for Beyond The Sun11/18/2007 c3 
7reflect.clouds
I've decided to - finally - return the favour. After all, you review all of my chapters so I might as well review some of yours.
And a brilliant story! Rose is an excellant character; she captures that need to escape from the monotony of daily life that we all feel. I can't wait to see her reaction to where she's ended up.
So, pairings for this story? ((you probably did say - I'm just being foolish and forgetful again))
Update soon!
reflect.clouds x x
7reflect.cloudsI've decided to - finally - return the favour. After all, you review all of my chapters so I might as well review some of yours.
And a brilliant story! Rose is an excellant character; she captures that need to escape from the monotony of daily life that we all feel. I can't wait to see her reaction to where she's ended up.
So, pairings for this story? ((you probably did say - I'm just being foolish and forgetful again))
Update soon!
reflect.clouds x x
11/17/2007 c3 Angua von Uberwald
wow, i'm completely blown away by your writing. it's simply incredible, possibly the best i've seen on any writing site. it's also a huge bonus you happen to be writing about my favourite robin hood character, will scarlett (:
wow, i'm completely blown away by your writing. it's simply incredible, possibly the best i've seen on any writing site. it's also a huge bonus you happen to be writing about my favourite robin hood character, will scarlett (:
11/13/2007 c3 29RixxiSpooks
Tis brilliant, Pig, a masterpiece. I love your descriptions and long words (again!) its like a proper book. Wish I could write like that. Hehe, Much is funny, at first I thought it was Robin but with the hat and stuff. CC. Funny! Whats gonna happen now she's met the guys? And why was she naked? Ooh, so many questions are buzzing round my head right now. Dont take so long to update, ok?
29RixxiSpooksTis brilliant, Pig, a masterpiece. I love your descriptions and long words (again!) its like a proper book. Wish I could write like that. Hehe, Much is funny, at first I thought it was Robin but with the hat and stuff. CC. Funny! Whats gonna happen now she's met the guys? And why was she naked? Ooh, so many questions are buzzing round my head right now. Dont take so long to update, ok?
11/13/2007 c3 2El Gringo Loco
Ch 1-3 Well written and rather intriguing. One could wonder into which world it is that Rose has fallen? And into who's arms (litteraly)? The outlaws of Sherwood who might take her in? Townspeople, who might take her as a thief, a crazy woman or worse, a witch should she speak off our modern world? Perhaps even into the arms of Sir Guy or the sinister sherriff of Nottinghamshire? Who upon seeing her necklace (assuming she still has it), might decide to match it with a thick hempen one?
Ah but how to find out? Perhaps we should try feeding the author's ego with kind reviews. Then hope/pray that in response to our beseechments that long detailed updates will soon follow.
2El Gringo LocoCh 1-3 Well written and rather intriguing. One could wonder into which world it is that Rose has fallen? And into who's arms (litteraly)? The outlaws of Sherwood who might take her in? Townspeople, who might take her as a thief, a crazy woman or worse, a witch should she speak off our modern world? Perhaps even into the arms of Sir Guy or the sinister sherriff of Nottinghamshire? Who upon seeing her necklace (assuming she still has it), might decide to match it with a thick hempen one?
Ah but how to find out? Perhaps we should try feeding the author's ego with kind reviews. Then hope/pray that in response to our beseechments that long detailed updates will soon follow.
11/12/2007 c3 5MyDearDelirious
Wow, just… wow… This story is wonderful, beautifully detailed and descriptive with a wholly believable and relatable character. You are an artist and I have to say that this puts my own writing to shame. I can’t wait for an update it really is brilliant.
Love-
MyDearDelirious
5MyDearDeliriousWow, just… wow… This story is wonderful, beautifully detailed and descriptive with a wholly believable and relatable character. You are an artist and I have to say that this puts my own writing to shame. I can’t wait for an update it really is brilliant.
Love-
MyDearDelirious
11/12/2007 c3 17Andelin
Finally some outlaws. Yeah. But his story actually doesn't need any outlaws. It is extremly good with just Rose. I wish I could write like you. It seems as if you know absolutly where you want with every word you write. As if every sentence is there for a reason.
Really good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.
17AndelinFinally some outlaws. Yeah. But his story actually doesn't need any outlaws. It is extremly good with just Rose. I wish I could write like you. It seems as if you know absolutly where you want with every word you write. As if every sentence is there for a reason.
Really good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.
11/12/2007 c3 heather
really enjoying this
especially the way u describe Rose being dizzy
" it looked to Rose as though the entire world was roaring around her as a central point so rapidly that centrifugal force had pushed all of creation into bands of blurred colour ringing her: green, brown and blue"
look forward to reading more.
really enjoying this
especially the way u describe Rose being dizzy
" it looked to Rose as though the entire world was roaring around her as a central point so rapidly that centrifugal force had pushed all of creation into bands of blurred colour ringing her: green, brown and blue"
look forward to reading more.
11/7/2007 c1 7Chuckney
Hello! I'd like to say thanks to you all, so very much. Your feedback means so much to me!
It's not too long, is it? I know it's convoluted and you haven't seen hide nor hair of an outlaw yet by the end of Chapter 2 but concise just won't work, I've tried.
Chapters will probably be put up each week, and if it's going to take less or more time I'll let you know.
Thanks again for all your reviews - it makes it all doubly worthwhile, and they make me so happy! Thank you!
Love,
Pig.
7ChuckneyHello! I'd like to say thanks to you all, so very much. Your feedback means so much to me!
It's not too long, is it? I know it's convoluted and you haven't seen hide nor hair of an outlaw yet by the end of Chapter 2 but concise just won't work, I've tried.
