo, you used discombobulate! Oh yeah! Awesomeness in its entirety! Fab! Fantabuloso! Amazyfying! Just a few made up adjectives that I like to use! Isnt it just the bestest word in the world!
Heh, its funny because my mum read part of one of your emails to me and she said that you wrote very well and why couldnt I write that maturely and...something, cant remember the word (it was complicated and out of my vocabulary) I'll just say eloquently which is a word in my vocab!
Brilliant chapter as per usual with amazing descriptions and stuff. Seriously, you should be a novelist! Keep up the great work!
Love Rixx
29RixxiSpooksI have decided, considering you bless me with long, rambling fantastic reviews that I will return the favor!
I love this chapter! It made me laugh so much at Rose's sudden obviously terrifying outburst! It is exactly how I think I would react, with increduality (I dont believe that's a word but ah well. That just made me think of that advert 'Ah Bisto' anyhoo) Yeah, I've lost my thread now...Oh and how the outlaws react! Teehee! They're like 'What on earth?'
Whoo, you used discombobulate! Oh yeah! Awesomeness in its entirety! Fab! Fantabuloso! Amazyfying! Just a few made up adjectives that I like to use! Isnt it just the bestest word in the world!
Heh, its funny because my mum read part of one of your emails to me and she said that you wrote very well and why couldnt I write that maturely and...something, cant remember the word (it was complicated and out of my vocabulary) I'll just say eloquently which is a word in my vocab!
Brilliant chapter as per usual with amazing descriptions and stuff. Seriously, you should be a novelist! Keep up the great work!
Love Rixx
11/28/2007 c5 Angua von Uberwald
Oh, I love Life On Mars (: Although I still don't understand Rose's abrupt change in attitude..
Another great chapter, and I liked the way that John trusted her, because the group always listen to him (:
Can't wait 'til the next chapter, update soon yeah?
Emily-Anne.x
Oh, I love Life On Mars (: Although I still don't understand Rose's abrupt change in attitude..
Another great chapter, and I liked the way that John trusted her, because the group always listen to him (:
Can't wait 'til the next chapter, update soon yeah?
Emily-Anne.x
11/27/2007 c5 7reflect.clouds
Ok firstly...Life on Mars! I loved that show! Don't ask why I'm getting so excited - I'm a bit hyper, so this review will end up very weird. How did she fall into a coma, if that's what you're suggesting?
So, what's her plan? I have to say, I would find it just as hysterical as she did. I love the gang's confusion - it makes everything so much more realistic.
You describe very well, I've noticed. Exceedingly well in fact. I will have to take lessons :)
Thank you...I'm attempting to improve due to Melissa's complaining!
*Still in shock at the amount of reviews* only one word: LOVED
Fran x
7reflect.cloudsOk firstly...Life on Mars! I loved that show! Don't ask why I'm getting so excited - I'm a bit hyper, so this review will end up very weird. How did she fall into a coma, if that's what you're suggesting?
So, what's her plan? I have to say, I would find it just as hysterical as she did. I love the gang's confusion - it makes everything so much more realistic.
You describe very well, I've noticed. Exceedingly well in fact. I will have to take lessons :)
Thank you...I'm attempting to improve due to Melissa's complaining!
*Still in shock at the amount of reviews* only one word: LOVED
Fran x
11/26/2007 c4 16honestgreenpirate
my only complaint? you're making me love robin too much! seriously though - "a disarmingly dazzling grin" "his green eyes twinkled kindly" "His countenance lit up with warm, friendly sun" - thank god you put a bit of his ego in otherwise i would have completed melted and been useless! lovely to see allan being proper allan as well. i am of course worried about will, i always seem to be. it was the "whose smile looked more polite than heartfelt" bit.
anyway i really liked it! a delightful amount of detail!
also shakespeare quotes!
"If it were done, when 'tis done, then 'twere well it were done quickly." from Macbeth
and
"She is herself a dowry" from King Lear, it's a lovely sentiment.
and
"O woe is me!" could be any woman from any Shakespeare play - it just clamours to be used!
xx
16honestgreenpiratemy only complaint? you're making me love robin too much! seriously though - "a disarmingly dazzling grin" "his green eyes twinkled kindly" "His countenance lit up with warm, friendly sun" - thank god you put a bit of his ego in otherwise i would have completed melted and been useless! lovely to see allan being proper allan as well. i am of course worried about will, i always seem to be. it was the "whose smile looked more polite than heartfelt" bit.
anyway i really liked it! a delightful amount of detail!
also shakespeare quotes!
