for Bitterness8/19/2016 c5 Guest
The characterization in this is so AMA-ZA-ZING
The characterization in this is so AMA-ZA-ZING
7/1/2014 c5 AlexandriaClare
Love the story
Ps for John you could show him regret not being there while Alan grew up or something like that
Love the story
Ps for John you could show him regret not being there while Alan grew up or something like that
1/14/2012 c5 
6TBMom
It would be nice if you would just finish. Nothing worse than an unfinished story.
6TBMomIt would be nice if you would just finish. Nothing worse than an unfinished story.
1/11/2011 c5 Angel Delight 88
this is a very original story, but a shame that you haven't continued writing it.
would love to have chapters from both john and jeff.
AD88
this is a very original story, but a shame that you haven't continued writing it.
would love to have chapters from both john and jeff.
AD88
5/4/2010 c5 1chocolatelover1
... That's an interesting position to put Brains on lol
But hell, I'm not complaining. It fits. ^_^
Now I cant wait for the next chapter! and I am wondering on what happened to Alan anyway... Maybe I missed it in my speed reading... lol
Oh well, I'll will most likely re read it later :D
Anyway, update soon please!
1chocolatelover1... That's an interesting position to put Brains on lol
But hell, I'm not complaining. It fits. ^_^
Now I cant wait for the next chapter! and I am wondering on what happened to Alan anyway... Maybe I missed it in my speed reading... lol
Oh well, I'll will most likely re read it later :D
Anyway, update soon please!
5/3/2010 c5 dream lady
I know that this story was published some time ago but I would love you to update with the rest of the chapters with John and Grandma and Jeff. You capture the emotions so well, even Lady Penelope's chapter was totally believable. It was easy to see how she would have feelings for Jeff and thus Alan and the others would always be in the way. Please continue it is a unique way of viewing the Tracy's. Dream Lady
I know that this story was published some time ago but I would love you to update with the rest of the chapters with John and Grandma and Jeff. You capture the emotions so well, even Lady Penelope's chapter was totally believable. It was easy to see how she would have feelings for Jeff and thus Alan and the others would always be in the way. Please continue it is a unique way of viewing the Tracy's. Dream Lady
11/12/2009 c5 justwalkingdown
Very interesting story. I like it a lot, though I feel like your short-changing Alan somehow. One moment its about how wonderful he is, then about how annoying/evil he is. It was a little confusing (especially Brain's chapter) but I still really liked it. Very good grammer, spelling, sentence format, ect, and a great plot! Please update soon!
Fairy =)
Very interesting story. I like it a lot, though I feel like your short-changing Alan somehow. One moment its about how wonderful he is, then about how annoying/evil he is. It was a little confusing (especially Brain's chapter) but I still really liked it. Very good grammer, spelling, sentence format, ect, and a great plot! Please update soon!
Fairy =)
5/13/2009 c5 3StormiRaine65454
please write more this is very intertaining to me I loved Scott's POV it was amazing
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3StormiRaine65454please write more this is very intertaining to me I loved Scott's POV it was amazing
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