Chapters will probably be put up each week, and if it's going to take less or more time I'll let you know.
Thanks again for all your reviews - it makes it all doubly worthwhile, and they make me so happy! Thank you!
Love,
Pig.
11/7/2007 c2 2Kae Marie
Well, your story is very well written and very captivating. I love the use of words and the description. So far it's one of my favorites in this fandom!
This story is going on my story alert list!
2Kae MarieWell, your story is very well written and very captivating. I love the use of words and the description. So far it's one of my favorites in this fandom!
This story is going on my story alert list!
11/5/2007 c2 29RixxiSpooks
Its brilliant, Pig. No I cant call you that it just sounds soo weird and rude. Totally against my bringing up, ha, great, now I sound like my mum. But seriously, it is fantastic, I like it a lot. I love the way you are building Rose's character up and all the description and big words you use. I can never do that! God, big words? I sound like a five year old.
I can't wait till you throw Rose into the world of the outlaws! That's if you are planning to do that? You arent just leading us on for the hell of it are you? Make sure you do update though because if you dont I won't update mine. Hehe, there's a dilemma for you, argh, I'm turing into the Sheriff, soon I'm gonna go bald and become malicious, manipulative and completely evil.
Update!
29RixxiSpooksIts brilliant, Pig. No I cant call you that it just sounds soo weird and rude. Totally against my bringing up, ha, great, now I sound like my mum. But seriously, it is fantastic, I like it a lot. I love the way you are building Rose's character up and all the description and big words you use. I can never do that! God, big words? I sound like a five year old.
I can't wait till you throw Rose into the world of the outlaws! That's if you are planning to do that? You arent just leading us on for the hell of it are you? Make sure you do update though because if you dont I won't update mine. Hehe, there's a dilemma for you, argh, I'm turing into the Sheriff, soon I'm gonna go bald and become malicious, manipulative and completely evil.
Update!
11/2/2007 c1 4Mage Ren
I don't know why you're scared, that was beautiful! I love your descriptions, a few of my favorites are "sensible heels clopping along the grimy pavement and making her sound like a particularly prim pony", "case swinging like a leathery modern-day answer to a battle-axe.", "the glaring spot", and "The second hand jumped into place, triumphant." Especially that last one, for some reason it makes me smile every time I read it. I know, I have an odd mind, but it really does. I'm looking forward to your next chapters!
4Mage RenI don't know why you're scared, that was beautiful! I love your descriptions, a few of my favorites are "sensible heels clopping along the grimy pavement and making her sound like a particularly prim pony", "case swinging like a leathery modern-day answer to a battle-axe.", "the glaring spot", and "The second hand jumped into place, triumphant." Especially that last one, for some reason it makes me smile every time I read it. I know, I have an odd mind, but it really does. I'm looking forward to your next chapters!
11/2/2007 c1 16Hallows07
You should not be so nervous just take a deep breath and plunge into it, your a really talented writer. I myself tried to write a Robin Hood BBC fanfic but my reviers didn't think it was my thing so iv'e tried other stuff and some love me and others are interested in my fics. Enjoy you're writing and so will your readers.
Great start though i'm hoping to read more soon, youre on my fave stories list bye, Hallows07 x
16Hallows07You should not be so nervous just take a deep breath and plunge into it, your a really talented writer. I myself tried to write a Robin Hood BBC fanfic but my reviers didn't think it was my thing so iv'e tried other stuff and some love me and others are interested in my fics. Enjoy you're writing and so will your readers.
Great start though i'm hoping to read more soon, youre on my fave stories list bye, Hallows07 x
11/2/2007 c1 226Zaedah
May I officially welcome you into the posting universe! See, I told you that you could do it! Okay, here goes.
"Her footsteps were brisk and purposeful, sensible heels clopping along the grimy pavement and making her sound like a particularly prim pony..." It's often the first sentence that a reader will use to determine the worth of your fic. If it lacks interest, fails to draw us in, we click the back button and move on to another. This beginning, with the 'prim pony' comparison, got my attention and kept me going.
"She had dropped the banner of her one-woman-protest." You have introduced us to a character on the cusp. She'd already given up her rebellion and joined the drone working ranks. We can all relate in some way. She is a girl in need of change. I have a feeling chapter two will bring that. I can't wait.
"...threw the rest of her wine into her mouth." This is what makes a writer. Not being satisfied with saying she drank the wine. No, she threw it! We have insight into her state of mind, her emotions, in just that one turn of phrase.
I've been waiting so very patiently for a Prophetess Piece. And now I have been rewarded. Keep going, with all speed!
(P.S. I love digitally remastered Disney! hee hee)
226ZaedahMay I officially welcome you into the posting universe! See, I told you that you could do it! Okay, here goes.
"Her footsteps were brisk and purposeful, sensible heels clopping along the grimy pavement and making her sound like a particularly prim pony..." It's often the first sentence that a reader will use to determine the worth of your fic. If it lacks interest, fails to draw us in, we click the back button and move on to another. This beginning, with the 'prim pony' comparison, got my attention and kept me going.
"She had dropped the banner of her one-woman-protest." You have introduced us to a character on the cusp. She'd already given up her rebellion and joined the drone working ranks. We can all relate in some way. She is a girl in need of change. I have a feeling chapter two will bring that. I can't wait.
"...threw the rest of her wine into her mouth." This is what makes a writer. Not being satisfied with saying she drank the wine. No, she threw it! We have insight into her state of mind, her emotions, in just that one turn of phrase.
I've been waiting so very patiently for a Prophetess Piece. And now I have been rewarded. Keep going, with all speed!
(P.S. I love digitally remastered Disney! hee hee)