"If it were done, when 'tis done, then 'twere well it were done quickly." from Macbeth
and
"She is herself a dowry" from King Lear, it's a lovely sentiment.
and
"O woe is me!" could be any woman from any Shakespeare play - it just clamours to be used!
xx
11/26/2007 c3 honestgreenpirate
"She drank more wine, she sang progressively worse" - haven't we all? though perhaps it not quite such a depressing way, clearly this girl needs a bit of love from the outlaws.
and i head towards chapter four in the hope of finding this...
xx
"She drank more wine, she sang progressively worse" - haven't we all? though perhaps it not quite such a depressing way, clearly this girl needs a bit of love from the outlaws.
and i head towards chapter four in the hope of finding this...
xx
11/26/2007 c2 honestgreenpirate
oh cliff hanger... i'm so glad it's already updated so i don't have to wait! i'm terribly impatient.
i really liked "The physical tapped her on the shoulder again" - it's a very good image and more interesting than the conventional ways of explaining "suddenly she was paying attention again"...
my favourite shakespeare quote quite possibly ever is "o cursed spite" from hamlet - making sure not to forget the accent in cursed. if i think of more i'll let you know!
oh cliff hanger... i'm so glad it's already updated so i don't have to wait! i'm terribly impatient.
i really liked "The physical tapped her on the shoulder again" - it's a very good image and more interesting than the conventional ways of explaining "suddenly she was paying attention again"...
my favourite shakespeare quote quite possibly ever is "o cursed spite" from hamlet - making sure not to forget the accent in cursed. if i think of more i'll let you know!
11/26/2007 c1 honestgreenpirate
sensible heels - i should think so too!
and you scared me - i'm working for a borough council atm, dear god please not after christmas, it would be hell to be chained to one of their desks, everyone shouts at you! must actually something on gap year.
loved the whole thing over all but particularly the sound effect for the light (i'm completely rubbish at putting sound effects into words, just incapabable)
and after an odd review i'm just gonna go read the next chapter... x
sensible heels - i should think so too!
and you scared me - i'm working for a borough council atm, dear god please not after christmas, it would be hell to be chained to one of their desks, everyone shouts at you! must actually something on gap year.
loved the whole thing over all but particularly the sound effect for the light (i'm completely rubbish at putting sound effects into words, just incapabable)
and after an odd review i'm just gonna go read the next chapter... x
11/23/2007 c4 7reflect.clouds
haha it makes me laugh when she doesn't understand why they're so old fashioned! Absolutely brilliant, you have portrayed the characters to perfection. If this was a real book it would be a bestseller. And yes, you are the best on here. Everyone loves it, see? Just look at the amount of reviews =]
Now, in case you haven't gathered, I'm not very good at giving reviews. Which is bad. I have to start learning.
UPDATE *sign of my desparation for an update*
Fran xx
7reflect.cloudshaha it makes me laugh when she doesn't understand why they're so old fashioned! Absolutely brilliant, you have portrayed the characters to perfection. If this was a real book it would be a bestseller. And yes, you are the best on here. Everyone loves it, see? Just look at the amount of reviews =]
Now, in case you haven't gathered, I'm not very good at giving reviews. Which is bad. I have to start learning.
UPDATE *sign of my desparation for an update*
Fran xx
11/22/2007 c4 Angua von Uberwald
And yet another amazing chapter (: your descriptions are simply divine, if it's appropriate to use that word..
Keep up the good work my friend, I shall be awaiting the next installment with baited breath.
emily-anne.
And yet another amazing chapter (: your descriptions are simply divine, if it's appropriate to use that word..
Keep up the good work my friend, I shall be awaiting the next installment with baited breath.
emily-anne.
11/21/2007 c4 5MyDearDelirious
Another great chapter to a wonderful story, I anxiously await the next installment. Though I do have one thing to point out, in the last spoken sentence you wrote “And I doubt Gisbourne even knows of his existence, yet – another bow in our quiver.” I think you may have meant “another ‘arrow’ in our quiver”, just thought I’d mention it. Again excellent work.
Lot of love
MyDearDelirious
5MyDearDeliriousAnother great chapter to a wonderful story, I anxiously await the next installment. Though I do have one thing to point out, in the last spoken sentence you wrote “And I doubt Gisbourne even knows of his existence, yet – another bow in our quiver.” I think you may have meant “another ‘arrow’ in our quiver”, just thought I’d mention it. Again excellent work.
Lot of love
MyDearDelirious
11/21/2007 c4 17Andelin
Poor Robin - she didn't recognize him. Once again a great chapter. I wish Much would take care of me.
I think the gang was very well written.
Can't wait for more
17AndelinPoor Robin - she didn't recognize him. Once again a great chapter. I wish Much would take care of me.
I think the gang was very well written.
Can't wait for more
11/21/2007 c4 29RixxiSpooks
I love your precise description at the beginning ir made me laugh! Brilliant again! Outlaw speech fine! Update!
29RixxiSpooksI love your precise description at the beginning ir made me laugh! Brilliant again! Outlaw speech fine! Update!
11/20/2007 c4 2El Gringo Loco
an excellent addition to an already delightful story. Rose's confusion, not to mention the groups is quite amusing. Though I'd really rather not be in her situation. Watching her adjust to life in the middle ages. Which I'm guessing would probably be far easier than going the other way should be rather entertaining.
I wonder whatever the author might mean by Gisbourne planning a public spectacle? And since it's not likely to be anything Rose has seen in modern times. What role she might have in Robin's plans to disrupt it if he does?
I look forward to reading more.
2El Gringo Locoan excellent addition to an already delightful story. Rose's confusion, not to mention the groups is quite amusing. Though I'd really rather not be in her situation. Watching her adjust to life in the middle ages. Which I'm guessing would probably be far easier than going the other way should be rather entertaining.
I wonder whatever the author might mean by Gisbourne planning a public spectacle? And since it's not likely to be anything Rose has seen in modern times. What role she might have in Robin's plans to disrupt it if he does?
I look forward to reading more.